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Review:makemeover says:
hey there - makemeover from the forums here!

I'll start out by saying - I have nothing bad to say about this! I loved it. I tend to get easily bored with fluff but I wouldn't have been able to stop reading without finishing this, which is awesome because stories that you just HAVE to finish are the best.

I read this without having read even the summary of the prequel/original story, and there was nothing confusing about it in anyway. It's definitely a great stand-alone one-shot and I agree that's it's complementary to the first and not obligatory, and vice versa.

The thing I loved the most was how absolutely sugary-sweet Teddy was without being overbearing or nauseating. He really just loves Victoire and thinks about her all the time. My favorite part of the entire story was at the very beginning when he kisses her on the forehead. It's so sweet and simple. Not that kissing someone on the lips is over-played (I think it's impossible to over-play that), but it was a nice change.

I also like that Victoire seems a little clumsy and has no "household charms," as well as having red hair. With Fleur as her mother, it's easy to see why writers usually make her very elegant and poised with great manners and long blonde hair and all that jazz. It was nice to see her as more of a regular person than a straight up Veela. Her only questionable trait, though, was that sometimes she seemed a little formal. I'm not sure how you picture her in your head and for all I know that's exactly how she's supposed to be. But the way she speaks to Teddy sometimes is a little too proper for someone who's casually speaking to their live-in boyfriend.

I was expecting a little more nervousness and anxiety from Teddy throughout the story, just because of the story description. The story isn't bad without it, it just doesn't match the description as well as it could.

And lastly, I would have loved to see a little more emotion or excitement during the proposal scene. It just seems a little rushed. I realize it's a longer one-shot but I would have rather seen a longer proposal scene than maybe some of the earlier parts. I realize it's hard to delete things after you've written them, especially because your details are amazing (I love the parts describing the foods and flowers!), but I think the proposal scene could be a little longer and more detailed. After all, it's what the entire story leads up to.

It was definitely a great one-shot though and you've opened my eyes to a new and beautiful couple that I'd never really paid much attention to before! I'll definitely be keeping a look out for them in the future, as well as reading the prequel to this. I'm intrigued! I hope this all was helpful :)

Author's Response: Very helpful! :) I can see what you mean, and when I upload my chapter image, I'll make some of the changes you suggested. I'm so glad you liked it, and thank you so much for your review! :)

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