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Review #1, by ANightingaleInAGoldenCage Destined

17th April 2017:
Hi here for CTF!

What an interesting take on a story this is! I rarely see a story with Sybill, let alone from her POV, but I do think you captured her really well. From the way she thinks, moves and talks, to the way she speaks, she really comes over as a genuine Trelawney and I don't think I could pull it off myself. Really well done on that.
And then the fact you paired her up with Lockhart! It's a brilliant move if you ask me and the entire story made me laugh at that. The way she attempted to get him to notice her, the way she spoke to him as if everything was crytal clear already, the way he didn't understand her at all. It's really great.
And then when he came to her tower for his future and absolutely did not get what he came for and was shocked to say the least! I absolutely loved it. The end, where she was sure she could get the powers to make his future downright hell was funny too. I'm not sure if it's actually possible, but the fact that it all came true in a way was a very nice touch.
I must say, however, that I didn't fully see Lockhart the way you portrayed him. Granted, he's a hard character as well, but there was something about him that I couldn't pinpoint but also made me go: not sure if I can see him do that.
Regardless, the story in itself was hilarious and I look forward to reading more!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! It's great that you liked how I wrote Trelawney and that it cracked you up that she was paired with Lockhart. I wrote it in a light manner too =) Well, as for lockhart, i wrote him the way i saw him and that can differ with your view. thanks for the comments!

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Review #2, by BellaLestrange87 Destined

17th April 2017:
Hi there! I'm here for CTF!

I love your characterization of Trelawney here. I can definitely tell its her, with the references to her inner eye and crystal balls and all the other Divination tools that we've seen mentioned in the series.

The disconnect between them is brilliantly written. You can tell that Trelawney is really blinded by her infuation for him (or obsession, that would be another great word to call it) and fails to see that he doesn't care for her romantically. Meanwhile, there's Lockhart, who just wants to know that he's going to continue to be super successful.

The way you've written Lockhart is perfect. He's just like in the books - sure of himself, arrogant, and yet unsure of himself in just the right way so that you know that, deep down, he's a fraud.

I really liked the ending. It almost seems like Trelawney made that prediction out of spite and anger that he had so cruelly rejected her. Before, when she still had hope, she was predicting excellent things for his future, but as soon as he turned her down her predictions also became less positive.

I noticed one small thing, and that's that you kept writing his name as "Glideroy" instead of "Gilderoy". It didn't detract from the story at all, but I thought you should know.

This was an excellent one-shot! It was extremely well-written and had wonderful flow. After CTF, I will be definitely back to read some more of your writing.

~Olivia

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I am happy you liked my characterisation of Trelawney. This was a very difficult fic to write - because both the characters are tricky. It's great you found Lockhart well written. Thanks for pointing out that typo, I'll fix it. I hope you can come back to read some of my (good) work!

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Review #3, by VipersCroon Destined

5th April 2017:
Oh dear! I merely clicked for the fun of it (and because I love Sibyll), though I couldn't quite think of much to expect from any pairing with Lockhart actually. Good luck I did click, though, because I love this little story! Your writing voice mends so well with Sibyll's charakter I didn't even notice you were writing from the first person POV (which I usually don't get along with so well) and that ending had me cringing sorry for the poor lady as much as fearfully grinning because wasn't that promise a dangerous one she vowed to herself? What a lady, quite the stalker somehow yet better not messed with! Considered how things turn for Lockhart canon-wise she's not even that wrong with her curse ;)

"He was the one and I was going to make sure he knew it" - that's exactly from where you had me into your version of Sibyll, to be honest, and that's quite awesome in the very first paragraph because I usually need time to feel the charakters. Lovely.

Though holding up to itself wonderfully as it is there's definitely potential for a sequel, now is there?

Author's Response: Hey! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I rarely get random reviews so this was a pleasant surprise and you totally made my day!

I am so happy you liked this little story and that you thought my voice blended with Sybill. It's very difficult to write a character like that, especially in first person, but I put myself in her shoes in this (imagined) situation and went with the flow, so I'm really pleased that you liked the outcome. I thought of what happened to Lockhart in canon and decided to play around with it in terms of her curse too, who knew it may have been her curse that triggered his demise hehe.

Thanks a lot again for your kind words. As of now, I don't see myself writing a sequel but I'll definitely keep your review in mind if I ever choose to!


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