It says that the rings were on their right hands, but engagement rings go on the left hand! Great chapter otherwise though :) Report Review
I really like the writing in this chapter, the characters are interesting, and I have already gotten hooked, but all the use of random words is incredibly distracting, and rather annoying at times. Other than that I love it! Report Review
This is a really good chapter, but it was ruined somewhat by all of the random words that kept popping up instead of what was intended. Report Review
Still got me hooked!!!😄 Report Review
Congrats on another great chapter of this amazing story!! (Oh and by the way, my real last name is Moody) Report Review
I've really enjoyed reading your story; I've read lots, but none of them have had me hooked like this one. Many nights I have stayed up thinking 'I'll just read one more chapter' and I end up reading until I fall asleeP in my chair and my mum yells at me the next morning when I have to go to school. Really, this is the best fanfic I have read, and I've read millions. Keep writing! I hope you have done more fanfics, and will search them when I have finished reading this one (if ever! Not that that's a criticism, I just keep on reading it again and again, because it always sorta 're-hooks' me.) No criticisms, apart from the fact that here, in Britain, we dO have some different words and we don't have a graduation ceremony like you do (However, I do think your graduation ceremonies are a great idea). (Please forgive me of you're not American. And also please I don't have anything against American people. Because I don't. I love your accents!). Anyway thank you so much for sticking with this story, keep writing, and I wouldn't be surprised if, in the future, you were a world renowned author! Report Review
Wow, I really enjoyed this story! It was super addicting. I think I read all 78 chapters in about a week. I've been sort of writing my own story about Lily, and I have to admit that I am writing her character a bit differently, but I still enjoyed your Lily. I like how at the end James made it really simple by giving Lily an ultimatum. Obviously it was really hard for her, but it was also really simple. I liked that, it definitely got me thinking. At first, I was a little disappointed with the ending, but after reading your reasons, I agree with it. I feel like James and Lily did have a happy ending even if they were murdered. I really liked your style of writing. I think you're especially good at romance scenes. Those are the ones that really came alive to me. Anyway, I really really liked this and I hope to read some of your other stuff! :) Report Review
The only problem I had with your terribly addicting story is that there was hardly any mention of Severus. For someone who loved Lily Evans so completely (in Rowling's books), I naturally assumed that adaptations created by fans would have a stronger character development for Snape.
However, this is your story and you can do with it what you will. Great job! Report Review
Dammit Lily! Why are you so bloody stubborn! Dont you dare get in the way Ray! Report Review
Argh damn you Lily! How could you be so facking oblivious and heartles?! Report Review
Lily flipping Evans, you stupid, little, motherflapping dumbarse. God im so pissed at you right now Evans. Im surprised that none of her friends shrieked at her yet. Dammit Lily! Report Review
i agree with the last reviewer, although i think the actual lily and james potter may have been a little bit less complex. I think HPFF writers like yourself put a bit more into the characters so that we love and feel for them more. We go more into more depth for what there feeling so we feel more emotional and understanding when we read. In reality im sure James and Lily never did break up after they got together in seventh year, however it does make the story more interesting and more of a emotional rollercoaster! who wants to read a story where they get to together and live peacefully until they well you know murdered. by the way i adore your story, and this is the second time iv read it. great job! Report Review
You changed the summary, dint you?
Btw, its like my favourite story. Most favourite. :D
I associate with Lily in so many places... I have reviewed before with the name Navya and now I finally made an account.. You have written it so, so well. :)
And can you please give me the link about where you have written about the dreams Lily used to have? Report Review
WRITE AN EPILOGUE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE!! This story was so great, although I did wonder what happened to Lynn and Lily's dreams. Great job, and again, please write an epilogue! Report Review
I LOVE THIS FANFIC. OMG OMG OMG Report Review
YAY THEY'RE GONNA GET MARRIED THIS IS SO EXCITING! I love this story :) Report Review
Oh this story makes me so happy :) great job! 11/10! Report Review
Bloody amazing. I couldn't put my phone down for days. Please please write an epilogue:))
Xxx you are so talented Report Review
Loved your story from the first line to the last, read it straight in a week!!!
Keep writing wonderful stories!! Report Review
That was ... brilliant! The whole story, I started to reading this yeasterday and I just simply couldn' stop! So thank you for amazing characters, awesome plot and extra thanks for that you didn't write about their death, because that always makes me incredibly sad... You're an amazing writer :) Report Review
I'm not even joking I've cried for the past 5 chapters :'( Report Review
to be honest I don't know what to write in this review.
I just want to say thank you for this story. I just started reading the first chapter yesterday and I'm sad to see it finished. anyways, this was a truly amazing story.
thank you. Report Review
What happened to Lily being a seer? Report Review
Finally finished reading! This is one of the best story so far, and I like your writing style as it's so similar to J.K.R's.
Looking forward to the epilogue! :) keep writing! Report Review
This is my third time reading this and I still get really excited and happy and bouncy and truly freak out!! I absolutely adore this story and hope you write more stories in the future!! Report Review
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