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Review #1, by MargaretLane Exhaustion

13th March 2015:
Poor Rose; the experience has clearly traumatised her pretty badly, understandably. I hope Dobby will be able to help her.

I'm glad her teachers are understanding and realise she's not being lazy; she's just having a really tough time.

And I'm now thinking one of the teachers in my next gen. is needed here - nightmares and lycanthropy are two things they have a bit of an understanding of. This situation would probably be pretty upsetting for them though.

Wow, James seems pretty mature. I'm so used to seeing James as an immature Sirius or Weasley-twins typed character that it's surprising to see a story in which he's so responsible. It's always interesting to see the different ways in which people interpret characters.

I like how understanding he is.

Yikes, I can imagine how horrible it must be for her to think her little brother could die. Between that and the guilt she feels, it's hardly surprising she's having such a tough time.

You've written before "her or any of her cousin's." "Cousins" shouldn't have an apostrophe in it as it's not a possessive and "she" might sound better than "her," as you wouldn't say "before her had been born."

You portray her confusion and trauma really well, particularly in the paragraph where she's afraid she'll throw up the little she's eaten. I can almost feel her hurt. Poor, poor girl.

And if Fred DID hang around as a ghost, I very much doubt he'd remain in hiding for 20 years. He'd be way too busy using his new form to irritate and confuse people and to suggest new ideas for products to George. But it's clear Rose is clutching at straws here, anxious for anything that might help her brother. And of course, she's probably too exhausted to think straight too.

Poor girl. I really hope she gets the help and support she needs.

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Review #2, by MargaretLane Remembering.

13th March 2015:
Oh poor, poor Rose. What happened was an accident. OK, she should have done as her mother said, but she made a mistake. And honestly, so did Hugo, going out of the yard on his own. Things like that happen by luck, but it's hardly surprising that the poor girl would blame herself.

The line "if he hadn't have screamed" sounds kind of odd. "If he hadn't screamed" would probably sound better.

Good on Ron for letting her know she's not to blame. It would be easy to overlook her in their worry over Hugo and honestly, she probably needs support almost as much as he does.

Author's Response: I just want to hug her, she didn't mean for it to happen and it was a mistake. I can understand why she blames herself but she doesn't need to.

Ah, thank you for pointing that out, I shall go back and change it :D

Ron is definitely going to do his best to make sure she knows that she's not to blame for this. She does need his support, you're right.

Thank you once again! :D


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Review #3, by Iellwen Remembering.

31st August 2014:
Heya! I'm finally here for our Pit's August Review Exchange! :D

Wow, what a powerful first chapter! The guilt Rose will live with, whether Hugo survives the attack or not, will be quite the heavy burden and I'm very much looking forward to reading on! I love the idea of a Next-Gen kid not growing up in a perfectly peaceful and wonderful environment!
And the guilt Hermione will carry! She was 'too busy with paperwork' so delegated watching over Hugo to Rose; she 'chose' work over her kids and that's what happened...

Ack, that's a really messed up situation and I can't wait to read on. Will Hugo make it through? Will Rose overcome the trauma of 'failing' her younger sibling? Will Hermione overcome the horror of 'failing' her children and relying so much on her young daughter?
That's good drama right there! :D

Of course, no one is really at fault here; no one could have foreseen the attack, even with all the warnings and protection spells. They all felt safe and one tiny little mistake (if you can call not wanting to always play with your younger brother and wanting to spend a little time alone a 'mistake') escalated very quickly. I'm glad Rose isn't being held responsible (what kind of moronic adult would hold a child responsible for their short-comings, especially in such a situation?!) and I'm very much looking forward to read about her journey to recovery, if one may call it so. She will, after all, have to go through a thing or two and experience new perspectives to be able to let go of her guilt, to forgive herself...

Aah, I'm very much intrigued and I'm off to the next chapter ;)
Cheers!

*Gee

Author's Response: Heya!!

Thank you! You're right, it will be such a heavy burden to bear, especially because she could have prevented it from happening. As could Hermione, if she wasn't so focused on her paperwork.

Aww thank you! :D

You're right, no one could have, but that won't stop any of them blaming themselves for what happened. I have all of the other chapters planned, I've just put this story on the back burner as I focuse on finishing my other stories (I have too many WIPs)

Thank you so much Gee!


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Review #4, by LittleLionGirl Exhaustion

25th July 2013:
Another well written chapter. I am happy that her cousins care so much about Rose. I like knowing that her dad talked about Fred rather than hiding his memories away. I hope you continue with this!
XOXOOXXO,
LLG

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D They care a lot for her and worry about her.
I wanted to include Ron talking about Fred, I want to imagine that they would want to keep Fred's memory alive and let the children know how amazing he was. :D I will continue with this, don't worry. I have it all planned out, it's just getting time to write it.
XOXOXOXOXXOX


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Review #5, by LittleLionGirl Remembering.

25th July 2013:
This is an amazing start to a story and it shows what happens sometimes in real life (minus the werewolf) that children don't think about. What will happen to Hugo? It will be interesting to see how Dobby fits into the next gen story. I think the flow is nice and the tone is very fitting. I can feel Rose's retreat every time she talks about the incident.
XOXOXOXOX,
LLG

Author's Response: Thank you for your kind words, I'm glad that I got that across well, I wanted Rose to be like a normal kid and worry about what she wanted to do.
Hugo will be in the next few chapters, he got badly bitten. :(
Dobby will be soon, he helps out Rose. :D
Thank you so much for your kind and amazing words! :D You're so amazing!
XOXOXOXOXOXXOX


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Review #6, by heartjily4ever Exhaustion

22nd July 2013:
So hey, this is me with another of my reviews. I just want to say this is the sweetest, well not exactly sweetest plot but sweetest thoughts from Rose ever. It's so unusual as well, and I can't imagine how rose and dobby will meet but I am excited to see this.

Author's Response: HEY!! :D I love your reviews!
Aww I understand what you mean, poor Rose. She didn't mean to have that happen to Hugo.
She'll meet up with Dobby soon, I can't wait to see what you think of the rest of this story. :D


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