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Review #1, by Daphne brown Chapter 2

25th January 2017:
:) like it! what does Voldy teach?

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Review #2, by Daphne brown Chapter 1

25th January 2017:
Moldy old Voldy is a good guy in this? is he teaching charm or something?

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Review #3, by dinthemidwest Chapter 2

8th May 2016:
I think your plot is quite interesting! Riddle as a good guy? Keep going!! I'll check in on this one!!

Author's Response: Thanks, I'll keep going. I've just had a bit of a hectic time recently with college, family, work etc. I've scarcely had time to sleep, let alone write.

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Review #4, by Rumpelstiltskin Chapter 3

2nd March 2016:
It's Rumpel, back again with team: Sassy Seven from Op. GwE on the Forums.

I'm sure that the view from the Gryffindor tower must be absolutely breathtaking, and I can imagine why Lily would find solace in its tranquility.

I have never read a Marlene/Remus -- but you've just cracked open a whole new can of worms (typically I see Marlene/Sirius). I can totally dig a Marlene/Remus (where has this ship been all my life)! I also think that its sweet that Marlene came to Lily for advice. My headcanon says that they were friends. I absolutely agree with your Lily, that Marlene might bring Remus out of his shell a bit. I wonder what Marlene will think about Remus' lycanthropy, if she finds out.

Poor Lily. I know losing a loved one is difficult, and at least Petunia will be decent enough to put the picture on the grave for her. I think that you've exemplified Lily's kindness in her characterization many times, but it's highlighted (to me) especially while she tries to connect with her sister, even though it's repeatedly not reciprocated.

While Remus being gay crushes my little Marlene/Remus fantasy, it's totally cool. Now I'm rooting for WolfStar ♥ I am sad though that James really overreacted to finding out the news, and I feel bad that the news was found out and spread so quickly. Ideally, this will end up working in Remus' favor, and hopefully James gets over himself ;).

With the amount of kindness that Lily has in her, I'm certain that she will accept him for being a werewolf (or will she)? I certainly am excited to see what Sirius thinks about Remus' situation.

Another lovely chapter!
RENCALM

Author's Response: Hi again!
Remus described Lily as uncommonly kind in the Prisoner of Azkaban, so I thought that her kindness should be explored. Lily definitely isn't a flawless character. I won't comment on possible future relationships, but I will be making them as true to life as possible.

Thanks for reviewing!

All the best, Kat.


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Review #5, by Rumpelstiltskin Chapter 2

2nd March 2016:
Back again with team: Sassy Seven from Slytherin House on the Forums.

(As a quick aside, I forgot to mention that if you are looking for a beta reader, there's an entire section on the Forums dedicated to finding one, if you're interested!)

I feel bad for Severus. His home life certainly is something that any child should be subjected to, and yet sadly are. I did enjoy that you added a reason for Severus' dad's action -- having been in the army. I haven't read many stories that justify his father's actions, and PTSD is a very real and terrifying thing to experience. Understandably, Severus wants him to stop, but I know that addiction is terribly difficult. Perhaps, in this AU, things will be looking up for Severus and his family. Who knows?

A Common Room for all Houses? That sounds like it could either be fantastic or complete chaos, and I'm really curious to how that turns out. Sev and Lily are such good friends, and I'm really glad that they have each other, especially given Severus' not-so-ideal life at home.

Since they have this wonderful inter-house friendship, I love that they tell Charlie that not all Slytherins are bad, even though he wants to be in Gryffindor. In fact, I know quite a few Slytherin's who are actually fantastic ;).

Professor Riddle is SO kind! There's a crazy difference here between what he was like in canon, and what he'd be like if he'd had a stable, loving home.

Can't wait to see what happens!
RENCALM

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I never liked JK Rowling's explanation of Voldermort being unable to love because of a love potion. I thought the more human reason of being unable to love because he didn't know how to was better.

I'm glad you liked my story!

All the best, Kat


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Review #6, by Rumpelstiltskin Chapter 1

2nd March 2016:
Hey there! I'm here with team: Sassy Seven from Operation Green with Envy (Slytherin House) on the Forums!

Understandably, Petunia is jealous of Lily's extraordinary life at Hogwarts, but I can't help but feel bad for Lily. It's obvious that Lily loves her sister, and it's heartbreaking that Petunia can't attempt to be happy for her. (And making me feel bad for your characters so early in a story is a fantastic thing!)

Severus and Lily's friendship is so, so sweet, and I'm wodering if Merope's death (or rather, lack thereof) will change the outcome of that friendship. I have to admit, as much as I enjoy James/Lily, there's a special place reserved in my heart for Snape/Lily, even if its the friendship part.

So, this was a nice introduction, and I'm excited to see how things turn out! What's going to change from canon and how much? This is why I love 'What ifs' and AUs so much, because they always keep me guessing!

Lovely start!
RENCALM

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. I've always been interested in the interactions between characters and how that influences behaviour, which is why I chose to include Lily's relationship with Petunia. The relationship between the sisters isn't something that you see very often. I'm thrilled that you like my story.

Best, Kat


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Review #7, by DragonPoxPixie Chapter 1

2nd March 2016:
Hello kat! While browsing the recently added stories I noticed yours and must say that the synopsis sounded very interesting! Challenging to write too, so I was very curious to see what you had come up with!
I liked how you immediately showed that even though the Dark Lord may not be rising to power as we know him to do in Marauder stories you didn't let that turn the story into one without any prejudice in which the Gryffindors and Slytherins get along like fire.
Having Lily muse about her smaller room is a very nice little addition to the story, as much as I love things set at Hogwarts it always makes me wonder a bit how it would be to be at home so little for those who do not live with horrible relatives like Harry does so it was very nice to read something about that.
The description of Petunia through Lily's eyes was another interesting read which added nicely to and fitted in well with the canon. Especially the part about the doll which shows well that it isn't just that she is jealous of her sister being a witch but someone who holds a grudge in general.
One thing I did notice was when you wrote "Petunia Evans get down here" it wasn't very clear it was their mother who yelled it, though I assume and it makes sense that it would be her. I had to re-read it as it was a little bit confusing but really it's nothing major and easy to fix if you choose to do so. All the "she's" can be a bit challenging when writing a scene with all female's.
Another thing I really liked was how you had them go to Kings across by train, it's a nice change and indeed more of an adventure!
The contrast in this chapter when it comes to her relationship with petunia on one hand, it being so cold and distant, and Severus on the other was pretty cool to read and on the whole I think it's a nice first chapter. If you're still looking for a beta I'd be happy to help you out, just drop me a PM on the forums (my username is the same on there).

- "the end is only the beginning" Team Ouroboros; Operation Green with Envy (a forum reviewing event brought to you by the awesome House of Slytherin!)

Author's Response: I'm glad you like my story. It's the first thing that I've published and I didn't know how well it would go down.

I'll be sure to correct that.

Thank you for reviewing and I'm glad you liked it!


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