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Review #1, by HeyMrsPotter Rose Weasley

5th August 2013:
Hello, I'm here with your requested review!

Personally, I thought that the sarcastic tone definitely came across. I've not read a huge amount of Rose/Scorpius stories but I've read enough to know that you were going for all the cliches here!

I thought the introduction was excellent, all the signs lead to this NOT being a typical 'Rose as a chaser, perfect combination of Ron and Hermione, brainy AND brawny girlfriend of Scorpius' story and then BAM-it is :D Very clever!

I liked the different sections to it at the different points of their lives together, the bit about the daily prophet having a poll about baby gender and name was brilliant! It reminded me of all the royal baby hype there was recently!

Albus and Scorpius being best friends and respective team captains was also great, this happens so much in next gen stories!!

A few small points for improvement:
Generally numbers under 100 are written in word form, someone once advised me of this and it actually makes my writing flow much better :)

'Jonah's daycare' should probably be nursery, daycare isn't a word often used in Britain :)

Other than those very very minor points (I'm awfully picky when reviewing, sorry!) I thought this was excellent. It's crazy that there is a stereotype for a character who we know nothing about other than her name but fanfiction has definitely created one and I love that you've taken that and written a great parody from it. I really enjoyed this, it was lighthearted and fun, great job!

Author's Response: Picky is good for me, don't worry! :)

Sarcasm is basically a second language for me so I'm so glad it came across well for you! I decided I had to put in every single cliche possible and make it very "canonical" in a sense. ;)

I did not know that about numbers, so thank you! I will go back and change that soon. I am American, so I wouldn't have caught the daycare/nursery thing, so thanks for that as well! :)

Thank you for the wonderful review!! :)
~MadiMalfoy x


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Review #2, by santosh Rose Weasley

24th July 2013:
I like it so far

Moore chapters soon please!

Author's Response: This is actually just a one-shot I wrote for a challenge, so there won't be any more chapters, unfortunately. I'm glad you liked it though! :) If you have any questions concerning why I put in the scenes I did, check out my MTA page on the forums. :)
~MadiMalfoy xx


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Review #3, by ginerva_molly_weasley Rose Weasley

18th July 2013:
This is just simply wow!

The structure was mind blowing especially with the opening paragraph at the beginning which really set the scene about what was going to happen which I really loved as I couldn't wait which part of it was going to be shown in the different age categories which is truly wonderful!

One thing I really noticed though was that at the beginning I felt that you did really start to list people and their roles within Quidditch. I didn't really feel as if all the names needed to be mentioned and the quidditch roles weren't needed either. Also I did feel as if the ending was a little rushed with the penultimate paragraph as again it was listing once again!

On the other hand I particularly loved the 19 years paragraph as it is at a point where she had discovered a lot about her life and discovered what she wanted to do so I loved the idea about the house and the sweet relationship with Scorpius making her coffee before her first day at work.

I really loved that you added in the 27 years one which is completely lovely and it shows Rose as both a wonderful mother and a career woman. I also love Scorpius as a healer as I think it really suits his personality.

I loved it!

Author's Response: "Wow?" You think this is "wow" material? Thank you!!

Now that I've gone back over it a couple times, I do realize I kind of did that, and towards the end as well. I will go back and fix that, maybe just add some other details in instead. :)

I actually wrote the 19 years one first and then the 15 years second, so I wrote it all out of order, but it fit together nicely. I was originally planning on writing a 17 years one, but I ended up cutting it because of the confusion it could have caused, like why she wasn't in Hogwarts, etc. Thank you for the lovely compliments!! :)
~MadiMalfoy xx


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Review #4, by maskedmuggle Rose Weasley

18th July 2013:
Hey!

I really liked this! I thought it was a great take on a ScoRose and I liked how you had the different events at different times of Rose's life. It's always fun reading about quidditch! There seems to be a lot of really talented quidditch players in the Weasley bunch :P but I guess that really isn't too surprising given their genes and how many there are! I liked that conversation between Rose and Scorpius - it was pretty short and simple, but it did convey a good sense of their relationship! I think it was really interesting that you didn't just make them all about the passion - some writers describe that a lot, and whilst it works wonders sometimes, other times it feels like cliche.. so good work on that :)

My favourite flashback was the last one though - the one where they have Jonah and live together! For some reason, this line just made me really smile: "I canít help it if the kid shows natural Chaser abilities! Itís best to let him get it out of his system!" Hehe. I'm a little confused about why they had to elope though? It seems like they have a very supportive family and friends? Other than that though, I thought this was a really nicely written story and I enjoyed it!

- Charlotte

Author's Response: I really liked writing the different points in Rose's life, as it allowed me to show how she developed and changed over the years without having to have every single detail of her life there--just little scenes that epitomize her character. With the passion thing, I do read that a lot and I wanted something different from the norm, so I'm glad you liked it. :)

That was my favorite too! This was written for a parody challenge so I had to have fun with it! That line is probably my favorite. :) Thank you for the wonderful review!! :) If you have questions about certain details in this story or any others go check out my MTA page on the forums. :)
~MadiMalfoy xx


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Review #5, by patronus_charm Rose Weasley

10th July 2013:
Hi Madi! Iím here to review your entry for the parody challenge!

I thought that the spilt time frame structure worked really well here. Thatís the one annoying thing about one-shots as we only tend to see one point in a characterís life, but in this one we got to see a large portion of it which was really nice. I liked how you didnít go into too much depth in the segments either because it gave a briefer but fresher view of her life.

Roseís narration was really great! She provided some witty comments and she was really down-to-earth. I think my favourite part was the opening section when she was talking about how she defied expectation so much. That acted as a really great prelude to what was going to come next and a humorous element when she was proved to be wrong.

Scorpius was really sweet too! I loved the fact that he drank Jasmine tea. Itís a really minor point but it added some much to his character and made me laugh a lot. His style of parenting was interesting too, with letting Jonah literally run wild. Though it must be fun for Jonah, I can imagine if Rose really is so like Hermione it wouldnít be too great in her opinion!

I really liked this entry and it made me smile! Thanks for entering my challenge :)

-Kiana

Author's Response: Thank you for having the challenge! :)

Since this was a parody, I really wanted to show how much Rose would "conform" throughout her life without going into super detail, because that's just too much then. I'm glad you liked the split time, it helped me use my sarcasm a lot better!

I was (am) afraid that people wouldn't see it as a parody because I have a very sarcastic sense of humor, so it's not all just right there for them. I put the jasmine tea bit in because my boyfriend actually introduced me to it and I love it so I was like hey, why not? :) Thanks again! :)
~MadiMalfoy xx


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