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Review #1, by Dojh167 Bonding with the Pages

16th April 2017:
Hufflepuff CtF Review

I am a huge fan of dark Ginny fics, and as those typically involve Tom Riddle, Iím actually pretty surprised I havenít read this before.

I like how you found a way to make this story start with a bit of action, with the way you wrote Molly and Ginny returning by floor powder. Itís a little thing, but it gives the story inertia, which is important when itís a familiar story of a missing moment from the books.

It seems funny to me that Ginny would find a journal and be disappointed that it hasnít been used. Most people would prefer to have something fresh for themselves, but I suppose Ginny has a bit of anosy streak. Understandable in a big family!

Itís interesting how you made it so even before Ginny has ever written in the diary it has some sort of power over it, as she is drawn to write in it in a way she canít quite control and doesnít try to explain or fight.

Hahaha Diary Tom has a sense of humor XD

I really like your choice of a title for this piece. Disclosure is simple and catchy, and really speaks to the mistake Ginny should have been more careful about. I canít blame her for wanting to have something thatís all her own though.

Nice job with this story! It worked well as a missing moment as it was the start of a dark plot for Ginny, without this moment getting too dark too fast.

Sam.

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Review #2, by Ron 4 Hermione Bonding with the Pages

16th April 2017:
Hey there, here for CTF!

I like that youíve chosen this moment to write about, we all know that Ginny had the Diary, and when she got it, but itís never revealed when she found it.

Your characterisation of Ginny is great, sheís such an awkward child, especially around Harry and I think youíve brought that across really well. Especially the fact that she keeps thinking about all the embarrassment moments that have happened so far. Oh to be young and have a crush again, aha, itís sweet to read about.

I love the little mention of her brothers, especially Fred and George, you can imagine they would have to take advantage of a) how shy Ginny is around Harry when she normally isnít and b) thatís due to the fact that she has a crush on him. I kind of feel sorry for her a little bit, having brothers tease you about a crush canít be nice, makes me glad I didnít have any haha.

Ah, Tom. I think itís iconic that even though it clearly states his name, she doesnít realise who it is because nobody says his name. I always found that fascinating because I know sheís only 11 but sheíd have heard about Voldemort, but not Tom Riddle. It could have changed everything.

This was a lovely little insight into how Ginny first started talking to the diary, I think you write her really well.

- Shaza :)

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Review #3, by McCaggers Bonding with the Pages

8th April 2017:
This is lovely. You have such wonderful imagery and your Ginny seems very real indeed. Well done!

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Review #4, by Unicorn_Charm Bonding with the Pages

4th April 2017:
Hello, dear! Here with a CTF review!

I love that you've chosen this missing moment to write about. Iíve always wanted to read more about when Ginny first discovered the diary, and this was so well done, I honestly feel like it could be canon.

I think you've captured an eleven year old Ginny really well. The line that stuck out to me the most was when she worried that Ron and Harry would be laughing at her expense. It's totally in character for a tween girl to automatically assume they'd be making fun of her. Even though two twelve year old boys would barely give her a second thought.

The moment when she finally opened and studied the diary was really well done. You could feel the tension in that moment, and her slight hesitation. I loved the small detail that made it seem almost like she was compelled to write in it. It made it feel like the horcrux was calling to her, which added an extra creepy element to the whole thing. And then when she wrote in it, and her writing disappeared, I swear I held my breath waiting to see what Tom Riddle was going to write back.

I loved that the first thing he said was, ďMy name is not ĎDiary.íĒ It was such a troll response, like when Harry asked if he could tell him about the Chamber and he was like ďlol nope!Ē And then you just ended it with the Ginerva thing! How? How could you just end it like that?? I need more! But no, that was a great ending. Absolutely fantastic, because we know what happens next, and to see how it began, and then just end abruptly like that. I don't know how to explain it, but it just felt right. (But also, if you wanted to continue this at any point, I wouldn't exactly object to that idea.)

Great oneshot! Really enjoyed reading it!

xoxo Meg

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Review #5, by adluvshp Bonding with the Pages

4th April 2017:
Here for Slytherin.

What a lovely missing moments story. I am always fascinated by the portrayal of Ginny during the diary phase and was excited to read how you would view it, and you didn't disappoint. You wrote her 11 year old self brilliantly, the tension, the awkwardness, her crush over Harry and worrying what he thinks of her, it was all spot on. I could totally relate, having hyperventilated at that age over my crushes as well.

The opening sentences of this one-shot were beautiful and painted a perfect and magical image, with the dazzling fireplace and the afternoon sun. It was almost like reading Rowling's descriptions!

Ginny's confusion at the diary and not being able to understand why someone would leave the journal empty was genuine and it was nice and realistic how her curiosity got the better of her despite warnings from her father. How often do kids heed their parents' warnings - magical or muggle - after all. It was also cute how she started with the typical "dear diary" and then Tom replied that his name is not diary. I kinda laughed, despite knowing the sinister thing that's coming.

This worked really well as a missing moment and as something to foreshadow what's to come. The narrative was just right with the correct amount of information being given. There were a few tense and grammatical mistakes here and there but nothing a quick proof-read can't fix. And one little odd point, Ginny seemed to know that Malfoy dropped the diary into her cauldron, I thought she was supposed to be unaware?

Besides that, this was great and I loved it.

8/10
cheers
Angie

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