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Review #1, by victoria_anne Prologue: The Dare

5th February 2017:
HELLO!

Okay so you should know that I ADORE the Scamander twins. Seriously. I love them so much. So when I read that this story has them, you can understand I got very excited. And seriously, you have not disappointed me. I love your characterisation of Lysander - he's so cute! I can't wait to see more of him later on. And I sense luuurve in the air between him and Lily, so I'm excited to see what might come of that!

I honestly thought her saviour was going to be Scorpius! I think I was feeling hopeful for her sake :P Her crush on him is so funny. I think every young girl has had a crush on their older brother's friend at some point in their life! And, I mean, it's Scorpius *drools*

As for Lily herself, I know her characterisation was a concern for you, but I don't think you have much to worry about. I really really like her! Even though she might not think so herself, she's such a firecracker. Her relationship with her brothers is hilarious - ahh, siblings never change. They really act like the type of big brothers who would tease and annoy their younger sister.

This story is so great so far. I love the adventure feel it took on, and though at first she was saved by a boy, later on she saved him right back!

Awesome job :)



Author's Response: Hello :D

Aww I'm so glad you like the characterisation of Lily and the twins! They'll have major drama eventually but I need to build it up so bear with me!

I really enjoyed writing Lily's crush on Scorpius- I kinda wanted to mirror Ginny's former habits with Harry, as well as her chemistry with her brothers :)

I mean if a guy saves a girl SHE HAS TO RETURN THE DEED cos I mean FEMINISM :3

-Thanks for the review :)))


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Review #2, by The Daily Prophet Prologue: The Dare

22nd January 2017:
Very nice work so far! It's interesting to get a story like this though Lily Luna's point of view, and I like her characterization. Keep up the good work! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I find Lily Luna really interesting so I'm glad you like my characterisation of her! :)

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Review #3, by lovegood27 Prologue: The Dare

22nd January 2017:
Hello, yep it's me :)

So considering this is your first fanfic, I think it's really good. (I mean technically you're writing Beneath the Surface, but never mind).

I like the beginning when Lily only did the dare because of a crush on Scorpius and she wanted to impress him. Particularly because she was a Gryffindor, it seems fitting that she would want to go to greater lengths to catch his attention than say, being pretty.

I think this turned exciting pretty quickly (and it's a prologue?!) and I really like how Lily becomes much closer to Lysander after escaping near death with him. They're adorable!

Anyway, I look forward to seeing where this is going. Please update soon!

Author's Response: Hello XD
It's technically my first fanfic cos Beneath the Surface is also written by you so... Yh. Conclusion: this is the first fanfic I've completely written by myself.
Yep, it's a prologue so loads more to come ;)
Anyway, thanks for the review!


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