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Review #1, by Sarah Stone Stride

26th June 2013:
This is an awesome start! Every character is developing its personality. I like how you ended the chapter in a cliff hanger. Cant wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad that you're enjoying it!

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Review #2, by Penelope Inkwell Walk

22nd June 2013:
Well, right off the bat I’d like to say that your writing’s very good. You have a nice rhythm and a good vocabulary--your words are quite well-chosen.

I can totally understand Hermione’s desire to be a bit more girly after a year of roughing it. And the Weasleys still having money trouble--a lot of times those problems are immediately fixed in post-war stories, but the way you present it makes more sense. No one’s likely to have much money in the wake of all that, so it’s a sensible choice to have them still working to make ends meet. I like it.

I am curious, however, about her feeling ‘unnatural’ and unworthy of Ron. I’d have thought of her as a bit more confident. However, it sounds as though she’s just gotten kicked out by her parents? So it would make a lot of sense for her confidence to be a bit strained. Plus, if she has her life together at the beginning, there’s no room for character growth.

Just thinking in print, here ; )

Anyway, I like it. I’m certainly interested to see what happened with her family and where this is all headed. Good work!

Author's Response: I'm glad you've enjoyed it thus far.
In the next few chapters, the reasons behind her lack of confidence and self-worth will become more apparent, and then things should make a bit more sense.

I hope that you continue to read my story.

-Thistle


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