I think we should all read each others stories and edit them, agreed.
A quick note on my review (posted now). Giving criticism is easy; anyone can get online and post what they think about anything. Receiving criticism on the other hand is very difficult. Putting something that you created – that you have an emotional attachment to – out there to be poked and prodded is never an easy thing. And then to ask people to tell you the good, the bad, and the ugly about what you’ve created is even harder. It’s acknowledging that your writing has flaws (and everyone’s writing has flaws…even JKR…after all, how did Fred and George never notice Peter Pettigrew hanging out in Ron’s room for three years.)