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Review #1, by SunshineDaisies Fabian and Gideon

16th April 2017:
THIS STORY HAS BEEN CALLING OUT TO MY SOUL. I love everything about the first Order and I love reading stories about them, even if they are a bit sad. I'm especially excited for this particular story, as I'm very interested in seeing Elphias's impression of each of the fallen members. I'm interested in seeing what you think of the first order as well. Everyone has different opinions on their characterization, and because there's no canon, no one is wrong!

That said, I love your characterization of Fabian and Gideon. They're some of my favorite ridiculously minor characters, they're a lot of fun to play with. I like picturing them as young and joyful, slight precursors to Fred and George.

I also really liked your characterization of Elphias. I think you've done an excellent job of writing him as a tired old man who has seen too much. He is definitely one of those old people that I just love so much. I can't wait to read more about and and get an even better grasp of his character.


And of course, I have to mention how stunning your writing is, because it's absolutely breathtaking. I love the way you described the various wars Elphias has lived through, and the mention of "a glimmer of gold and glory" in the young soldiers' eyes is just so spot on. It's a beautiful piece of imagery and it's so appropriate for the attitudes of the time. I really liked the style you managed here. It definitely sounds like a letter to a friend, almost a natural pattern of speech, but you've also done such a good job of including description and imagery, which is very tough to do when using first person perspective.

I'm so in awe of your writing ability. TEACH ME YOUR WAYS

katie

Hufflepuff CtF

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Review #2, by Felpata Lupin Fabian and Gideon

16th April 2017:
Hello, Sian! Here for CTF!

This was so perfect... you made me tear up and made me smile at the same time, how did you do it?

I love the idea behind the story, of Elphias remembering the people he lost in the war and writing letters to them. The fact that he'd gone through so many wars in his life and lost so many people he cared about is so painful. War is really the most horrible invention of mankind...

Oh, Fabian and Gideon... :( It really is painful to imagine two boys so young, so cheery, so full of life, to be gone so soon. And obviously, from the perspective of an old man like Elphias, that has an even stronger impact.

I loved all the details you included about the two brothers. I loved their jokes and their laughter, and how they would unnerve Moody to no end. I loved the mention of the Marauders as well, I can totally see them growing close so quickly. I loved that you could make me smile despite the sadness of the piece, even with that little glimpse of the Weasleys at the funeral. That was such a nice touch.

This was such a lovely piece, and your writing was just beautiful and so powerful, really amazing job. I hope that you'll have more soon, and I'll try to be back for it (even if it'll probably break my heart...)

A presto!
Chiara

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