Reading Reviews for Intrudamas
  
5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by lexiatel Tasks to be Accomplished

14th July 2014:
I came here to review your story since you posted at my review topic.

This was a sweet story, I couldn't quite tell if Rose was interested in him or not, or perhaps she was afraid to be. It is a one shot though, it's hard to get a LOT of info in those things, but I did enjoy the read, and all the characters involved,

Hugo was funny, but boy, he has his father's brains! LOL!

Scopius was adorable; in an annoying way though, hehehe.

Author's Response: Thank you! :)

With Rose, she's having trouble deciding because of A) How her family and his family would react to it (namely most likely blowing up) and B) How he feels about her and C) What that could mean for their friendship. So yeah, she kinda was afraid to be with him just because they already had such a good friendship and she didn't want to ruin it.

Hugo was fun to write! I've never really written him before so giving him some idiotic moments seemed just right. Scorpius was a bit of a challenge, as I wasn't quite sure how I wanted to write him so I'm glad you thought he was adorable!

Thanks again for the review! :)
~MadiMalfoy x


 Report Review

Review #2, by keyty Tasks to be Accomplished

17th March 2014:
Hello! Here with your requested review. Sorry it took so long -- RL keeps getting in the way!

This was so cute. I liked it a lot. I think I only caught one minor error, but I can't even remember what it was, so it couldn't have been too terribly awful. The only thing I would change is the POV switch. I would either keep it in first person, starting with Rose's, or keep it all in third person. The good thing about third person is that it allows you to see into everyone's mind without having to switch. It's really up to you, but I think it's best to keep it consistent. I think it flowed pretty well, given the short time frame. You can always add a bit more description here and there, of her house or of how they fidget when they're nervous and such. Overall I think this was really good! Great job!

Author's Response: No worries, it wasn't that long of a delay at all! If anything, my response is the one that's tardy! :)

I switched POV because that's just how I was able to get it to write better because if I kept it in first person, I wouldn't've been able to do what I wanted to with it. Usually with description, I have too much (in my novel's chapters at least) so this is refreshing! I'll have to go back and take a look at it. :)

Thank you so much! :)
~MadiMalfoy x


 Report Review

Review #3, by toomanycurls Tasks to be Accomplished

9th March 2014:
Hello!! Thank you so much for doing a review swap with me!

I got such a laugh and nice warm fuzzies from reading this. I like seeing how their young love developed and really enjoyed how Rose's family were a bit hands on with her life.

Scorpius is completely adorable in this. I really enjoyed his willingness to put himself out there quite boldly. I like that he had to ramp up his flirtation game after Rose just wasn't catching the hints. Even more impressive is that he went to Ron to get advice/help. I like that he didn't react well at first but went on to accept that Scorpius would end up with Rose.

Hugo spying on them was hilarious younger brother action. I really like that Ron sent him (and that he agreed). I love that Hugo spilled hte beans about Scorpius' feelings and the family's knowledge of that. I do feel a bit bad that he got stunned though - it was for a good cause though.

Switching from third person to first was unconventional but I like what it did for the story. The mistletoe was wonderfully placed plot and relationship wise.

This is a really sweet story!!

-Rose

Author's Response: Thank you! I absolutely loved writing this piece for patronus_charm and just myself also!

Scorpius was so much fun to write, I must admit! His complete failure with girls, and Rose especially, yet his willingness to just be so out about it was a fun character trait for me to explore with him. I had to put some sort of farcical aspect in there for him and for the Weasley family in general because let's be real, they're all farcical in some way or another! :P

Hugo intruding on them is something I've taken from personal experience somewhat--I have a brother and he likes to be "overprotective" of me when my boyfriend is around (please, it's been like 18 months, chillax bro) so I drew on that but made it even more hilarious and funny. :)

I loved the mistletoe bit and thought it was a better relationship point for them because it allowed them to simply acknowledge the possibility of being something without having to actually determine it! I almost wanted to be the mean author and have them feel nothing (i. e. no sparks) and then complete awkwardness ensue but I felt like I had enough angst on my page so I stuck with the fluffy happy ending.

I'm so glad you liked it! We should do this again sometime! :)
~MadiMalfoy x


 Report Review

Review #4, by patronus_charm Tasks to be Accomplished

3rd March 2014:
I actually saw your TDA request for this before the post on my profile, and I just started squeeing like a mad person because Scorose ♥

Ah I love Rose, sheís so cute and like Hermione. I really love this portrayal of her and I think it has to be my favourite of her so far. Then the fact she and Scorpius are friends! I never actually see them like that as theyíre usually hating on one another or all over one another, but this was so cute especially that lovely light-hearted banter they had going.

Whaha, I genuinely thought that Rose was mad at Scorpius given that she didnít reply to him but an intruder is even more exciting (yeah, this is a rolling review if you hadnít guessed so sorry for the jumbled up thoughts :P). I was just about to go on cheering for Scorpius with the way he went and stunned the intruder like that but then it turned out to be Hugo, and yeah, I felt really embarrassed on behalf of Scorpius. Poor Hugo, being knocked out, I guess he sort of deserves it though.

Aw, the tickling! So cute! That is all I have to say because when I was reading that I was just like qaperwfjpewrf, then the next part when was Rose was trying to be all cool and claim that the plant was some sort of experiment. Pah, I donít believe it because it seems to be too much of a coincidence. I loved how Scorpius guessed what it was though because usually Rose is the only smart one (or not so smart in this case), so it was a lot of fun to see it mixed up like that.

The kiss was so cute, I was just squeeing throughout it as it was written really well! Then poor old Hugo having to explain himself! I think I actually died of laughter that Scorpius dared to go to Ron for help on getting Rose because he didnít want his daughter winding up alone. That was seriously perfect and yeah, I donít Iíll recover from it for a while! Poor old Rose having her love life mapped out!

Thank you so much for this one-shot, Madi, it was perfect and seriously donít worry about the lateness, my gift was spread out so it went on for even longer :P

Thank you so much again for this! ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it!! IT TOOK FOREVER to get it how I wanted it--literally like 10 different drafts!

I really wanted this to be very canonical (ish since it's next-gen) so I made Rose very Hermione-like; always early and well prepared. With Scorpius, I just had a bit of fun, making him a bit of a turd but still Rose's best friend. :)

The tickling was fun to write just because I love tickle fights myself (of course I'm usually the one getting tickled because my boyfriend isn't but still) and just had to put one in there! And the kiss! I'm not one for smutty stuff so just writing this cute little kiss was great. :)

You made my heart melt with this super long and spectacular review! I hope to do this again sometime, maybe just for fun! :)
~MadiMalfoy x


 Report Review

Review #5, by 800 words of heaven Tasks to be Accomplished

2nd March 2014:
Hello! I'm here on a jolly old reviewing jaunt for the Gryffindor/Slytherin Blackout Bingo!

I love ScoRose stories so much, so how could I resist this? This was just so silly and fluffy and ridiculously funny, which I absolutely loved!

I liked your characterisation of Rose. She seemed a lot like Hermione, but a little less on top of things in terms of her love life. She's obviously incredibly efficient if she has all her presents and tree and everything organised a full ten days before Christmas - what a solid effort! And I loved how nerdy she is as well, but in a really practical way, trying to grow a plant out of her ceiling. That actually made me really giggle. Now I want a garden hanging off my ceiling, although I'm terrible with plants and hate gardening!

And OMG Scorpius! He's a bit of a loser, isn't he? I mean, he had to go to Ron of all people for help with his love life! That was so hilarious! I cannot actually believe there's someone worse than Ron when it comes to the ladies, which is rather unfortunate for Scorpius! Although to be fair, he got Rose in the end, despite how crazy the plan that he, Hugo and Ron came up with was! At least it worked, right? That's all that really counts :P

And OMG MERLIN CHALLENGE. I CANNOT WAIT.

Author's Response: Hi! Scorose is something I like to read, but haven't wanted to really try my hand at seriously ever (I have a Rose-centered one-shot where she's married to Scorpius, but it's not mainly Scorose) so I'm glad you liked it! I totally wanted to improve my fluff writing skills (in case you couldn't tell I do a lot of dark stuff) and this was a christmas gift so I was just like, why not!

I figured with Rose I'd stick to canonical for the most part, but then give her her own little quirks that made her my character too, you know? It's so typical of her and Hermione to be geeky but not realize how obvious or crazy it is so I just had to have her be prepared 10 days before christmas!

Oh Scorpius, I absolutely loved writing his character! Since we don't get anything in canon about him besides the fact that Ron wants Rose to beat him at everything, there is an infinite amount of possibilities as to how he can be characterized. I chose to make him totally awful with girls (and Rose awful right back with boys) so he'd be wallowing in self-pity for so long until he finally manned up and went to Ron, and that's saying something. He' s sort of like Peeta in this--admiring from afar yet it's still obvious to everyone but her.

And yes the Merlin challenge!! I will try to get the last few details for that finished up here before the weekend and get it posted and people can get started! I'm thinking end of May for the end date, which is when I graduate so yay free time galore to go through everything. I can't wait to see you in the challenge, and thank you for the *AMAZING* review!!! :)
~MadiMalfoy xx


 Report Review
If this is your story and you wish to respond to reviews, please login