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Review #1, by Sharvi Unknown places and the Bro Code

22nd April 2014:
Hey! The story seems to be building up slowly which is good! I was wondering if you could update a little more frequently? It'd be fun to read more on what you've got to write.

Some constructive criticism- I think the site messed up your formatting, so you might want to go back and fix it so it becomes easier to read. Also, until now the characters don't seem to have a lot of depth (even though they are incredibly loud and hilarious) which is fine since you're only 2 chapters in. But maybe if you gave us a little more insight on how the relationships work in certain situations, it might help the audience get more from your characters.

That's my bit done, and I really can't wait to read what you have in store! Oh and one last question, what house is Albus in?

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Review #2, by Sharvi The Beginning of The End

4th November 2013:
Gah, you start off with the main characters death? That's just plain evil, but I really look forward to reading more. Good job on your first chapter :)

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