Like I said, it always amazes me how you're able to write a male POV so well, even though you're a girl. It's rather baffling.
Also, I don't like this. I don't like this at all. Selene should not be judged, especially by people who do not know anything about her. Percy and his self-centered nature, I understand. I evenget Audrey'sreaction. But Hermione seemed really out of character. Any special reasons for that?
The line that really struck me in this chapter was how James said that babies are not mistakes and don't ruin lives. That, my dear, was excellently put. Commendable, really.
And one last thing- don't ever let a muzzle be put on James' mouth. His words are what lighten the entire scene. And his random facts reming me of Tea and her goldfish phase. I just love James!
Best of luck for your exams,
PS. I'm curious. Whose looking after Mr. sprinkles when everyone is at the burrow?
PPS. I'm sorry. This has to be one of my worse and least eloquent reviews. >:(
Author's Response: Well, thank you so much. I blame it on my brothers. I grew up around boys, so I'm sure that's a huge factor. And really, when writing James, I don't think of it so much as "you have to make him sound like a boy." It's more like "you have to make him sound like James." Because, really, the fact that I'm writing a male perspective doesn't matter. It's more that I'm writing James's persepctive. In the end, he's just another character. Does that make sense? It's actually the technique my favorite author for when he writes in a female POV (which he does often and extremely well).
As for Hermione, I always imagined her as having rather traditional values, when it comes to marriage and sex and all that. So therefore, she really wouldn't approve all that much of a teen pregnancy. Also, for reasons that have yet to be addressed, she doesn't particularly like Selene. Selene is a very difficult person to get along with, it's just difficult for the readers to pick up on because we're constantly in James's head and he does get along with her. So Hermione doesn't approve of the situation and doesn't approve of the person. But she also, being the very intelligent person she was, suspected that James was the father. She was just pushing for confirmation. It's not that she was trying to be mean or anything, she just wasn't happy. And, of course, there will be more of that explained in later chapters. I hope that kind of clears things up.
Yes, well, that subject got to be rather touchy with James because of Selene. And, of course, it's also my own opinion.
Thank you very much for everything, dear. You're the best!
P.S. He's alone for a few hours. They won't be at the Burrow all day, so he's just by himself for a few hours. It's like when Nick is away at class or something. Lily will be back to take care of him, don't you worry!
P.P.S. That's okay :) I still love it all the same!