You should update for my birthday :) A good Harry/Kally chapter on May 10th, please.
Also, you should stop leaving us on chapters where the two are fighting - it hurts the heart Report Review
It's been almost 2 years since the last update PLEASE
don't be abandoned! Report Review
Re-reading again... And I noticed something this time around. You mention him closing the book twice. Small matter, just thought I'd point it out. :) Report Review
I love Eclipse of the Sky; everything about it. And I love you, Firefawn, for imagining up this amazing AU. BUT I need to know what happens. My very, very vague memories of your Quizilla days are all that are comforting me. It's been a year since the last update :(. Please tell me you haven't run out on us again, I'm pretty sure my heart can't take that again.Author's Response: I have most definitely not abandoned it (again) lol. I just figure that given how long it's been since it was started (as were going on nearly a decade here? lol) that I might as well not post anything until the thing is done (or nearly done) and just post it all up at once for you guys. Unless you guys would prefer very slow segments still? Report Review
AMAZING! I absolutely love it, there better be more or else :D
I love how Kaylens is so individual and feisty. Yours is one of the best origional characters I have read, she has merged in with the cannon characters so smoothly it almost seems as though she should be in the films and everything.
Great work! Report Review
Ahhh omg youre amazing!! when are you gonna update? Report Review
You do realize that what you are doing is cruel right?? I mean do you not know that the LAST Harry freakin Potter came out a while ago. If not let me tell you, it has. Oh yes, I was at that premiere balling my eyes out when the credits came on!! SO I go home at 4 (setting my lovely alarm to be at school by 8) comforting myself with the fact that your stories still going. So I wait for its wonderful nourishment, and wait, and wait, and wait, and wait, AND WAIT!!! Do you know that i have not been able to look at a single Harry Potter ANYTHING yet. I tear up still every time!!! And lets be honest, your husbands not going anywhere!! XD!! It realy wont harm him if he goes to the gym or to see a friend for a couple of hours while ya dish out a MERCIFUL chap!! Now I'm pretty sure you were supposed to update about oh 3 months ago -___-; so this is my own assurance that you know that I am placing full responsibility on you as the harbor-er of my pain!!! Update soon yeah :D!! Haha XD.
*Ur fan in pain animelover56348(Raven)* Report Review
Congratulations on graduating!! Good luck with the new job! I will still be waiting patiently for the next chapter :] Report Review
When are you going to update??
I'm dying for the next chapter!Author's Response: Shall do soon! I graduated end of August and started a new job so its honestly been INSANITY! I have a chapter half done now though so it should be up this week! :) Settling into a normal routine at work now as well so that will make writing MUCH easier! :) Sorry about the delay I PROMISE it's not me running off on the story (again) lol Just transferred departments in the hospital and until they got me a replacement in my original unit, I was working BOTH jobs. (Read as: Sleep and I have mised each other!) lol Report Review
Harry and Kally's banter is my favorite. Well, that and Regulus's sarcasm. Great amusement always follows these two things.
Harry is just a mess when it comes to girls. He would have to go and say things the wrong way making Kally run away from him. Sigh! But why would he make things easier for himself? It's just not in his nature :)
Poor Remus. Just one thing after another with him, isn't it? Now you leave him alone for a while, firefawn, OK? He just needs to know everything is gonna be a-okay.
I'm surprised Hermione's already back! (In a good way of course...I was expecting her to have to go through another ordeal just to get back to her friends) I'm excited to see what happened between when she and Krum left and when she got back to Hogwarts. And I am rooting for Krum being one of the good guys. I've always liked him, and it's always a good thing to have more spies for the good guys :)
Again, I'm so glad you're back, and I am really looking forward to seeing what the next chapters bring! Report Review
I love your Dumbledore. He is the exact one I imagine him to be (with that mysterious all-knowing quality and all of his unique quirks -- like turning the firetruck into a toy and equipping people with conditional portkeys).
As always, your imagery is outstanding. I like how you take care to include the smallest details so we get a clear picture of what is happening (like this: "A rat that was emaciated, as if it had lost too much weight too quickly, leaving its skin flopping around on its bones." I could've pictured any old rat, but your addition of this detail adds so much more to the story). I can easily play a movie of the story in my head as I am reading.
I also like the progression of Harry and Kally's relationship. The pacing is just right where it seems natural, and I don't find myself asking where that came from. I want to see how it progresses when they're around their friends and others their own age :)
Also, poor Harry. I feel that he has so much pent-up angry emotion he needs to let out (Bellatrix, Peter, etc). I want to take him and put him in a room with the magical equivalent of a punching bag so he can just let it all out! Report Review
Oh man was that a battle! I could tell it was going to be a dangerous one, and it seemed hopeless (you had me scared there!). Then the Order arrived. Hope once again returned :). The action was always going, nonstop. Gripping action, at that...The decriptions were very good; I could easily picture the whole battle. You made it clear that there were fights in the background as well as the foreground of the characters' POVs. I thought this was good because it's the first big battle that we are seeing, and it emphasizes that it was an important one. The face-off between Harry and Voldemort was one of my favorite scenes of this chapter. Very visual. Such a unique take on what would happen, and it is very believable. I almost wish we could've seen how it would've ended...but then that would mean this story would be over (or close to it), right? Yeah, I don't want that just yet lol. I'm excited to see how the phoenix will play into the rest of the story...they're such fascinating creatures.
Oh, and I also really enjoyed Fred and George's entrance into the battle. I love seeing their products being used during battles, and the tar eggs (that are specific to Death Eaters!!!) are a great idea!
But Tonks AND Dumbledore?? I hope they're actually OK, though it doesn't seem likely :( Report Review
After rereading the earlier chapters and then going straight to reading the recently updated ones, I will say that you did a great job meshing the chapters. It's like I'm reading this story back in the day, but with some subtle improvements. I've noticed fewer grammatical errors, and I haven't seen any cliched statements that you sometimes used before.
I like your used of magical creatures in this story. JKR does a fine job of intermingling magical creatures with her main ones (no surprise, it is her world, after all), and you definitely continue this aspect in your story, and then some.
That was one of the most evil cliffies I've read. What? Do you just throw our favorites into situations then think, "What can I do to make it even harder for them?" Yup, I think that's how it goes down :P Good thing I don't have to wait to see what happens next! Report Review
I must say I'm glad you have posted a lot of chapters before I checked to see if you had updated because HOLY CRAP this chapter. Seems like the main action is starting for our young heroes, and so quickly, too!
I don't think I've mentioned before how much I love your Tonks. The comic relief she often provides is hilarity. It's nice to characters not completely jaded from all the evil in their world. I think you do a good job in exploring how each character copes with the harsh happenings in their lives.
You know, for a while there I thought the girl being tortured was a random first year. Silly me, of course you don't do things randomly. I should've guessed that it was Tiffany all along!
On to the next chapter! :) Report Review
ASDFKLHGI;OAEWG;AKJ;DS ! You're BACK!!! I've been a fan of yours since you were writing on quizilla, and I am so glad you have decidede to continue with this story! SO glad. I also reread this story to refresh my memory on what's taken place so far, and I must say I've fallen in love with Eclipse of the Sky all over again.
This chapter was just awesome! It seems like I just picked up reading from before your hiatus. Your style is like no other, and I am glad to be able to read something from you again :) This story is just so dark (and it seems completely natural for it to be this way), but then you have the little scenes that breathe fresh light into the atmosphere. The suspense in this chapter is killer! I just keep reading and before I know it, I'm at the end! Harry and Kally's relationship is one of my favorites! They can go from bickering to acting tenderly in the blink of an eye. Their interactions are such great fun to read. And I must say, it's pretty funny how he tried to get Kally not to join the Order for her protection, when being kept out of things for his protection is the very thing he hated the adults for doing. And the hints you've dropped this chapter of things to come! Especially all of the very evil things to come. It just adds to the suspense. Oh, and I'm very interested to see what a phoenix has to do with Harry. This review has been all over the place, but I'm too excited to finish catching up on this story to fix it so it has some semblance of order. Hope it makes sense as is :) Report Review
AH! No, no, no, what a cruel chapter to end on! I have read way too much in these past days and I am telling you I would read another 10 chapters right now if they were up! Hermione is back so where is Viktor?! Everyone is alive, I was worried you were going to make Tonks the first tragic death.
I really hope the new chapter will be up soon! You've been kickin butt at getting them up since you started though so I really cannot complain if it takes a little bit (:
You really captured Harry perfectly there, he has never known how to deal with girls very well has he? He thinks he is protecting her from dear ol' Voldy and now she thinks he's too embarrassed or something to tell everyone that he lurves her.
This is my third review of the day so sorry that it is not very long! I am very tired I went rafting today and this was the perfect way to end my day, I will promise to try to leave one of my good old fashioned really long reviews next chapter.
Love the chapter, love the story, love you...all that good stuff (;
xx Missy Report Review
I'm sorry but this has been driving me insane for quite a while. Not sure if you're aware or if this is a dialectic sort of phenomenon, but: “Drag” is a regular verb, which means you add “d,” “ed,” or in this case “ged” to make it past tense. “Drag” becomes “dragged.”
I can't include a link but Dragged vs Drug may be found on the site Grammar Girl. I thought I was going insane, contemplating whether I've been conjugating the word drag incorrectly.
Sorry. Just thought I ought to let you know. :P
Wonderful work btw.Author's Response: While I"m glad you like it...if you're going to GAH at people in reviews do try to realize the following: This is fanfiction, which means I write it quickly and usually on no sleep. I don't worry about things like grammar or tiny mistakes to be honest. I promise you I am not a dumb idiot who has no concept of the English language when that's my native tongue. ;) I though, like every other human on the planet, do make mistakes when in a hurry, despite actually knowing the difference. If this seems sardonic I apologize, but the GAH-ing is kind of a disdainful way to point things out. You've basically called me a moron and shouted in disgust at my lack of 'ability' to edit things. This is half the reason I gave up on fanfiction to begin with after I was ill. I was VERY sick of the nitpicking that people did on things. I figure people eitehr like it, or don't, but I'm not a fan of nitpicking in real life or online, so I'm certainly not going to deal with it for a hobby. I have a FT job at a hospital and go to school, I have better things to worry about than possibly having some conjugation errors. The detailed explanation as if I'm a moron is quite insulting. I don't mean to be mean or anything, but it is a big issue I have. If people don't like something, then go for it, but nit picking people's 'hobby' when they do not have to spend time writing at all is a bit much to actively set out to do. Report Review
Ah I am in the shout outs! Still gives me lil butterflies every time I am mentioned anywhere from you :D
I swear it's like you never left, sure some things are repetitive or whatnot but I really don't feel like I see that much of a change in your writing as I'm getting into the new chapters from the old.
Your writing is my favorite, I can so clearly imagine in my head what you're writing, hear familiar voices, hear the ones I've got made up in my head for Kally & Regulus and people like that, when I'm reading your story I am completely in a different world if only for the freaking 45 minutes it takes me to read a chapter! Maybe not that long, or maybe longer I am not really keeping track, but I have never been one to complain about the lengths of your chapters (;
Now I only have one new chapter to go! Hopefully they keep coming at the rate they have been because I don't think that I can wait much longer! I'm going to take a little break before I read the last one because I can feel that I was having to reread a couple things because I think I've just been reading way too much the past two days, my brain is overloaded! Want to fully appreciate this next chapter, ah Harry & Kally snogging...always makes me so happy.
Love the chapter, love the story, love you...all that good stuff (;
xx Missy Report Review
I have finally made it to a chapter that I haven't left a review on! I know that you started writing this again a bit of time ago now but I've been so busy with work n whatnot that it's taken forever for me to catch up to the new chapters only because I really wanted to reread the whole story and not just skim over it to fully re-appreciate it and get my love going for it strong once more. And let me say, that love is a burnin! When they start mackin it in the forest I still feel the happiness I felt when I was like 14 hahahahaha, and the scenes of her dreaming or Harry seeing what happened with her family still make me cry, no joke, cry like a little baby. This story has such a strong grip on my heart and I am still so happy that you are finishing it, it's like a part of me is being filled again! The void is no more!
anyways, I'm going to keep going, I don't even know how many chapters I've read since last night but my eyes are getting tired and once I can't process anymore information I'm going to take a break and let my brain rest til I continue, because now we're getting to the juicy new stuff!
Reading the scenes between Harry & Kally always have been and always will be my favorite, I can practically feel the passion between them inside my very core, you're practically my favorite writer, and not just of fanfiction!
K onto the next, I will try to leave an actual review of the next chapter about things that I am liking or confused about or something, I'm having a hard time thinking of things right now it's all comin' back to me now!
Love the chapter, love the story, love you..all that good stuff (;
xx Missy Report Review
I'm glad you're writing again. I've been reading your stuff since I first came across it on Quizilla more than 8 years ago. Keep it up.
KitAuthor's Response: Thanks Kit, I'm glad that you like it still and that's shocking that you read this on Quizilla. That was SUCH a long time ago! lol Thanks for sticking with it. Sorry btw if I seem a bit snarky in the other review reply, but the grammar pointing out thing tends to get me ;) It's just a quirk I have b/c I know that there are plenty of errors, and to be honest, I just don't care. lol Anyways, thanks again as always. ;) Report Review
I got Gomer back today and did the first thing that came to mind...well ok second. I hugged my lappy as he was missed and then hit fanfiction as I was sure the new chapter would be up by now...Sighs. Hands friefawn a white rose...The card reading "soon my friend?"
This chapter is just..just OUTSTANDING and I don't wanna wait for more.
EmmanuelleAuthor's Response: Hey there Emmanuelle! Yup I'll have it in about 2 week-ish. I got busy graduating, along with work, finals before graduating, and then it's just been busy overall. lol I promise though I haven't forgotten about this or anything. ;) My days off work have actually (for a chance) coincided with my husband (who I barely saw due to our work schedules conflicting during the summer for more than a few hours at night at a time) so I naturally spent my days off with him doing outdoorsy things. :D I just need a good couple of days to sit down and work on/finish the next chapter and it'll be out, but this week (it's the 29th of August) I've got work and shooting for the Avengers (I'm an extra in it) so it's a bit crazy for another couple of weeks until things are done. :D Report Review
Its Saturday of the second week in August :( Still waiting tho :)Author's Response: Hey there dieingsoftly! I am definitely working on it but have had a plethora of things going on. Had my wedding anniversary and got a couple weekends off with the husband for once so I spent it with him rather than writing. :) The chapter will be up soonish but I've got to get a few days to work on it. lol Report Review
In response to your author's note: but plot holes make everything so much more interesting!
I have to say, I love the injections of muggle world happenings from the muggle pov! It makes the whole thing feel much larger. Also, Regulus has quickly become my favorite character in your story. Will we be seeing more of him soon?
*heart!* Report Review
Oh my goodness, I was thoroughly surprised when I decided, on a whim break from rewriting my own story after gods only know how long, to see that you've been writing this one again! I actually reread this story less than a year ago. Funny how things like that happen.
I've only read this chapter, but I wanted to say hello, and that I'll be doing some reading over the next few days to get caught up :)Author's Response: *dies* Ksher man, thanks so much for actually checking this after such a long break of YEARS! It is greatly appreciated! I've been trying to update it at least once a week (if not more often) since I got back about...2 months ago, to HPFF, but I'm a little bit behind on the next chapter (combination of a virus going around the hospital unit I work in, a lot of coworkers on vacation, midterms and coursework this summer, and then a neighbor having surgery and helping out with them now that they are home) but I'm hoping to get it up within the next...week and a half, and get to replying to all these other reviews that I am behind on! *apologies profusely to everyone for that* But I'm so glad that you were actually able to reread this story without ya know, growling in my general direction for not having finished it yet! *squishes you and thanks profusely* Hopefully the new chapters aren't too disappointing! I'm a wee bit rusty but going to be working out the kinks hopefully soon! Report Review
So I finally found some time to read the chapter! Yay! You know the great thing about having very little time for reading the new chapters means I have little time to go crazy waiting for you to update again. Silver lining? Except now I've got caught up and I still have to wait... hrm, need some new busy work.
Anyways... AH HA! See, here's a prime example of "Classic Harry". I told you he was incapable of not doing stupid things. He's got that "must save everyone because everybody's death is my fault" syndrome going on. (Isn't there some kind of medication for that? At the very least I think he should look into a good therapist...) And Kally of course really doesn't know Harry all that well (a fact that's easy to forget given how much they've been through together and the strange bond they've forged) so she of course takes it the wrong way. Ah I love the smell of drama in the morning... er, evening, it's evening right now...
I was really surprised to see Hermione in the picture. I was fairly certain Krum was a good guy (or at the very least cared for Hermione enough to keep her safe even if he did truly support the Death Eaters) but I was expecting another piece from their POV before she made it back safely. Actually with your track record I wasn't expecting her to get back safely for a long while, so give your self props for surprising me. I'm curious to see where you're going with Krum because he CAN still be a bad guy, and this is all just part of the plan.
Poor Remus just can't seem to ever catch a break. You need to be nicer to the poor man =P or I'm afraid that he'll collapse from all the awful luck he's got. He better make sure that Kally's portkey works, or I'll personally see to it that he regrets it *shakes fist*. Kally doesn't need him to shut her out.
And just when is the Ministry going to collapse on itself? I swear to God all they seem to know how to do it mess stuff up. Do they really think that any good could possibly come from shutting Hogwarts down? Don't answer that, I know they can't tell their noses from their feet...
And again, Regulus is hilarious. Although in this chapter we get to see a bit deeper into his personality, and it's nice to see that he's got feelings beyond sarcasm. I think he needs a big hug from Tonks. That should go over well and do wonders for his mood *evil chuckle*
I had one question I forgot to ask last time regarding Kally's powers. In the last chapter she used her powers to find Wormtail. I get how she did that. Harry was right next to her and so he was able to feel and see what was going on, I get that too. My question is, how did the Ministry officials not feel her drawing? You describe the process as something that I would assume would be very unmistakable if you knew what it was and if you didn't it would definitely be something that you would question, so I can't imagine that they felt it and just ignored it. Is it just that they were too far away (that's what I'm assuming), and if so, what's the approximate range for feeling a Reach's drawing? What I mean (because I'm not sure how clear I'm being) is how close can one get to a Reach as they are drawing and still not feel the affects of the drawing itself? I'm very curious about the whole thing. Is it the farther away you are, the less you can feel it until there is nothing to be felt? Or is it that once you've stepped into the "zone" so to speak you feel the full effect, no matter where in that zone you are, until you step back out? I'm guessing a big part of it is how much drawing is being done (sucking the life out of someone vs. searching for a living thing), but what else is involved? I may be asking you something that you've just never thought of before (wouldn't be the first time... for some reason my mind works in mysterious ways and I want answers for things that no one else would ever care to know... drives the boyfriend crazy sometimes) and if that's the case don't worry about it. BUT if you're like me and every possibility and detail must be mapped out, then please share! Perhaps this would be better answered on the forums. If so let me know because that will be great motivation for me to get over there =P
Well, I think I'm out of comments. Get through your crazy shifts, tell your coworkers to stop getting sick so that you don't have to work crazy shifts, do good on your midterms, and get some sleep!! Then get us the next chapter. Report Review
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