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Review:my_voice_rising says:

I'm so glad you changed your summary! This story is really different from most other Oliver/OCs because of the pregnancy and now readers can see that clearly! :)

Aww, I love Grace running the opposite way up an escalator. How cute. And really funny about the wand being a weapon on airplanes... security is getting quite ridiculous these days, isn't it? ;)

It's so heartbreaking to read how much Grace is like her father. Poor Kim, having to watch her daughter grow up and be reminded of him every day; she's totally not over him, is she. :( And she's even got his love for flying--she got so excited about being in the airplane, whereas I think a lot of little kids would be nervous. She's just a little version of Oliver. So bittersweet!

I think my favorite thing about this chapter is seeing how much Kim has grown up, just between chapter one and now. She's really an adult--having a child totally transformed her, and you've done a really good job of portraying it. It's so awesome that you don't even have to specifically say "Kim had changed so much," because you do that all subtly through her dialogue and the way she interacts with Grace. So nice!

And yeah Kim, for telling her daughter the truth. I love that, and even more I love Grace's reaction--to pour more sprinkles on her cupcake. That's so much more realistic than when people have toddlers suddenly exhibiting great depths of sorrow and angst over lost parents. Just doesn't make sense to me. And can I just say that I don't even like children, but I love Grace? :)

BAARRRHHH! I've had way too much coffee for you to leave with a cliffhanger like that! Update soon!

And SWEET MERLIN I just saw your author's note. Thank you so much, that's so nice of you! XD I can't believe it. Thank you thank you thank you. ♥

Author's Response: You know, I should thank you for telling me to change the summary, because it got me more readers! Pregnancy stories, it seems, attract people like moths to a flame.

Airport security is the absolute bane of my existence -- I had a problem because of a suspicious looking hairclip lost in the depths of my handbag last time.

Poor Kim indeed, though I think a selfish part of her is happy to see Grace so similar to Oliver, because it gives her some power over him (though she will never, ever admit that's the case). I think. Generally though, it does make things harder.

I'm so, so happy you think Kim has evolved -- coming from you, who commented on the fact that she sounded fairly immature at the beginning, it's the best compliment ever.

Toddlers who express angst over lost parents irritate me. Sure, unconsciously I'm sure they feel it and it might have some impact on their development, but not to the point of them moping and being all depressed. Plus, Grace is too much like Oliver and Kiwi to mope. She runs up escalators and pours sprinkles over cupcakes instead.

Yes, you may love Grace. But you can't steal her, I'm keeping her for me!

You deserved that mention, and you'll be getting it again. Just so you know &hearts

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