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Review #1, by victoria_anne Lay Your Weary Head To Rest

21st May 2016:
LIZZIE ♥

I am waaay too spoilt for choice on your author page! But look I found a Teddy Lupin! I love Teddy Lupin!

Ah. But a sad one. Did I finally find an angst-y story? Yes. Yes I did.

*sniff*

I'm not crying. YOU'RE CRYING.

Oh Teddy! *squish* It makes me so sad to think that he probably thought like this multiple times in his life - that he doesn't quite fit in with any family (even though he totally does, of course). His emotions were so raw and real - I hate to read how much he misses the parents he never knew but your writing is so incredible... Mah heart hurts.

I love how much of a father Harry is to Teddy, it was so nice to read (but Teddy gets bullied - wah! That's so horrible, I love him because of the things he got bullied for!)

Amazing work again Lizzie ♥

Author's Response: Bianca!!

Gah, you're spoiling me with all these wonderful reviews! *hugs*

Oh, yes - it is Teddy, and it IS angsty. :P

I'm sorry! *holds out a box of tissues* Don't hate me! I didn't MEAN for Teddy to get bullied... it just happened that way! :(

But don't worry, at some point in time I'll finally get around to writing the Teddy/Victoire short story I've been planning for months... and that'll explain everything. :)

Thanks so much for ANOTHER wonderful review, Bianca! You're amazing!! *hugs*
Lizzie


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Review #2, by TreacleTart Lay Your Weary Head To Rest

25th January 2016:
Hey Lizzie!

Back for one last Gryffie Review Battle Review! Go Team Red! Pretty epic night, eh?

Okay. I love this from top to bottom. This is definitely when Harry is at his best. He understands Teddy's struggles so well because he's been through the same thing and can relate. I like his advice to Teddy to just keep carrying on. I also like that he quickly dismissed Teddy's irrational fears that the Weasley's were just going to abandon him over an accident. They are his family and family means no one gets left behind. (whoops wrong fandom)

I thought you did a great job of capturing Teddy's anxiety about everything that happened. I could see why he'd be fearful of the Weasley's after Victoire got hurt protecting him. (even if it is irrational) And teenagers are so filled with angst that they start spinning out the worst case scenario automatically, so it really fit that he was so panicky.

I love that him and Victoire have such a close bond. I could definitely understand her trying to calm him down, but also her trying to protect him from being attacked. It's a very Weasley thing to do!

As usual, this was another great story and I'm happy because I get to go to bed full of the warm fuzzies from all of your happy stories (except Boarding The Train which gave me sad feels), but ending it on a happy note here, so that's good.

Anyway, you are an amazingly talented writer and I can't wait to see what you do next!

~Kaitlin

P.S. Hope this is somewhat coherent. It's like 3:30am for me right now, so my brain is a bit fuzzy.

Author's Response: Kaitlin!

Man, you are AMAZING! I'm so baffled that you left so many INCREDIBLE reviews for me in one night!!

Harry really is at his best here, isn't he? He's so kind and caring and I've always thought that his relationship with Teddy would be really special. Harry seems like the type to take his Godfatherly duties very seriously. :D

Of course the Weasleys wouldn't abandon Teddy! When I first wrote Teddy worrying about that, I was actually worried that it was a bit too much, so I'm glad that it came across well in the story.

HAHA! I think that quote applies to ALL fandoms, don't you? ;)

Well, since I totally ship Teddy/Victoire, I just HAD to make sure that they were close here. I always figured that she'd have Bill's "stand for what's right" ideals.

Well, I guess you're right, it is a pretty Weasley trait, isn't it?

Gah! Thank you so much for all of your wonderful reviews, Kaitlin! They never fail to make me smile!!
Lizzie


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Review #3, by The Basilisk Lay Your Weary Head To Rest

12th December 2015:
Thisss was quite good. You painted a very clear picture of Teddy and how his life would be growing up. I never thought of him having added difficulty being mocked for his parentage but it makesss a lot of sssenssse.

While the ssstory is short I like what you told. It was quite good. I really felt for Teddy in this. I like how Harry was the one to ssseek him out and advise him. I can only imagine how hard everything was for Teddy without his parentsss. You did a lovely job over all and I do agree that Tonksss was a fan of rock and roll she ssseemsss the type.

Fantassstic work all the sssame. I truly enjoyed the read.

Author's Response: Hello Basilisk!

Thank you! I actually hadn't intended for Teddy's background to be quite so dark, but I kinda like the way it turned out. I feel bad that he had such a hard time at Hogwarts, but I felt that it was more realistic for him to have to deal with stuff like this. Unfortunately, prejudices don't change overnight, and I always thought that what would change would be the wizarding world's view of muggles and muggleborns, not werewolves. Plus, teenagers are mean.

Apparently, I am too, 'cause I put Teddy through some nasty stuff, huh? *blushes*

Anyway, I'm SO glad that you liked this story! It really means a lot!

Thank you for leaving such a wonderful review!
Lizzie


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Review #4, by LiveBreatheNeedHP Lay Your Weary Head To Rest

1st November 2015:
Hey Lizzie, I'm here for the GCR review swap. I am so so sorry it has taken me so long to do this! Time has just gotten away from me this month and I have been so busy, especially in the past week. Anyway, to the review!

This is good! It's a really sweet story, I appreciate how you've given an insight into Harry and Teddy's relationship, which is so nice to see because I love those two so much. I think you wrote that really well, their dialogue and actions towards each other were very believable and what I also imagine their relationship would be myself.
I thought your characterisation was also really good. In under 2000 words (and correct me if I'm wrong) you've shown me a boy who blames himself for everything that goes wrong and probably nothing that goes right who loves his family and misses his parents deeply and you've communicated that very well.
I also liked the mystery you had at the start of the story, surrounding who this girl was and what had happened to her. I suspected it was Victoire, but it still really kept me intrigued to keep reading and find out what had actually happened. You didn't really leave an opportunity for the reader to lose interest, which is really good.

Just a couple of grammatical errors:

"What did matter was that it was his fault?" You need to lose the question mark in this sentence, as the sentence isn't worded like a question. Or if you would like to keep it a question, you can maybe to change it something like, "What did it matter if it was his fault?"

"He'd always considered them family until today. Now he was quite sure that they'd want nothing to do with them." Them should be him, I'm pretty sure.

Just a couple of small things, nothing too major really.

Another thing I would say is the jump between the hospital and his bedroom is a bit sudden. It reads a little randomly, so maybe a couple more joining sentences could work, just to link the two scenes better a little more. Of course, you don't have to listen to me if you don't want to. It would be fine as is, those were just my thoughts on it.

Besides those few tiny tiny things that barely even matter, this was good. It was totally believable, very well written and kept me reading right through to the end. Really good job, I liked it a lot!

Author's Response: Awe! Thank you!! You're so sweet!

I've debated back and forth on how I wanted to portray Harry and Teddy's relationship for a long time - I wasn't sure if I wanted him to be more like a father figure or something different, and I sort of settled in between... if that makes any sense. :P

Yes, it is Victoire, and as for what happened to her, well, that info will come up in a short story I'm planning on writing for her and Teddy at some point in time. We'll see how it goes.

Thanks for pointing those grammatical errors out! I went and fixed them really quickly, so they should be fine now. :D

As for the transition - you're probably right, but I'll have to come back and do an edit at a later date. :D

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! You're fantastic!
Lizzie


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Review #5, by KT Lay Your Weary Head To Rest

28th September 2015:
You are a terrible person. Stop giving me feels!

Author's Response: Yes, I am a terrible person. However, I shall not stop giving you feels. Sorry! *rubs hands together and laughs evilly*

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Review #6, by Unicorn_Charm Lay Your Weary Head To Rest

28th August 2015:
Lizzie! That's enough with the making me cry stories! What are you doing to me?? *wails*

Wow this was just so good. So, so good. I can't even handle that last section right now, Lizzie. You're killing me! Ok. *breathes* time to review like a normal (ha! "normal) human being.

I liked how you used the lack of color and him not using his extra abilities to set the mood right in the beginning. You knew right then and there that you were taking us on another emotional ride. Because you are Lizzie and I'm starting to suspect you also sustain yourself on readers' tears. *glares suspiciously*

You did a great job of creating suspense throughout this. You really didn't know if Teddy had actually cast the spell that nearly killed Victoire, if the Weasleys were going to freak out at him or if she was going to make it at all. By the way, did she? I'm going to pretend she did. Yep. In Meg's little bubble of "everything is awesome" I'm going to just pretend she did. I mean, Harry said she's made it through the worst of it. So she's fine. Yes ma'am. She's just oh kay.

Moving on.

The scene with Harry and Teddy was fantastic. It was heartwarming, sad, intense and just incredibly well written. Of course Harry would know exactly what to say to Teddy because he's truly been there. He does know exactly how Teddy is feeling. It seemed like he got through to him a little, at least. He reminded me of Harry a bit. The way he lashed out and smashed the mirror. It was reminiscent of when Harry destroyed Dumbledore's office in OotP. I think that's why Harry just let him go. He knew that Teddy had to get it out of his system. Just like Dumbledore let Harry go. I don't know if that was the parallel you were going for, but I really liked it.

And then *sniffle* that last section. My heart! I can't take it! I know that Teddy at least has family (blood and not) that loves and cares for him, but that's still not the same as having your own parents. And to be taunted because of who they were. Ugh! They were heroes! Him talking to that picture killed me. And then the last bit, with the song. I just imaged Tonks being the one who sang it for some reason. And then tears. Then the tears. :'(

Lizzie, you're amazing. Absolutely incredible. Your writing has just been continually blowing me away with each story of yours that I read. Brilliant! Just such good work! *hugs*

Tons of love,
Meg

Author's Response: Meg!

So sorry that I've taken so long to respond to this! It's absolutely shameful, I know. :(

Although I will admit that I *might* not have answered this right away because it's one of my absolute favorite reviews that I've ever received...

Do I sustain myself of my readers' tears? Perhaps... :P

Anyway, I'm SO glad you liked this story! And I'm really glad that you liked how the suspense built up. That was a really important aspect of the story that I was worried I'd totally fail at.

As for Victoire... well, I will tell you that she survives. But she's never the same after what happens... I'll actually be continuing her plotline in a short story at some point.

I find writing Harry to be extraordinarily nerve-wracking. I'm always so worried about completely screwing his character up, so THANK YOU! And you're absolutely on point about it being modeled after the scene in OotP. I hadn't planned it that way, but it's certainly how it turned out, and I'm so glad it did.

The fact that Teddy had to grow up without his parents - even though he had this wonderful family with the Weasleys - is so heartbreaking. And I felt SO CRUEL writing him being made fun of and bullied because of who they were, especially because it really ends up reflecting on who he is as a person. They're trashing his parents, and by extension, him.

Tonks having a slight obsession with muggle rock music is a headcanon of mine, so when I got the chance to work it in here, it just felt too perfect NOT to use. :D

THANK YOU MEG for your absolutely amazing review! This has never failed to make me smile! Your reviews are so fantastic!! *hugs*

Keep reading and reviewing my dear!
Lizzie


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