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Review #1, by scintillated Sirius

25th February 2017:
whoo hoo this chapter is the start of the making of the map!! i really enjoyed this chapter, i feel like you manage to make each POV a different narrative in a way; like the writing just seems the slightest bit different. and wow, i'm left with a lot of questions after this chapter! what is up with anita pym? what is this parchment / place they found? when are they going to make the map? overall, this was a really intriguing chapter, and it kept me fascinated the whole time!! can't wait for the next update!

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Review #2, by scintillated James

25th February 2017:
wow! this was a great chapter! you handled the POV switch so well; there are often times where it can be disastrous, but this was extremely well done! i really like james, and i can see how passionate he is about quidditch. also, your writing is super enrapturing, like i get sucked into the story and can't come out. great chapter!!!

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Review #3, by scintillated Lily

25th February 2017:
this chapter was really good! i really like the characterization of lily, and your writing is really great! this chapter was a really good introduction, as it set up the relationships between lily and the other characters nicely. i really like marlene! and lily! and james! and quentin! and everybody to be honest besides like snape and the head girl and boy. onto the next chapter!

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Review #4, by greenbirds Lily

13th January 2017:
oh my god. this is fantastic. i love it, i adore it, i just know it's going to be my new favourite fanfic for the year. there's so much to say about it- and we're only one chapter in!

firstly and perhaps most importantly; your characterisation of lily is magnificent. this is one of the first times i've seen her portrayed as an actual teenage girl, someone who- as another teenage girl- i can relate to and emphasise with. i love the decision to have her secretly harbour a crush on james, it makes perfect sense, and to be honest i never did buy the notion that lily was totally and wholly immune to his charms for seven years. i mean- come on, she's a teenage girl- not some clumsily crafted mary sue type that is perfectly in control of her hormones and her daydreams, not some character who's logic has such perfect reign over her feelings she can say right! well. james bullies sev so i DO NOT FANCY HIM! there! oh god, i hate this head canon accepted characterisation of lily, and i'm so thrilled you decided to go against it- whilst still retaining such canon characteristics of hers!

because, only a chapter in, it's evident she's intelligent but not immune to the charm and allure of the slug club; got friends, such as marlene and remus and quentin, but not some
over the top 'it girl' she was never really going to be, realistically; she cares for sev, but not blindingly, and is, above all, vulnerable enough to be so clearly affected by what she perceives to be a prank on james and sirius's behalf.

and omg! don't get me started on james, sev and marlene. what full fleshed out characters despite only have a scene each to themselves. i adore marlene; spunky and independent (but again, not in a manner that isn't unusual for teenagers- the line about her thinking she's the only one clued up about death eater fascism reminds me of /me/ when i was in sixth form, banging on about feminism and the labour party), and the allusion to an upcoming plotline between her and william mckinnon is so exciting. we don't see enough of political activism amongst the characters of fanfic, which is totally weird and not ok, teenagers really are getting more and more political and come ON now- the marauders & co joined the order of phoenix straight out of school! of course they'd be clued up, knowledgeable and concerned about the threat of pureblood fascism! even the way marlene presents it, USING terms such as terrorism and fascism is so clever. well done you.

the vulnerability and dependency upon lily of snape, especially his worries and anxiety over slytherin common room death eater recruitment was fantastic to read and very convincing. i loved seeing a different side to him, a side often ignored in marauder fanfic. and as for james? super excited to see what you make of him and lily and sev in future chapters.

sorry for babbling on so much! i really am so, so excited by this. please please please update soon! all my love xx

Author's Response: "i just know it's going to be my new favourite fanfic for the year" !!! This is the sweetest thing in the entire world! Thank you for your review, this was so lovely and I'm so happy that you like it and have so much to say! This was so sweet! Can't get over it!! And a new update is coming very soon! Thanks a million times! xx

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Review #5, by Kristina1990 James

30th December 2016:
'Your potion's trying to crawl out by the way,' she snarled at Sirius.

Interesting idea... Haha, a fleeing potion.

'Why not? She's beautiful,' James said genially. 'I'm beautiful.'

*lol* Such a guy...

He needed to romance Lily! First, she had to believe that he fancied her then of course she'd say yes! He'd gone about this all wrong. It was spectacularly mind-boggling that he hadn't realised this before.

Oh no... No no no no no... Please don't.

I also finally figured out what mirror you keep talking about. No wonder he is so flustered all of a sudden. Sirius would have a field day.

Great chapter!

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Review #6, by Kristina1990 Lily

29th December 2016:
Well, this is a new angle. I like it ^^.

You also described the interaction between Lily and Severus well. Sort of distant, in some aspects, but still trusting in others. I'm looking forward to seeing how this will change over the year.

Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! And thank you! I'm really looking forward to writing Sev and Lily's relationship as the years progress. I hope you keep reading! xx

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Review #7, by May Lily

4th December 2016:
Great chapter looking forward to the next one

Author's Response: Thank you! x

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