Reading Reviews for Beneath the Silver Moon
  
5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Pretense Of Perfection One

25th May 2014:
This is a really great first chapter. I'm a sucker for horror stories, and this one seems to be full of promise. I can't wait to see what happens to Aidan and Roxanne.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I've got a few other updates to get through and my JulNo, but I'm hoping to have more up soon. :)

Thank you so much for leaving a review!

Sam.


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Review #2, by Lostmyheart One

16th May 2014:
Sam.

Sam...

I... I seriously don't know how to start this review. Mostly because I'm so disturbed by what I read, because it was so hopeful to begin with, so sweet and loving. Then the next moment it turns dark and I can't help but fear for Roxanne's life. The way you described her sudden silence made me think that they killed her, but since he didn't hear any spells called out loud, it's hard to say.

I love how you described this awakening, it was so well-written and it was so reliastic, I could see it all in my mind. And I liked that his first thoughts were on Roxanne. But there are so many questions I want answered! Like why was there werewolves outside? Why was he there? What did they want to do with him? He was so innocent (or so he seemed to be) and Roxanne too. And because I have all these questions, I can feel my heart beat faster as I read on. It's so captivating, and I'm so thankful you didn't stop the story there, or I would've hexed you to a country far, far away :P

But seriously, I'm so stunned by this story. Ending the chapter like that was very powerful, and I felt so sad for Aidan :(

Thank you so much for entering my challenge, and I will definitely read the following chapters!

- Avi

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Review #3, by alicia and anne One

15th May 2014:
Ahhh! New story! I'm so excited right now!

Ooh I love that line about shadows being like warped puppets on a string. Very eerie!

Aw Aidan and Roxanne! :D *Loves them*

Aidan she loves every side of you! Don't be wary of her love! *squishes him*

Poor Aidan having to worry about the moon :( Sadly the life of a werewolf.

NO! DON'T HURT AIDAN! DON'T HURT ROXANNE! WHY AM I NOT THERE TO SAVE THEM?!

Oh no...Oh no...please don't do this to me, Please don't do that to him. I don't want them to all be in there during the full moon, I don't want them to fight.

No! Don't leave it there Sam! Don't make me so sad! I am going to pester you! I need answers!

Absolutely brilliant, Sam! I haven't said this enough but I love your writing so much! By far my favourite author! The way you have with words is amazing and the ideas that you come up with to torture me and your characters is absolutely genius!

:D

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Review #4, by HufflePuff_Blitz One

15th May 2014:
I really liked it Sam!
There was the part: "I'll tell them all, whether you're there not. Then you won't be able to stop me," he answered honestly.
I think you meant to put an "or" between "there not".
Otherthan that great as always cant wait to see where this goes!
Kyle

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Review #5, by MargaretLane One

15th May 2014:
I like your first paragraph. It kind of sets the scene and creates atmosphere. I'm not that great at atmosphere, so I'm impressed.

Aidan Douglas -fine Irish name. Actually, I'm not sure if Douglas is an Irish name or not, but I've certainly met people with that name.

And I love the way you describe him pulling Roxanne down the steps. Brilliant use of description.

This is RIDICULOUSLY nit-picky, but you use their names a lot, to the point it is kind of noticeable. It might sound better to replace some with "he" or "she". As there is only one boy and one girl, it'll be perfectly clear who's who anyway.

OK, I'm rather confused as to who is with them and why he is attacked. I'm guessing I'm supposed to be though. *is intrigued* I assume it has something to do with his lycanthropy.

Love the ending of the chapter. It sums things up so succinctly, while only making us want to read on to figure out exactly what is going on here.

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