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Review:MrsJaydeMalfoy says:
I thought this was a very interesting first chapter, and I'm really interested to find out what happens next. I'm very curious about what's going on here; I think, judging from what I read, that the first part of this chapter is Lila's dream, and the rest is Ocora observing Lila during the dream... yes?

This held my interest from the beginning, but there were a few things I was confused about. For example, you said "He yelled and the lights went out", but then shortly after that you said "she yelled into the house and the lights went out"... I wasn't quite sure what was happening there, or who the "he" was.

I did notice some spelling and grammar issues that made things a little hard to follow at times; perhaps you could find a beta to help you with those (if you don't already have one)?

Overall, this is a very interesting and intriguing piece, and a great way to start the story! Good job!

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