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Review #1, by greenbirds Dolores Umbridge

20th February 2014:
Hey! I'm here form the Ravenclaw Review Battle.
This was a really interesting and thought-provoking piece. My best friend was diagnosed with anorexia a few years ago, so this struck quite a chord; she was never bullied or taunted like Dolores was though.
I really enjoyed reading this, you have a fantastic style of writing and you manage to really capture what Dolores is thinking and more importantly, feeling. It's an interesting take on her character, I've read her as being madly in love with Barty Crouch and then alternatively being a lesbian, but I've never read her as fighting an eating disorder! That's creative, and you pulled it off really well.
My only criticism is that maybe you could inject some descriptions to really make the images and scenes you paint more vivid? Maybe also, some interactions with the meaner girls, or interactions with boys.
Also, I'd like to point out that you typed this twice:
"I found the empty bottle in your bag - anything else I should know about? Other than that you haven't been eating." Madam Pomfrey scolded her gently, and it took Dolores a second to realise what she was referring to - the weight loss potion! She'd never managed to get rid of the bottle.

To conclude, a brilliant piece and I look forward to reading more of your work! Bea xx

Author's Response: I don't have any personal links to this kind of eating disorder, so I was a little nervous of what people who did might think. I'm glad you say it struck a chord, as you must know better than me what it's like.

I've never actually managed to find another Umbridge fanfic, apart from maybe as a minor character (haven't really looked, tbh). Those other takes sound interesting - Barty Crouch? I've written her with Fudge, though (set just before OotP). Honestly, though, I think everything with Umbridge in would have to be creative because it takes a lot for someone to end up like that and to make people not hate her.

I was a bit wary of description, as when I checked with staff about whether this would meet TOS the response was that reference was fine but glorification and detail were definitely not. I do see what you mean, and I toyed with actual interactions but they didn't want to come when I was writing (I just put whatever feels natural, often don't even read back before posting) so I didn't bother trying to force it - I just do this for fun, not really seriously (time spent researching begs to differ - obsessive compulsive).

Did I? I'll have to go back and sort that - there was probably some copying and pasting involved.

Thank you for the review!


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Review #2, by anonymous Molly Weasley

19th February 2014:
Please update as soon as you possibly can, I am obsessed with this story x

Author's Response: I've got the final chapter planned, but I need to get in the mood to write it (you can't do depression and misery if you're happy and hyper!) Next few days, hopefully. Thank you for reviewing.

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Review #3, by megan Luna Lovegood

19th February 2014:
awk wee luna! luv this, 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you!

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Review #4, by anonymous Dolores Umbridge

19th February 2014:
I feel like it's really out of character but I like it because it's as if there's a whole new side to Umbridge that was never shown in the books. Keep up the amazing work!!!

Author's Response: Well there must be another side because no-one would be born like she ends up. Her character changes a lot - even after this point, when she begins working. Thanks for reviewing.

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Review #5, by Laura Molly Weasley

19th February 2014:
I love this story, even though it tears me up inside.

Author's Response: Thank you! The Fred Weasley hints sneaked in, and I went "no" and then "yes" and "I hate myself" but they had to be there. Thanks for reviewing - even one sentence means a lot.

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Review #6, by befuddledbroomsticks Molly Weasley

19th February 2014:
Maybe I'm an emotional wreck after reading this and maybe I'm in tears but oh my goodness you have a gift! This was fabulously written.

Author's Response: Thank you so, so much, it's late and I'm tired but you have just made my day in two sentences. Honestly, I'm just re-reading that review again and again and it is so encouraging, because I can't help worrying about my stories until someone comes along and gives me a review like that. This is why I write, why I post on this site, and I am writing too much now but I do mean it - Thank you!

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Review #7, by befuddledbroomsticks Luna Lovegood

19th February 2014:
This was beautifully written, but now I'm terribly emotional and I'm just gonna go cry.

Author's Response: I'm sorry, I'm so cruel to be happy but my dream is to be able to affect people like this.

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Review #8, by befuddledbroomsticks Dolores Umbridge

19th February 2014:
This was excellent! I couldn't stop reading.

Author's Response: Thank you! An absolutely gorgeous surprise waiting when I logged on after a short break.

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Review #9, by Emily Dolores Umbridge

19th February 2014:
Wow, I thought I hated her but now I can't bring myself to. You're very talented :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I understand how you feel - I hated her until I started writing.

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