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Review #1, by hedwig1751 The Heir of Slytherin

23rd January 2017:
Hey it's me :)

I thought that this was a really amazingly original idea. Since it's Olive's POV, and no one's really done that as much, you really rose to the challenge and delt with it well.

I liked how you characterised everyone- especially Slughorn, to be honest. Olive and Tom were really believable! I think that since you took the Potter books into consideration too, there isn't any clashing- you could believe that it really is cannon :)

Glad to see you used my title idea XD

Author's Response: Lol hi :)

To be honest one of the main reasons I wrote this was because there didn't seem to be many Olive Hornby stories. I'm glad that the story was believable and yes, I used your title idea :D


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Review #2, by dreamgazer220 The Heir of Slytherin

10th January 2017:
Hi there! Here with your requested review :)

This is a very intriguing concept. I love the idea that there's someone in Tom's house and year that caught on to what he was doing, and that Olive considered them friends because he helped her with Potions. For a (somewhat) long one-shot, the piece itself flowed pretty well. Nothing seemed too abrupt; the transitions worked.

I also liked that there were muggleborns in Slytherin, at least in Tom's time. It's entirely possible that they got thinned out over the years, and Olive definitely showed some strong Slytherin characteristics. Also, her inner monologue was hilarious at times and she definitely had me chuckling, which was a nice break in the darkness that was surrounding this one-shot.

To be honest, I was a little disappointed when I saw that it was complete. I wanted to know what was going to happen next! It stands on its own just fine, but there's definitely room to grow, too, if you ever considered expanding it into a short story, novella, or novel. I'm curious about Tom and Olive's relationship and how it grew over time and how it would change; he clearly didn't think she was as close to him - or he just didn't care, which is a very Tom trait.

Writing Tom Riddle is incredibly hard, and I think you pulled it off here. He really can be such a cruel jerk. And I like that she went to go check on Mrytle after she teased her, that seemed like a Hufflepuff trait and it was refreshing to see it in a Slytherin :P

The only thing I was a little curious about was how Olive seemed to know everything we found out in CoS. The basilisk was explained by the book, so I was cool with that, but how did she know about Horcruxes? I thought that was super restricted info because it was really dark magic, but it makes her character all the more interesting depending on how she knows that. :) It's also interesting that one of her parents was a muggle, I liked it!

Overall, good job with this. I haven't read anything quite like it and I do enjoy some me some Tom Riddle every now and again.

Thanks for the request!
♥Jill

Author's Response: Hi, thanks for the review!

Usually, I like writing about things that aren't explained in detail in the books, and an idea came to write about what would happen if someone caught Tom, because it could be likely and it would be very much like his personality to 'sort them out'. I was trying not to be too detailed about his relationship with Olive, but I hoped it would show that he didn't really feel very attached to her.

I think that Slytherins are sometimes thought of as just cruel pure bloods, so Olive was used to show that that was not always the case.

To be honest, I had completely forgotten that Horcruxes were very restricted and that not many people would know about it. It may have to do with the fact that Olive was friends with Tom and he was very interested in them, but I would leave it to the reader's imagination.

Once again, thank you so much for the review, it was really helpful and encouraging at the same time :)


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