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Review #1, by LightLeviosa5443 Lifeless Diamonds, Porcelain Hearts

20th February 2014:
Hi!

I'm (finally) reviewing all of my challenge entries!! So sorry it took so long!!

I see what you mean not being as fluffy as is conventional, but I kind of loved this story. It was so sweet, and touching and believable. I loved that you made her seem so perfect in the public eye, but so broken in private. And that Draco actually cared and said as much. It was touching to read that part of Draco, and that he would extend that when he noticed something was wrong.

I loved that he pointed out that he didn't want her to hide behind the mask she puts on for the public, and that he offered for a new ring. I mean, I wouldn't mind having a ring encrusted with diamonds, but Astoria's different, I suppose. I think you did a really great job with this story.

It wasn't conventionally fluffy, but it was cute, and lovely. Thanks for entering into my challenge!

Good luck!

xoxo Sarah

Author's Response: I'm so happy that you liked it--I knew it wasn't quite the stereotypical Valentine's Day plot, but I'm not really a fluffy writer; I tend to write darker stuff, and this idea really appealed to me. I'm happy to hear that you liked the juxtaposition between Astoria's public and private personas.

I'm glad that despite the story being a little unconventional, you found it sweet and believable. Whenever I write Draco, I try to be very careful to flesh him out from the kind-of flat character that he is in canon, while not straying too far from his established personality, so it's good to hear that you think I accomplished that.

I tend to agree with you, I personally wouldn't complain about a big ol' diamond ring. :) But I feel like to Astoria, that ring wouldn't be anything special, it would just be one more ordinary and meaningless thing. And, you know, symbolism is always great. :)

Thank you again for your kind words, your review, and for hosting this challenge!

--TheSortingHat


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Review #2, by sweetypye0110 Lifeless Diamonds, Porcelain Hearts

14th February 2014:
love! Beautifully written. Draco's letter was perfect ;) great job!

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it--particularly the letter, as that's my favorite part of this one-shot. :)

Thank you for your praise, it means a lot! I love to hear back from my readers, even if it's only a few quick lines.

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Review #3, by CassiePotter Lifeless Diamonds, Porcelain Hearts

13th February 2014:
Hello!
I really loved this one-shot! I haven't read too many stories about Astoria and Draco, but I loved the way you wrote them in this one-shot! The contrast between the faked exteriors and broken interiors of both characters were really well done. I loved seeing that Astoria was desperate for an escape from life, and finally gets it in the end. And Draco's proposal followed by the letter were spot on. I think the fact that they are so similar in all the ways he says makes them a good match for each other, and I can see them really loving each other after this. I only wish the story went on longer! This was really great, and I enjoyed reading it! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Aww, thank you! I'm generally a Dramione shipper, and when I was assigned this pair for a challenge, at first I wasn't sure what I was going to do. But then I got the idea of Astoria being in a dark place and unhappy with her seemingly-meaningless life, and Draco helping her, and the story kind of just evolved from there.

I do think that Draco would be very messed up after the war, and that was an idea I wanted to explore. I'm so glad that you thought it was realistic!

I love the letter too--I think it's my favorite part of this one-shot, so I'm so glad that you liked it. :)

I'm so honored that you gave this story a 10/10, and that you even wish it were longer! Originally, I thought that this would be the end, but I like them together so much that perhaps I'll write a sequel one-shot. Who knows?

Anyways, thank you so much for your kind words. I really appreciate them!

--TheSortingHat


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