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Review #1, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Chapter 1

11th January 2014:
Hey, Tammi! I'm here to review your entry for my Supernatural Creature challenge.

First of all, I do love a good Theo story. I'm so glad you decided to use him as your main character. Not that any other character wouldn't have been equally awesome, but I'm on a bit of a Theo high at the moment (well, a Tharry high). :D

Also, Tharry - Harry should definitely come and save him.

I was so excited that you kept the Succubus and that you were able to keep it within ToS. I think it's such an interesting concept and I was hoping someone would pick it. She's really evil, this Willow; I do not like her. Using, potentially killing, my poor Theo. I want her gone... but not yet, because it makes such an interesting story. :D

This was so exciting and I can't wait for more! Thank you for entering my challenge.

Sam.

Author's Response: SAM! MY TWIN!

Who doesn't love a good Theo story? I couldn't not use Theo in this story, it seemed to fit him a lot more than any other character would, apart from maybe a Dramione.
Haha Harry would definitely save Theo, maybe this could turn into a Tharry? Oh the possibilities!

That was so difficult to kept it ToS, took a lot of research and creative thinking. :D

Willow is very evil and I can't wait to write more with her in, there shall be more chapters soon and poor poor Theo shall need saving.

Thank you for the review! :D


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Review #2, by DracoFerret11 Chapter 1

8th December 2013:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums! I saw that you were also participating in the "Supernatural Creatures Challenge" and figured I would come and check out your entry! So, let's go over things:

Plot: So! This was a great take on the succubus creature! I liked that he was dreaming of her even before he'd ever seen her. Things moved a little fast between the first scene in his apartment and the last scene where she goes home with him, though. It might be nice to have a scene where he's at work and distracted, or something like that. Just to make things flow a bit better.

Characterization: I liked that you used Theo! He's one of my personal favorites. :) I wish we could have gotten more into his character, though. It would be nice to see just HOW confused he is when he's dreaming of this strange girl, how his family and friends react to him being so distracted. We got a hint of that with Blaise, but more could help flesh out the story. I also would have LOVED to see how Draco acts just around his friends. :)

Descriptions: Here's another place where more detail could have brought the story to life. I think what you have is good, don't get me wrong, but if you spend a little while with the little things (details, etc.), you could really make this incredibly realistic and maybe even a bit scary.

Interactions: Great job with the first scene between Theo and Willow. I liked that he couldn't control himself. That fits a lot with what I know about succubuses. Awesome job!

Overall, I think you did very well! Good luck in the challenge!

--Emily

Author's Response: Heya hun!! Aww I'll have to check out your story as well! I bet it's wonderful! :D

Thank you! I had no idea how to even begin with introducing this character and make it follow ToS. That's a really good idea! I didn't even think to include a scene like that, I will definitely have to add something like that in, thank you for your suggestion.

Awww I'm so glad that you love Theo, I love Theo too, he's so underused in my opinion. There will be more to this story! I'm planning on a few more chapters, which I'll explore more on the succubus and Theo's friendships.

Ooo I could make this scary, I would love to make this scary. :D

Thank you so much for your wonderful review hun! And I'm sorry it took so long to resond.


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Review #3, by Warp. Chapter 1

3rd December 2013:
Whoa. This is so chilling. I loved it, great work!

Author's Response: Thank you :D I'm glad that you liked it.

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