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Review #1, by water_lilies The Case of the Missing Bees.

4th June 2016:
This is a great start to the story! I really like the humor and how you are mixing the muggle and magical worlds :) Also, I think that James' thoughts and attitudes are spot on for someone who is a recent graduate with a new job; you can still see the way he was while at Hogwarts and how that comes into play in his work life.

I did notice one small thing, in one part you say "It was not common for projects to cause such commotion, but it was exactly uncommon either. James" The last part I think should be "but it wasn't exactly uncommon either" and minus the "James" at the end of the sentence ;)

Please keep writing and update soon!

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you like it! This story should be three parts (maybe four if I ramble). Chapter two should be up soon but I really need to give it a better look over and edit.

Thank you so much for catching my errors! This is what happens when I rush! I think I fixed it all!

Thank you so much for such a lovely review!


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