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7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by May Sirius Black

22nd January 2017:
I like all the chapters but this one is my favourite so far so looking forward to next chapter

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Review #2, by May Midnight Arrivals

22nd January 2017:
So enjoying your storyline looking forward to next chapter

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Review #3, by May Under the Red Rug

22nd January 2017:
I am so enjoying this story it's great

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Review #4, by May September 1977

22nd January 2017:
Another great chapter James and Lily are brill in this

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Review #5, by May Helga's Secret

22nd January 2017:
Great storyline looking forward to next chapter

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Review #6, by Gergana Sirius Black

12th January 2017:
Great two chapters! What I enjoyed in Midnight arrivals was the interaction between Lilly and the boys. I like your take on Lilly,it's very real. she is this perfect perfect person in everything who is so perfect and strict that it's annoying but at the same time she's funny and sarcastic; and she's helping Sirius and she's being his friend, understands him and defence his behavior; and that's how a normal person is nothing is ever only black or white.
It's very nice to see Lilly being friends with the boys, and it's well written and believable, it's easy to see that they weren't friends from the start but they do grow up together and when darkness is coming they can trust each other.
I like the atmosphere of the story, they are still in school but the war is near and you can sense it.
About Sirius Black: I like those dark, mystirious and troubled characters. Sirius fate is quite tragic in the books, in your story, although it's in the begining, I can understand why he was so easily convicted.
I like the dynamic between Sirius and Melly, the pace is good. I'm not really fond of the idea of Sirius and Remus fighting for a girl, it's believable to grow apart because of a girl but this is war there're more important things than who will get the girl. But this is your story don't listen to me do whatever you feel it's right :)
Keep up the good work I can wait to see what's going to happen next.

Author's Response: I am really glad you're enjoying Lily. I wanted to stay loyal to her character and also make her believable -- so I am definitely happy you saw her this way! Her cannon character is this beautiful, kind, smart witch... I don't want to take that away from her, but I think there was also more to her than just the pretty redhead who played hard to get with the popular boys.

I am a huge Sirius Black fan, but I think he's also multi-complex. As far as the idea of Remus and Sirius fighting for a girl... I hope that will come to a believable end as well. We still have long ways to go, and it won't necessary be the focus of the story :) I hope you enjoy the next few chapters!


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Review #7, by Gergana Under the Red Rug

3rd January 2017:
Great story so far, I like your idea, I want to see where it goes. Amelia is an intresting character, it's going to be a difficult journey for her to become the person she's in the books(if you decide to keep her canon; still it will be intresting to see how it goes.
I have to say I adore James, he is the perfect amount of mischief and responsibility, just the way I picture him.
I really enjoyed this chapter. I like the relationship between the boys and Lilly, especially between Sirius and Lilly, I like how they kind of get along now, before James and Lilly start dating.
I want to see what your take on Peter will be, he has yet to make an appearance.
Keep up the good work :)

Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I am definitely interested in keeping Amelia as close to canon as possible. I think there are traces of an older Amelia Bones in her here too but she has a long way to go before she becomes the witch that dueled Voldermort himself.
I think James is often casted as all brawns no brains sort of guy. I personally think he must have been quite intelligent… I think his problem, if anything, was that everything came a little too easy to him. That’s what made him so charismatic and impossible at the same time.
Peter makes an appearance in the next chapter, but he also has ways to go before he becomes the Peter we know from the books. I want to depict not was we know him now but as James, Sirius, and Remus must have known him then. I hope that this shows through.
Again, thank you for your kind words and let me know what think of the next chapter :)


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