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Review #1, by RosieWeasly11 she's coming for you

15th July 2013:
awesome xx evil veela lol xx

Author's Response: aha, ikr! thank youu xx

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Review #2, by ImagineHarmony she's coming for you

14th July 2013:
Hi!

This was such an amazing one-shot! Truly! The words and how you described and the way the suspense just fit in is so amazing. It's hauntingly beautiful and I was just caught with the summary. The tingling feeling was there and i was like 'RUN RUN RUN!!!' and yeah, a great job. I love reading creative stories like these, and specially second person you, it adds a nice dimension to the story :) You also had good use of short sentences and the last paragraph just killed the entire story (in a good way) and sent it to wonderland gift-wrapped.

THIS. IS. AMAZING.
Wow.
Where is your carnegie award?

:D

Author's Response: Hii! Wow, I really didn't think it was that good. Honestly, I wrote it in like, two hours. But HOMG THANK YOU SO MUCH! Yeah, my English teachers always go on about "varying sentence lengths!" so I thought I might listen to them for once :P

(I think the award got lost ... like my Hogwarts letter :( )

Summer x


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Review #3, by EnigmaticEyes16 she's coming for you

14th July 2013:
I really loved your intro to this story with the legend, that was really cool. Although, I did notice that you say in the beginning that it's sunny, until you go too deep into the trees, then a couple paragraphs later, you say the moon is out and you can see it's light through the trees, and those two don't really correlate since it doesn't seem like time has passed that fast...

I liked the ending even better though. I got goosebumps just reading it! I love how you add the little girl to the legend, like now this woman has a daughter who'll grow up and be just like her. I'm still not sure what they are though, a vampire makes sense, but they don't really need poison. Unless they have some sort of paralyzing feature in their saliva or something, that's a possibility. I'm really curious to know what she actually does to the people finds. This was a very interesting story! I've never read anything like it before.

xxEnigmaticEyes16

Author's Response: Holaa!

I don't know, I think I was watching something on TV or I read something, but it inspired me to have a legend and some creepy women like sirens (they're not sirens, though) that kill men. I know, I have such a cheerful imagination. Ah, thanks for pointing that out :P I'll go and fix it as soon as I can.

Yeah, the girl and the woman are sort of ... colleagues, I guess? They both get a share of the men. Whatever they do to him. They're actually Veelas, but not like Fleur's grandmother (I'm sure she was a lovely Veela), mine are kind of like vampires in a way, but not at the same time. It's kind of hard to explain. But think of them as dark, evil, man-soul-sucking Veelas. :D

I might do a sequel, but I doubt it. Keep an eye out though :)

Summer x


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