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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Oooh, interesting second chapter!

I am super intrigued with this strange relationship between Roxie and Benjamin and I would love to learn more about their past together-I liked the way you incorporated the flashback into this chapter. It flowed super nicely, and was a good way to give insight into the way the two of them met. Ben seemed super nasty in that flashback, and I find myself wondering what it is that drew he and Roxie together. Even now, he doesn't seem like a particularly nice character, but he must have a redeeming quality for someone as nice as Roxie to be friends with him.

I am eager to learn more about Benjamin's adoption, and maybe if he had some sort of horrible past that has made him the way he is today? I don't really know, that's just my guess. Also, will Scorpius appear in this story? Or is Benjamin an only child?

I'm really glad that Roxie stood up for herself against Ben and that she refused to let herself be treated badly. She seems to a strong, independent character, which I love, and I can't wait to see how her relationship with Ben develops. I also love the fact that you mentioned Percy saying that a handshake was always a good way to make friends, because that is just so Percy, and really brought me back to the books...sigh.

Your characters continue to be interesting, unique and different from each other. Your depiction of Dom I find especially interesting, mainly because I've never seen her written like that before. She seems very shy, and I find myself wondering if there is a reason behind the stutter.

Oooh, what's going to happen at Ben's place? I'm super anxious to find out...I really hope Roxie doesn't do anything stupid! Then again, bad decisions always make for very interesting plots, so maybe I do...

I can't wait to find out what happens next.

Author's Response: Hello!

Thanks so much for stopping by, its nice to see you back again of course. :3
I think alot of people are interested in Roxanne's relationship with Benjamin, there's a sense of attraction, hate and confusion thrown into the mix. Its very fun to write and here's a thing, the flashbacks continue on throughout this story so pay attention to them! They actually give more depth to the two of them and more reasons as to why they're friends. It might actually surprise you! Well, I hope so anyway.
I think Ben has some redeeming qualities but you might have to dig deep to find them just now. There's so much that he never says to Roxanne and so much that's changed and I think you might be able to see the difference between him in the past and how he is to Roxie now. might not like him. Hahaha.
You know, I have had questions about Benjamin's adoption. I have it all worked out in my mind of course but it is sort of shady and mostly sad because, well, I write angst and I'm depressing like that. Oh, Scorpius is in this story briefly (Someone else has asked) but he's only ten and is in another story of mine.
You would hope that Benjamin was an only child but he isn't. Sadly. Hahahaha.
Roxanne can handle Ben better than anyone else sometimes. It might be why he likes her, actually and their relationship actually takes an interesting turn later on. :D
Hahah, Percy. I love him, I truly do. He's the polite, stuffy git but in this universe, he's not as straight-laced or anything. I think he believes in manners more than George does, which would make sense, considering that George is like the most annoying person ever.
^ I love him though. :3
Oh, thank you! I have all the grandchildren's quirks and differences in my head and I didn't want to portray them as really perfect. Dom gets alot of attention, doesn't she? I actually have a reason for her stutter, and its more funny than sad but I haven't gotten around to talking about it. Someone might later. :D
Ah, Ben's place...well, you'll have to wait and find out! Lots of things happen and you might just hate me towards the sixth chapter. Hahhahaa.
Roxanne makes horrible decisions but she's very emotional. And Ben is.well, he's Ben and there aren't enough words to describe him. :D
I will re-request then! :)
Much love and thanks!

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