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Review #1, by Ron 4 Hermione Teddy Lupin

4th April 2017:
Hey there, here for CTF!

Aww, a love that this is a story about Bill and Fleur, I donít read enough about them. I love the slight changes youíve made to Victorie because sheís going on this date, the skirt and makeup, itís just so typical of what girls do. And I love the way you write Victoire to because often sheís portrayed as the double of her mother and a girly girl but I definitely think growing up with all those cousins, and being a Weasley, would have made her a little more tomboy-ish.

Aha, dad mode alert. So he doesnít like that does he, you can see why though, his first daughter, all grown up and going on a date. Itís cute. I like Fleurís role though, and how sheís trying to calm him down, I especially like the comparison between her and Bill. You donít really hear much about how Fleur and Bill got together, but I like your descriptions. Especially the idea of Fleur not helping the situation, I can imagine the Veela in her coming out and seducing Bill. Although Iím not sure how hard he would have tried to resist.

I love how short and sweet this is, itís just a little snippet into their life and itís cute and fluffy. Great job.

-Shaza :)

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Review #2, by MuggleMaybe Teddy Lupin

4th April 2017:
Hello lovely! Back again to give your stories the CTF litmus test for Hufflepuff Game 3 ;)

first of all: HAHAHAHA! This is just too funny! I loved seeing Bill and Fleur as parents of teenagers. You'd think, given his somewhat rebellious steak, that Bill would be a laid back dad. I like that you turned the tables and made him the one who's anxious about his little girl dating a Man (not a boy lol!). And, in the same vein, it's nice to see Fleur given a more carefree attitude. I enjoy seeing characters written in ways that are both original and believable wth canon, and you've done that well.

Victoire is just perfectly in character here. What a teenager. The way she tells them the truth but not the truth is so spot on. And her pronouncement that Teddy is boring because he doesn't blow things up made me laugh. I think she might be bluffing about being bored by him there, considering she clearly likes him! What a cutie, though

I so often think that parents forget what it was like to be young. When Fleur pointed out the age difference between her and BIll, I laughed out loud. YES. GOOD POINT. And then their discussion of the various... um... activities that they did at Bill's office had me dying of laughter. Those rebels! Bill might be worried, but I say Like father, like daughter!

Also, I am making a note for myself that if there is a dialogue category in the site-wide awards, I need to nominate this. You're dialogue is just perfect! I wish I could say something more wizened about it, but that's all I've got: It's PERFECT.

You write such great next gens! ♥
xoxo Renee

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