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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review!

This is certainly an interesting beginning to a story. Even though you didn't specify it in the genre section, is it AU-ish? Not that I mind- I love reading about alternate universes. I was just wondering because it looked as though you'd changed a few facts, such as Igor Karkaroff's age and his involvement on Voldemort's side. But please correct me if I'm wrong. :)

As for your plot, I think that you're off to a great start with it. It's an interesting idea that a potion can increase your magical powers, though I hope that you go into further detail about how the potion works in a later chapter since increasing your magical powers would definitely be something that wizards and witches would be interested in and it's surprising that others haven't used the potion before (though I suppose that they might have and just not recorded their use). As well, increasing your magical abilities through a potion sounds a little far-fetched, so it will be interesting to see how you explain the logic behind the potion.

The way you had Karkaroff manipulate Severus was well done, though I'm curious as to why his parents were murdered. If that was one of the only things that they were able to hold over his head, it wouldn't make sense for them to rid themselves of it. Now, it's far more likely that Severus won't help them make the potion, which will prevent Karkaroff from becoming the second most powerful wizard. Could you explain the logic behind this choice (unless, of course, it comes into play in a later chapter)? Was it simply a foolish move on Voldemort's part?

I think that you did a fantastic job with your description in this chapter. It was very easy to visualize what was happening and the words flowed very smoothly from one to the next.

For the paragraph that starts with "You are late." I had some trouble identifying who said which sentences until I realized that Karkaroff had said both things. I think that it would be less confusing if you included a reference to his cigarette in the "he said..." sentence.

All in all, I think that you did a great job with your first chapter. It's very intriguing to see what Severus does next, since it looks like this is the moment where he will turn to Dumbledore's side (a change from the usual assumption of how his role as a spy began). Thanks for requesting and I hope that my comments are helpful! Feel free to re-request!

Author's Response: Hello there!

You brought questions!

First off, I don't consider this story to be AU. I have definitely taken a different spin and given unorthodox interpretations to certain canonical and fanfic "ideas". If it makes it better for you to call what I did AU, then I won't be offended. ;)

I'm not sure canon actually says how old Karkaroff is exactly. We know he was marked before Voldemort disappeared, so he must have been a Death Eater in the first war. Other than his time in Azkaban after that and his appointment to Durmstrang, I don't think canon has anything else to say about him during this time period. If you have other information about him, I'd love to know.

You should be curious as to why his parents were murdered. The only thing we know right now is what Severus thinks has happened. The logic I used was this: he's such a newbie at this point in time that he doesn't see himself having much choice in anything. He does or dies. He's grown frustrated by being constantly manipulated by the authority figures around him, as most anyone would.

As far as his motivations go, things become clearer in chapter two, or maybe three... I can't remember.

Thanks for your detailed and thoughtful review! I would love to re-request!

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