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Review:Tonks1247 says:
Ahahahaha! I don’t even know where to begin with this review! This chapter was so brilliant, I just don’t have words!

The introduction to the story is sort of typical, with the character coming out with their name pretty quickly. The thing I adore? The rant that went off from there. She goes off about the different parts of her name, how she hates it, and then she goes on to her siblings and their names. I was laughing so hard, it was ridiculous. I liked your creative use of different languages too to come up with the middle names. Very creative and definitely things that stuck in my head. I loved her siblings name, if I didn’t mention that…and her parents ‘new’ names. Very funny that they picked the strangest names to replace their ordinary ones. It was just…I couldn’t stop laughing. Even better that she was filling out a census for her family too xD

And from there? Honestly? Everything was just great. I loved how you incorporated a check list of sorts that Pepper was working through…and the fact that it kept changing. Really just excellent. Especially when it got to the point where her parents wouldn’t let her ride the night bus. I mean, the first place she ends up is the roof? Not quite where I would go but it was an interesting choice and actually added a different sort of depth to Pepper’s character [or I could just be crazy xD]. But really, I loved the entirety of the chapter and Pepper’s character. She is so different and so entertaining…I really can’t wait to see if a howler comes and how that all works out…And meeting the Weasley’s! Gosh, that’s just soo exciting! :D

A couple things though, really quick:

“I’ve done my part of the caring, so don’t worry, I’m only coming back with my Rose, Albus and Louis in a few days’ time. We might not even come here, so don’t expect to see me again.” –‘I’m only coming back with my Rose, Albus…” I don’t know if that was intended to have the ‘my’ in it or not as it really doesn’t fit…

“I’m sorry, Lolli. But I have to go, to my friends’ house, before school!” And I was a bit nitpicky with this one but there really doesn’t need to be a comma in the second sentence at all.

And to leave this off, I’ll end with my favourite quote (Though I quite enjoyed the whole chapter): “(or is it a fruit, like tomatoes? Why are tomatoes called tomatoes anyway? Maybe someone called Tom discovered them with his toes…)” I died laughing with this line! :D

Great job! Awesome chapter! I hope to be back to read more soon! :D


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