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Review #1, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing That's What You Do

9th July 2014:
Hey there.

This was a really good one shot! I was really impressed with the way you used second person POV... It worked perfectly for this. I was also really impressed with the characterisation you gave Sirius too. We all know he isn't a perfect guy, but how many girls would love to date him? I think here you must put so many people off him! I feel so sorry for the girl! I don't think you mention who she is but she does have such a tough time. In glad she realises she has kind of made her own bed, but that still doesn't give Sirius the right to treat her like he does.

You handled the flashbacks seamlessly... Something that isn't always done so well so kudos to you. I also love the repetition of "that's what you have to do" it sounds like she's trying to convince herself as much as anyone else.

Anyway, great job!!

Lauren :)
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Author's Response: Bonjour! :)

I really wanted to write a story in 2nd person so I just came up with this story :) I really hope I haven't put a lot of people off Sirius (I still love him to pieces!) and I know, I feel sorry for her too! And sorry for that, it's supposed to be Marlene McKinnon.

Thank you so much for a lovely review!

~Aimee xxx


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Review #2, by patronus_charm That's What You Do

9th July 2014:
Hi!

This was a really interesting one-shot, and I could definitely relate to Marlene a lot because of course every fangirl wants to get the dream guy they always fantasise over so it was nice to see that she did. But you didnít just make it fluffy though as you showed that Sirius wasnít the most ideal person to date and he could be a not so nice guys. I really liked all your stylistic choices in this story from the second person POV, to the flashbacks and the use of italics as it just gave this story so much more depth and made it a lot more interesting to read.

One thing I would suggest is working on your spacing because at the end of this one-shot there was a massive bit of text with no breaks in it which made it harder to read and concentrate and as you donít want that to happen to your readers I would perhaps suggest making them bigger so itís easier to read. Other than that it was a really good story!

-Kiana
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Author's Response: Hello there! :D

Thank you so much! I'm really happy that you enjoyed it so much :) Well, I didn't really wanna make it fluffy, I knew that a lot of people (including me) make Sirius out to be like really romantic deep down but I wanted to show another side of him!

Yeah, I struggled on how I would set out the last bit so I might just go back now and change it to that because it sounds like it would like better that way! Thank you :)

~Aimee xxx


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Review #3, by TidalDragon That's What You Do

7th July 2014:
Howdy!

Well this was dark, but a good read. Normally I detest the presence of infidelity in stories, but that primarily because people take far too cavalier an attitude with it or use it as a means to an end. Here, you showed its ugliness.

Your MC also goes down a road that is dark, but we all seem to know at least someone who has walked it don't we? I think it was interesting the words you used to describe your character's journey down that path because they really fed the flawed logic that I think makes the path possible - that there is somehow strength and power in staying committed to the betrayer. Most importantly though, you also did justice to the fact that despite that appearance (at least at first) and self-deception, there are moments - time spent alone - where one cannot hide from themselves and the person they've become.

I think you deserve kudos for confronting this topic in a realistic way. Thanks for sharing!

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Author's Response: Bonjour TidalDragon,

First off, thank you for a wonderful review! I feel the exact same when it comes to infidelity in stories and it frustrates me when people downplay it because it's a big deal in my opinion!

I definitely wanted to make it clear that although the relationship was destroying her, that she didn't actually love her and that she was staying with him because she felt some sort of power that was associated with staying with Sirius. The whole 'mask' scenario was one the main elements I really wanted to write about if I'm honest, especially the bit describing how her eyes were still hollow even though the rest of her face was fake. Because when you're wearing a mask, the eyes are the only part of the face that is still visible and I wanted to get that across without having to actually write that in the story.

Thank you for reading the story and reviewing!
~Aimee xxx


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Review #4, by mischief manage That's What You Do

19th April 2014:
I actually love this! Can you pretty please do another chapter

Author's Response: Thank you for a lovely review! :D I'm not really sure, I kind of had it pinned as a One-shot really because I would have no idea how to carry on the story :/ sorry
~Aimee xxx


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Review #5, by HPLOVER That's What You Do

19th April 2014:
THIS IS AMAZING. THATS IT JUST SI GOOD

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it! :D
~Aimee xxx


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Review #6, by befuddledbroomsticks That's What You Do

19th February 2014:
This honestly made me feel so many different things, like one minute I was so upset for her and the next I was about to break my computer I was so angry. That was a rollercoaster. I absolutely loved it though, except I wish she had just slapped him or caused him some sort of physical pain.
Anyway, this was perfect. Just thanks.

Author's Response: Haha:) I wish she had as well! I'm so happy you enjoyed it, it just sort of came to me on a whim and I had to write it :D No, thank you for taking the time to read it!

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Review #7, by Emily That's What You Do

19th February 2014:
This was beautifully written, definitely one of the best one-shots I have read in a long time.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so happy you liked it :D

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