Reading Reviews for Coming Out of the Shadows
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Review #1, by Ohpl One Step Back, Two Steps Forward

11th January 2015:
I am enjoying your story very much. I look forward to updates.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you like it! Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #2, by HappyMollyWeasley The Aftermath

11th January 2015:
This was a good chapter too! I thought it was interesting with muggleborns in Slytherin. Especially how the other boys had to tell him about the war and about old prejudices.

Author's Response: Thanks, I thought it was interesting too! I haven't shown it much so far, but there's still a lot of prejudice both within and against Slytherin, so a muggleborn Slytherin seemed like a good way to highlight that. I'm so glad you're enjoying the story!

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Review #3, by shez The Unexpected Sorting

10th January 2015:
Hey there! I'm on my phone right now so forgive me for not leaving a lengthier review (I'll definitely do that for the other chapters). Anyway, just wanted to tell you that I like the premise of the story. I ADORE black sheep!slytherin!AL (especially when he and Rose are friends) fics so I just had to say something. Also, Your writing is technically sound and I love that you plan on using a revolving third person narrative to write Rose-Scor-Al. It's literally my most favorite thing ever ever!

Some concrit:

-scene brackets and spacing! Make sure your scene shifts are obvious and the spacing in he whole chapter is uniform.
-don't use the sorting song as the summary. Go for something snappier and more concise. You'll get more readers this way :)

I had some more notes if you're interested, but I'll leave it as is for now. All in all, a promising start! Can't wait to see where it goes!

Author's Response: This is super helpful; I'd love to hear more! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story thus far!

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Review #4, by HappyMollyWeasley The Unexpected Sorting

10th January 2015:
Good start! I'll con reading! :-)

Author's Response: Thanks! I'll continue writing.

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