I'm pretty sure I said this in an earlier review somewhere (and if not, then pretend I did, so I don't have to backspace that sentence), but I absolutely need to stop reading your chapters in the middle of classes. I am going to laugh aloud someday soon, and then the game will be up. That girl reads fan fiction when she should be listening to her professors! The scandal! The horror!
But are we really surprised. Nope.
There are so many good lines in this chapter -- I'll tell you again, you've got an unprecedented gift for humor and crack. :D I think one of the best things is all the little things you've managed to write in that Audrey's somehow connected to Percy being a vampire. The garlic food, when he was really just sick with nerves and greasy chips; the sunlight on his head. I caught myself externally grinning when she leaned across to check his pulse. ♥ Lulz. Audrey is just so funny; I don't even know how to begin coming up with a character like hers, because you've just made her so vivacious and lovable despite the fact that, well, she's just a bit batty. Only a little bit. It's easy, I think, to make characters in stories like this just absolutely ludicrous and over the top, but I just want to squish Audrey, and that is something I never expected to experience.
AND PERCY. ♥ ALL THE LOVE FOR PERCY. I adore him in this story. Absolutely love him. He's so awkward, and just a little bit nerdy, but for all that he's actually really sound and just so Weasley-ish. You've got a really great balance in his character, too; he can be silly and adorable, but he's so honest in his initial attraction to Audrey. And it really just makes me pull for them and want them to get together (poor Molly and Lucy, though, I will say here). I loved his thoughts on the Ministry, too, because that's actually probably a very realistic look at what did happen to him, after the Second Wizarding War. I can imagine a lot of higher-up would have been suspicious of him, keeping a close eye on him. Poor Percy. He gets no lovings.
I demand to know what happens next. Also, I really, really hope that Audrey actually tries to physically take Percy down at some point in the future, because I can already envision how hysterical that would be.
Write moar. ♥
Author's Response: Baww, thank you. Crack humor sometimes requires as much brainpower as angst, just because you have to be very deep in a certain mindset.
Audrey's characterization is a direct result of reading her as this stick-in-the-mud in every story I've ever read about her. It seems like an unfair punishment to Percy to pair him up with some snob, and that's exactly what it is. It's authors punishing Percy's lapse in judgement in the books by forcing him to coexist with a rude, uppity Mary Sue. Percy manned up in the end; he said he was sorry, and he did what was right. And with all of his own rigidness, he needs some spice in his life! Hence Audrey Bellpepper.
She's a bit of a parody sometimes, playing on the quirky girl thing. In the next chapter especially there are some things she does that is just outright crack for the sake of poking fun at quirky girl characters, but I had a lot of fun writing it. :3 I love not having to take Percy seriously. Percy takes himself seriously enough for all of us.
This turned into a ramble. Sorreh ~
Thank you endlessly for your support and for always reading my theengz and giving lovely feedback and being my number one reader. I think you make up a quarter of my overall reviews.