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Review #1, by LGBTQA elf Eleven Hours and Forty Minutes of Silence

7th November 2016:
Hey! It's me again!

I love this chapter!!! I think the best part about it is that it's mostly Albus thinking about how much he misses Scorpius. It's a really sweet way to establish the relationship the two have and sets the scene nicely for future chapters.

Just a note, there is a small typo in the scene where Albus and Scorpius meet for the first time. You have accidentally typed 'preformed' instead of 'performed'.

I think my favourite line from this entire chapter is: '“Your room?” I smirked. “I thought this was the school’s room?”' I think this line just about sums up Albus' attitude as you have written him so far.

Loved this chapter and hope to see another one soon!!

Author's Response: Hello there, nice to see you back.

Thank you very much. Yes, he definitely does miss Scorpius very much, and I really enjoyed writing the flashbacks for the establishment. That's exactly what they were for! I was a little worried that I was revealing too much in the second chapter, but I think it turned out okay.

Oh, oops! I'll change that at some point, but I have this rule. Either I get five or more corrections on a chapter (from the same person or different people), or I've posted three more chapters, then I can't edit it. But I will remember that correction when I edit!

I love that line too!

Thank you so much for this kind review. I haven't started the third chapter yet, but I hope to see you there when it's posted!

-ImaRavenclaw


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Review #2, by LGBTQA elf Tokyo Time

4th November 2016:
Hey there!

I really like this story, it's a really cute idea for an AU. I think the interactions between characters were all very well written, and realistic. Their introductions didn't feel forced either, which was very refreshing.

Two little notes: I think when you said there is lots of base, because you were referring to music it perhaps should have been 'bass'? Also, you have written "I patient for..." where it should be "I patiently waited..." or something to that effect.

Well done! This is a really good start!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind review! I'm glad that you thought that everything seemed realistic and that I introduced the characters in a fresh way.

Okay, thank you, I'll fix that right away! I hope that you have a lovely day!

-ImaRavenclaw


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Review #3, by milominderbinder Tokyo Time

1st November 2016:
omg, so i kind of HAD to come and read this story after being so intrigued by making the graphics ahaha, and IT IS HONESTLY SO GOOD!!! i love how you've put their relaysh in a non-magic world and it's already so cute -- as cute as get-together fics are i most love reading stories where the relationship is already established and they are already super cute and stable but then face challenges together haha. FAB JOB SO FAR !!

Author's Response: Hey Maia, thanks for stopping by! Nice to see you here on my AP.

Thank you so much, I put a lot of work into so I'm glad that you liked it. I was actually nervous about putting their relationship in the muggle world, but I was inspired by the fabulous Julie (Banshee), and her story Between Takes.

Well, I'm glad that it's cute, because that's kind of what I was going for. But also really angsty too!

Thank you so much for this unexpected review, it made my day. I hope to see you when chapter two shows up! Thanks again.

-Lily


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