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Review #1, by NPE Chapter I

14th November 2015:

I am "Elderflowers" from the forum, though my pen name is NPE. Confusing I know. I am here for the review swap.

I really enjoyed your piece.

You know, it is really blooming hard to write a story such as this one. So even if it had been mediocre, I'd have given you a pretty positive review.

Some would be daunted by the period it is set in, others by the lack of JKR backstory to cling to. I admire your conviction for sure but imagining it your own way.

As it is not mediocre, I also have no choice but to happily give you a great review.

Your dialogue is terrific, you have clearly differentiated between characters, and they have specific, subtle turns of phrase that make them stand out.

Okay, some of the lines are obviously too modern for tenth century AD, and the overt references to Americanised perceptions of that era exist here, but the interplay between the founders is wonderful.

It also flows brilliantly, something that it is easy to say, but difficult to achieve.Will definitely browse through your back canon on the back of this.

And check out my story if you can, I know it is long, but erm, that's why I want someone to say where I may have gone wrong. No worries if you don't have the time, and just so you know, I wrote this review meaning everything I said. I didn't just give you a lot of praise so you'd flick through mine.

All the best,


Author's Response: Hi NPE! Thank you so much for the swap and for this lovely review!

I'm really glad to hear you enjoyed this chapter. Haha, you know, the period the story is set in was definitely a challenge but one that I enjoyed so much. I did a LOT of research for this story and learned so much as a result. And while there was little canon to cling to, it made for a lot of freedom in imagining the world within JKR's parameters.

It's really great to hear that you liked the dialogue as well. That was definitely the hardest aspect of the story - because as you pointed out, it's hard to keep it from sounding too modern. Tenth century English wasn't even really English as we would recognise it today. So while it's difficult to not make it sound too modern, there is a lot of leeway in it just because of how language has changed over time.

Thanks though, I'm glad you liked the distinctions between the characters as well! I wanted them to really personify what their houses are known for, but at the same time not have them be one-dimensional as a result.

As for 'overt references to Americanised perceptions of the era' - I would love to know what you mean here because I was definitely not trying for that. Do you have any specific examples? cos I'd like to fix it, if so! :)

I'm glad you like the flow of the story too, thanks!

I have looked at yours :) Sorry for the wait, I'm just a slow reviewer! Thanks so much for the swap.

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Review #2, by Frankie05 Chapter I

14th August 2015:
Oh my goodness. I have never read a founder fic before and I am so glad I started this one. It makes me want to read more of them, and I definitely want to keep on reading this fic!

I like how you started this out with Ravenclaw! It's interesting to see her in her manor and her abundance. She is clearly so wise and these inferior men only wanting her for her money and she is not interested. It felt like I was reading Brave!

I like the butterfly feeling that she gets when she sees Salazar. It's so cute, but why isn't he at this gala? He is a pureblood? But he comes to her rescue and whisks her away to Helga's house. And then we meet Helga Hufflepuff and we also meet Godric Gryffindor. The way you described these four is spot on! They are the most of their attributes, but what I like most is that we see them with their past experiences and how they walk and what they say. It is the most beautiful of descriptions to see where these founders came from. Helga is married which is interesting. Gryffindor is a red head but strutts around. I love everything about this story! It's so great :)

I'm so excited to read more of it!


Author's Response: Hi! Ah, I'm so glad you decided to read a Founders fic and that this story made you curious to read more! I absolutely love the era - the old-fashioned feel of it, the difference from that era and modern day, and the way it intertwines with history. I love history and had so much fun working that in. Enough of my rambling though...

Thanks, I'm glad you liked the way this started and the characterization of Rowena. Haha, I'd never associated it with Brave but I can see why it would make you think of that :P

Salazar isn't at the gala because he wasn't invited. He's only visiting in town and isn't familiar with the Lord and Lady Ravenclaw. (Also, because I just didn't think about that :P ) Ah, and I'm so glad you like the characterization of the four Founders. It was really fun writing them - making them really exemplify what their house is known for - both the good and the bad aspects of it, as will be seen later on. And yeah Helga is married - in this time period it was pretty standard for women to be married young.

I'm so thrilled you enjoyed this first chapter, and excited that you want to read on! I hope you enjoy the rest :) This was such a wonderful review and really made me smile, thank you so much!! ♥

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Review #3, by Shadowkat Chapter IV

19th June 2015:
Here, slightly late, for our swap!

Interesting chapter. I like how you included the farming season as the time to let the students off, as well as the thought they were putting into classes. However, there were a few things that bugged me.

First, I agree with a lot of what Hogwarts27 said. The dialog seemed a bit choppy, and some of the events seemed not to fit with the time period. As you probably noticed, my story doesn't always use old English dialog, and some things, like a bookstore, wouldn't have fit. The latter was more of a slip (creative liberty card. It's in published novels, I have an excuse! XD). But the former is more for the sake of flow. It's easier to read and sometimes old language puts people off. I also, like their review said, didn't understand the reaction with the snake when magic in general was seen as the work of the devil. Especially with how much she seemed to care for him before.

However, overall I liked it. JustJustbe careful with a few things. :)

Author's Response: Hey :) Thanks, I'm glad you found it interesting and that you liked the agricultural basis for the school seasons - it seemed pretty natural for the time period.

The dialogue used to be a lot more modern and I got a lot of comments about it being too modern, and I eventually changed much of it to be slightly more archaic. Maybe you would have liked it beforehand, but to me the modernness didn't really fit in this story. I'm sorry you thought it was too choppy. But either way, medieval Anglo-Saxon English was nothing like the language we speak today and so pretty much any style of writing can be believable, haha! :P Which events didn't fit the time period? I didn't think I wrote a bookstore in there... As for the snake, serpents were seen as evil and sinful in those times (as Christianity first began to gain a foothold in Britain) and so Salazar's connection to them really scared Maeve. Magic on it's own wasn't much of a deal in those days, not until a couple of centuries later at any rate.

Thanks for your review!

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Review #4, by Elfwynn  Chapter II

18th June 2015:
Hello! I kept on reading...

Great chapter! I really got a feel for the era in which the story is set. I love how you have worked the conflict with the invading Danelaw into the storyline it really frames the time period and sets the tone.

I like the way you have portrayed both Rowena and Godricís internal conflicts over their sense of duty. Again this seems to reflect the backdrop of conflict and rebellion against the invading forces. I also loved the sense of irony portrayed (in the first chapter) by the way that Rowena escaped from her duties by jumping out the window, having just criticised the lord for hiding from the invaders and not doing what she perceived to be Ďhis duty.í

The irony now, is that the muggle neighbours called on those with magic to save them in the battle but are then suspicious of magicís ability to heal. I like the way this is used to frame how muggles are ultimately weary of the wizarding population; magic is a force for destruction but not for healing.

It is interesting to see how the self assurance of Helga and Godric balances out Rowena and Salazarís conflicted personalities respectively. The story so far forms some interesting situational, intellectual and character based binaries.

I canít wait to read more.

Many thanks for the swap!

Author's Response: Hi! Wow, thank you - I really appreciate that you kept on reading! I'm so glad to hear that you liked the historical context and how it was woven in - it's really wonderful to hear that it helps set the scene and that you liked how it frames the era.

I love what you've pointed out about the irony about sense of duty - I hadn't thought of it in those terms but you're so right, haha. She was doing exactly what she criticized that lord for doing - although she might have argued that she had better reasons. :P

I really like your analysis of the Muggles' opinion of magic as well - they don't understand it as well and see the destructive side and how it can help them, but when it isn't helping them any more, people get uncomfortable with it.

Thanks, I'm really glad you like the characterisation so far and the different ways they interact with situations. I am loving your analysis of this so far! Thanks for such a thoughtful review, and for the swap!! ♥

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Review #5, by Elfwynn Chapter I

18th June 2015:
Great Chapter!

So this is set in one of my favourite periods of history (as you might be able to tell from my penname!) I love how you have set up the social, romantic and economic backgrounds for the founders. I also like the way that you have developed upon historic events in the storyline. Including the raids and conflicts with the invading Danelaw in the plot development really helps to gives a clearer understanding of the formulation and contextualisation of the wizarding world at this time.

Iím definitely going to read more!

Author's Response: Hi! Aw, thank you so much - I'm thrilled that you liked this! It is such a fascinating era of history, I love it as well, and I'm glad you liked how the background was all set up. I did a lot of research because I wanted it to be as historically accurate as possible, so I'm glad you appreciated the Danish raids and how it impacted the wizarding world.

Thanks so much for your review!

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Review #6, by Princesss Chapter IV

31st May 2015:
Hi there Marauderfan, I decided to opt to review your founders story just because it's my favourite era. I also decided to review the first slytherin chapter as that is my house and I thought I could give the most insight to it.

I really enjoyed reading this part of the story so far. It's great that you've explored the option of what caused Salazar to dislike muggle borns so much. I liked the twist that he fell in love with a muggle as it is a scenario I never would have considered myself. You made me feel sad that it ended the way it did between them but it fits with what we know and I love it overall.

Not only that but you also explored the making of the 'structure' of Hogwarts which I personally think is amazing. I find it enjoyable that it was a long process that led to what we know today rather than having it all set up from the get go. I enjoyed the aspect of the meeting with them as it kind of was a perfect way to show their different personalities while interacting with each other. The 'twist' with Rowena having feelings for Salazar is one I have considered myself and I whole-heartedly agree with. For some reason I cannot help but ship them and I plan to explore their relationship in my own founder fic.

Overall the writing is great. At times it could do with improving but only so that the flow of it became easier, though it enables me to really get into the mind of Salazar whatever. A great story and I cannot wait to read more.

Author's Response: Hi! I'm so glad you stopped by! And I'm super glad to hear that you are a fellow appreciator of the Founders era - there really aren't enough of us out there :p

Slytherin's POV was a really interesting one to write, as he has the most dynamic storyline of the four and changes a lot on the inside but very little outwardly. I'm glad you liked the plot of him and Maeve. I figured it had to be something personal for him to have such an extreme reaction about it all in the end with what we know from canon.

I'm really glad you liked the construction part too - I've been surprised by the reaction to that. Who knew construction was so fascinating! But YES - that feeling of a long process is exactly what I was going for, because something as revolutionary as Hogwarts had no precedents and wouldn't be easy at all to set up from the start. They had to figure things out as they went along. Ahaha, and I'm glad you like Rowena's feelings for Salazar. I do love writing a ship that's sinking from the start! :p But they do have a lot in common and really *could* have had potential. Oh well. :p

I'm so glad you're enjoying this so far! Thanks so much for the review!! ♥

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Review #7, by The Lady of Love Chapter VIII

23rd May 2015:

I would like to write this entire review in caps lock because I am having so many feels right now but I shall do this like a civilised person. THIS WAS A GREAT CHAPTER AND AN OVERALL AMAZING STORY.

I am glad I read this. You captured the personalities of the four founders really well and showed the events impressively. Your narrative was very strong and the descriptions were just great.

This last chapter definitely tied in the loose ends and it was sweet how it ended with Helga's narration and a little hope that maybe the school would outlive them. And it did. It was so bittersweet.

Oh and I also liked the entry of Peeves here. It was a nice little detail. The row between Salazar and the others, particularly Godric, was well-written. Again, a very heartbreaking scene perfectly executed.

All in all, I have had a great time reading this story. Your writing talent is amazing. Congrats on finishing this story. Great work!

Lots of love


Thank you for all of your kind words! I am really honored to hear that this was such a touching chapter and gave you all the feels. And wah, thank you for calling this story amazing! You are amazing too! I just wish I knew who you actually are so I can thank you properly!

Thank you so much, it's so great to hear that you liked the portrayals of the four founders and the events lesding up to Hogwarts' creation and eventual division of the founders.

So glad this tied up the loose ends as well - I tried to fit every canon fact about the Founders into this story and it's great to hear it all tied together nicely. Bittersweet endings are my favorite and despite how everything fell apart, I wanted to point out that they did succeed as we know Hogwarts still stands a thousand years later.

Peeves! I couldn't resist. With all the sad events, the chapter needed a little balance ;) I'm glad you thought the row was well written too - I figured that despite how strong the opinions and anger on both sides, they'd still be devastated to see him leave because 20+ years of friendship don't just go away.

Thank you so much!!! Your reviews have been so wonderful to read and I appreciate every word! ♥♥

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Review #8, by The Lady of Love Chapter VII

23rd May 2015:

Okay, back to coherency, this was absolutely heart-wrenching. Poor Elaine and Morgan, and poor, poor Salazar =(

What happened was definitely awful. It was indeed the last straw for Salazar, he just could not bear Muggles anymore, and now I don't blame him for it. The Muggles literally took away everything from him. And the appearance of Maeve was indeed a very interesting touch to top it all off.

Your writing is just amazing. Your concept and backstory behind why Salazar would hate Muggles, create the Chamber, raise the Basilisk and become so bitter is very well-crafted. It is totally on point and something I can imagine happening.

This was an exciting, interesting and very sad chapter. You've written the events perfectly and I'm curious to see how things end. Great chapter, great story, and I'm very very invested in this so if you don't know already, I loved it. Great work!



I really felt bad heaping all of these misfortunes on Salazar, as he'd already had enough bad luck so far. But it really needed to be something ter√ā¬ērible to push him over the edge and prompt him to the extreme of releasing a monster in the school to kill people. And I really was hoping to show him in a sympathetic light despite all the horrible things he does as a result - it's definitely not a black and white sort of issue, so I'm kind of glad to hear you say you didn't blame him for it!

Gah, thank you! I really appreciate all your incredibly kind compliments about my writing ♡ I'm glad Salazar's story feels very on point and realistic, thanks.

I am thrilled that to hear that this chapter was so engaging and that you're so invested in the story. You are seriously so kind! Thank you for your review!!

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Review #9, by The Lady of Love Chapter VI

23rd May 2015:
First off, I have to say how well researched this story is. You have put a lot of thought into it and that shows. I really admire your writing skills and your creativity here.

The game of Creaothceann is very amusing and funny and I'm wondering how you came up with it. Sounds like fun, haha. I also liked how you subtly introduced the whole Baron-Helena quotient here. Little details like these really make the story so enjoyable for me.

Things were sailing pretty smoothly in this chapter and I liked that. You captured the normalcy of life quite well here and there was a realistic touch. The descriptions were, as usual, very good and I am enjoying the narrative. This is a great story and I can't wait to read more!


Author's Response: Thank you! I actually loved doing all the research as I think history is so fascinating, especially this time period, and it was really cool to learn more about it as I didn't know that much about it before I started writing this fic. And wow, you're making me blush :p Thank you so much, it really means a lot to me that you like my writing style and creativity. I'm flattered.

Creaothceann is not actually my own invention, it's from the brilliant JKR's Quidditch Through the Ages. I thought it sounded hilarious and the time period fit so I wrote it into the story! I'm glad you like the introduction of the Baron and Helena in here. I'm a details person too (in writing anyway) and I'm so glad you enjoyed their appearance here. As you know, they do get more time to shine later on.

That was exactly the purpose of this chapter, to show everything running smoothly the way they intended, essentially their dream come to fruition before everything inevitably goes downhill in the end. So glad you are enjoying it!!

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Review #10, by The Lady of Love Chapter V

23rd May 2015:
This was an amusing little chapter. I enjoyed how the four Founders came up with Hat. You went along with canon very well and gave it your own spin at the same time. I enjoyed the hat's sassiness, haha.

I also liked how you continued to build up on Salazar's resentment for the Muggles and continue to show its growth. The little details really add to the depth of the plot.

Things are of course moving a little quickly but I am enjoying the pace nonetheless. You're not dragging things out and that's good. Salazar's marriage was a pleasant surprise and now Rowena is getting married too. I guess a good story always has a little tragic underlying unrequited love.

All in all, another brilliant chapter that I enjoyed reading. Great stuff!


Author's Response: Thanks! I tried to incorporate all the little canon details that I could, because there's not a whole lot of canon stuff to work with in that era in the first place. Haha, i really have no idea how the hat ended up so sassy - it kind of wrote itself that way!

Salazar, as you know, never really gets over that grudge. He's not the type to forgive easily and it just sticks with him, even though he isn't always vocal about it.

This section does hop around a bit in time, especially as the next chapter is like 16 years later (I think?) but most of the interim of Hogwarts finally running smoothly didn't really contribute much else to the plot. Besides, I think marriages were often arranged quite quickly back then. And yes. I'm a sucker for unrequited love in stories :p

Thanks so much for another lovely review! Also, this was the 100th review on this story which is really exciting so thanks for that!

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Review #11, by The Lady Of Love Chapter IV

23rd May 2015:
Oh dear no, poor Salazar. I can't believe Maeve left him just because he could speak to snakes. I fail to understand why it would be such a big issue for her though - was it really believed in olden British times that snakes belong to the "devil"?

What happened was definitely sad but it brought the twist that the plot was headed in - Salazar hating Muggles. It makes sense to have developed this bitterness after being betrayed twice. You showed the situation realistically, good job.

I loved this chapter the most so far as it held Salazar's point of view and I enjoyed reading it. The descriptions were rich and there was some interesting insight. The time jumps over the story are also smoothly done and all the chapters and the narrative is flowing smoothly. I am liking the story and I'm curious to see how you deal with the upcoming events.

Great job as usual! Loving the story and loved this chapter!

Love xoxo

Author's Response: Poor Salazar indeed :( The reason it affected Maeve so badly was because serpents were representative of evil and sin in the Bible and this time period was when Christianity was really starting to gain a foothold in Britain, and medieval religion was quite strict. So it was just a misunderstanding between them that ruined them :(

I'm glad you liked the way it turned the plot though. Salazar might have gotten over the first time years ago as attributing those actions to a particular group of Muggles, but now with Maeve betraying his love, then his bitterness and hate are extended to all Muggles.

I'm thrilled you like Salazar's POV! His was probably the most interesting to write of the four because he changes so much and his opinions are so strong. I'm so glad to hear you like the descriptions and the way the narrative flows. Thank you so much!!

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Review #12, by The Lady of Love Chapter III

23rd May 2015:
Don't you say this chapter wasn't exciting! It was in fact very, very exciting! I loved how you wrote the building process of the Hogwarts castle. Your descriptions were marvellous and I could really visualise it all. The idea that so many groups, from giants to house-elves, came together to build the school is indeed very creative and heartwarming. That is officially my head canon now too xD

What I loved about this chapter was the simplicity in Helga's thoughts. She is so dedicated, so thorough and so thoughtful - you've characterised her wonderfully. I liked how the four founders were working together here towards the school and how Helga played her part in the process.

The concept of them having a little struggle and little things still requiring some figuring out is quite realistic and it's good you showed that here. I am also enjoying the small details slipped into the narrative and discovering more of the founders' personalities as each chapter passes by.

Great job over all. I am really liking the story. Lots of love for you!

Author's Response: Haha, I should probably remove that A/N as I really didn't anticipate how many people would find the construction process exciting :p I think this was one of my favorite chapters overall to write though, because I really got to go back to the source of all these quirks that Hogwarts has and come up with the story behind it all. I think that Helga, as the person who was known for accepting basically anyone into her Hogwarts house, would probably know people from all walks of life and encouraged cooperation of all types of people (and house elves and giants) to build the castle. Aw! I'm flattered that this has become your headcanon!!

I'm so glad you like Helga's POV here. I think Hufflepuff is easily the most overlooked house and I wanted to give Hufflepuff qualities a chance to shine here, where I think she would have been really important.

I'm glad you appreciated their struggle in figuring out how to make it all go smoothly. For a project that big and groundbreaking, I couldn't imagine it all going by without any issues, so I'm glad this felt real to you.

Thanks for anoher fantastic review!! ♥

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Review #13, by The Lady of Love Chapter II

23rd May 2015:
Another awesome chapter! I loved how you've used different point of views in different chapters. I loved getting an insight into the events from Godric's thoughts here!

It was interesting how you cultivated the idea of bringing about Hogwarts here. The concept of Muggles and Wizards living together in peace but then turning on each other due to the war is very believable - and I think true to canon to some extent. You've done a brilliant job of portraying the scenario.

I am honestly hooked to the story - your descriptions are, you have a very interesting plot and I'm very eager to read on how the story shapes up. Definitely moving on to the next chapter(s)! I am glad I got to be your Secret Spring Santa and picked this story to read.


Author's Response: Thank you! This story was my first attempt at rotating POV's (and actually my first try at third person perspective, as well!)

It's really good to hear that the way the idea of Hogwarts came about seemed natural. As this was centuries before the Statute of Secrecy, I didn't think magical folk would be so removed from Muggle society yet, but foreign invaders would be a likely impetus to start driving them apart.

Wah, thank you! I'm so, so glad you are enjoying this and that you're invested in how things turn out! I'm really happy you're my Secret Spring Santa too. :) Thanks so much for your review. ♥

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Review #14, by The Lady of Love Chapter I

23rd May 2015:
Hello my dear, I am back! If you haven't guessed already, I'm your Secret Spring Santa and I'm passing along some love.

This is a very interesting story. I have not read much of Founders' era but you did a good job here. I am not expert on the historical times either but to me, this narrative was very well done and nicely aligned with the era. Your writing style is very engaging and I am enjoying the story.

Your characterisations of the four founders are quite interesting and I'm curious to see how things proceed. I like your Rowena and it's cute how you've a thing going on between her and Salazar. This chapter, being the first, certainly provided a good deal of back story to help set up the plot so good job!

I wonder how the two will come around to the idea of Hogwarts and how the relationship between Salazar and Rowena progresses. It's also interesting that Salazar is in love with a Muggle woman - I wonder what will happen next and how does this love turn to hatred for all Muggles.

Great story! Keep writing! I shall be reading the next chapter(s) soon =)

Author's Response: Aaah! This was the most wonderful surprise to see all of your reviews when I logged in today! Thank you so much, you really went above and beyond and this was so kind of you ♡

I'm really glad to hear you liked the story and that the style was engaging and the characters interesting, as I was hoping to give the founders the strong characteristics their houses are known for, but also make them three dimensional and real. I'm glad you liked the dynamics of Rowena's feelings for Salazar as well as Salazar's love for a Muggle.

Thank you so, so much for your review(s)!! I will be responding to the other ones soon :)

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Review #15, by Flower n Prongs Chapter I

19th April 2015:
Hello! I am here to leave a review tag review.

I have a history degree, but I admit I know next to nothing about 10th century Britain so if there are glaring mistakes in this for the time period, they have gone right over my head. One thing I did notice was that you used names that are more old-fashioned, such as Maeve and Cadoc, so even if they were not commonly in use at that time or in that area they feel like they fit in with the others.

So far, I am enjoying your characterizations of all four founders. The fact that you had Rowena making a lot of witty comments and making sure you did not just show her as "smart" was a nice thing for her character. Having Helga having recently moved would be a bit unrealistic if she was a Muggle, but who is to say that a witch and wizard could not move around as much as they pleased? The discussion between the two women about brooms was amusing, knowing how big brooms would become later.

The fact that you have given Salazar a reason to have disliked Muggles to begin with and now being interested in a Muggle is a very interesting twist! Seeing that relationship fail/go downhill (I am assuming) will certainly have a big impact on his future. As for Godric Gryffindor, having him armed with his sword and appearing brash was very similar to how I pictured him.

I enjoyed reading this, even though I am usually not as drawn to Founders fics. I will delve on further in the future. =)

Author's Response: Hello! Thanks for stopping by! :)

I'm glad to hear at least there are no glaringly obvious historical mistakes, haha. It's wonderful to hear that the names of the original characters in this fit right in with the canon ones, as well!

Thank you, I'm so glad you enjoy the characterisations of the founders so far - and I love what you pointed out about Rowena. True, she is intelligent, but she does appreciate wit (after all, that's engraved on her diadem! I like to think that the legend of it greatly exaggerated its power, and it's actually a diadem that makes the wearer capable of making really witty puns. Omg, new parody fic idea. But I digress.)

I think it wouldn't be too implausible for people to move to new places - particularly for reasons like getting married or something. But yes, definitely easier for magical folk than for Muggles! I'm glad you enjoyed their discussion of the brooms as well.

Salazar, I've always thought, had the potential for a really interesting back story to make him into the person history remembers, and this is my interpretation of how he got there. I'm glad you are interested in his particular story and the Muggle who has caught his eye. As for what happens, my lips are sealed!

I'm so glad you enjoyed this fic so far, despite you not normally going for Founders fics. Thanks so much for your kind review!

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Review #16, by Shadowkat Chapter III

5th April 2015:
One thing, didn't it say in the books that you had to know where to go and what the destination looks like before apperation?

Author's Response: Yes, you're right, I think it did. They were able to get there the first time because Laurence knew where the place was, and for students arriving later (with their parents) the location would be described well enough for Apparition to work, at least how I imagined it. Hope that clears it up for you! Thanks for your review :)

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Review #17, by Shadowkat Chapter II

5th April 2015:
Interesting chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you!

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Review #18, by Shadowkat Chapter I

5th April 2015:
Hey, I was looking back over the reviews I've had and saw yours. I decided to check out your profile, and am very glad I did. I love the Founders, but it's so hard to find good stories for them. I actually just started writing one myself, so maybe this will give me some ideas about the time period. (No copying, promise.)

One thing that's always bugged me, however, is that in stories like this they always have muggles knowing them. Honestly, I'd think they'd do there best to hide, try and pass themselves off as muggle to keep safe. Maybe that's just me though.

The writing is really good, though another thing that I've always wondered is how any of them were childhood friends. Didn't the books say they came from four separate countries? I'd think it would have to be some pretty big, possibly dark, spontaneous strings of events to bring them all together. Again, really like it. :)

Author's Response: Hello! I'm very glad you decided to check out this story too :) The Founders era is such an interesting time period, it's kind of a shame there aren't more fics set then, so it's great that you're writing one too!

I see what you mean about Muggles, though everyone has their own interpretations of the time period and this is mine. Personally, I thought it made sense that they knew Muggles, since this takes place 600 or 700 years before the Statute of Secrecy, and even about 300 years before witch burnings, so I thought that over time magical folk withdrew from Muggles, and didn't necessarily start out already segregated. There was nothing they had to really keep safe from yet (except foreign colonizers - the same issues faced by muggles.) But as I said, I'm sure there are many various ways to interpret Founders era society! :)

I'm so glad you like the writing - thank you! As for the four different areas they came from, I guess I took a few liberties with that in terms of how long they lived in those places, but I did try to keep to that idea (and relied on the hp lexicon for the really picky facts) - so:, Gryffindor from wild moor (West Country, i.e. where Godric's Hollow is), Slytherin from fen (also England, but in the east) Ravenclaw from glen (Scotland) and Hufflepuff from 'valley broad' (Wales) though in my interpretation, Helga moved from Wales to Scotland before the start of the narration, and Salazar no longer lives in his childhood home either. So Godric and Salazar, both born in England, became friends early on, and Helga and Rowena became friends when Helga moved to Scotland from Wales (probably as a teenager).

Wow, INFODUMP of all the inner workings of my brain for this story. Sorry that was waaay more than you asked for :p Anyway, there you have it. :p

Thanks so much for giving this story a read and for your lovely review! I appreciate it so much!

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Review #19, by LadyL8 Chapter III

26th March 2015:
Hello again. Iím back with my third review out of 4.

Firstly, I did not find this chapter dull at all. It was actually very interesting. We all know they built the castle, but we donít really know how it came to be. And Iíve always wondered about how they did it, because the school is enormous. And how did they come up with everything Ė like the changing staircases? And you gave an answer to that.

I love Helga! And itís not just because sheís the founder of our house, but because of the way sheís portrayed in your story. I like that sheís the warm, friendly and social one, whoís responsible for getting people to help build the school as well as getting students to attend. And it fits so perfectly with what sheíd later want from the student in her house Ė to be welcoming, including and friendly.

And I like that she loves cooking and basically taking care of everyone around here. I just imagine sheíd be like a Ďmumí for her student Ė doing her best to make everyoneís having a good time and yeahÖ taking care of them. In a way, she kind of reminds me of Molly Weasley, because theyíre both hardworking women, and theyíre both have a warmth and welcoming heart.

Oh, and I forgot to mention that I loved the story of how they came up with the name of the school. Iíve always wondered why itís named Hogwarts, cause that seems like a kind of random name. So I liked that they discussed it, and had a reason for naming it Hogwarts.

I also liked the sorting Ė that it just started with them having the students that already knew them, and Helga therefore got the most because sheís more known in the community. So she does Ďtake the lotí, but not in the way youíd initially think.

The friendship between Salazar and Helga was also nice to see, but I definitely want to see more Rowena/Salazar. Iím sorry but Maeve just got to go, because Iím shipping those two and sheís kind of in the way of their happy ending.

What Iíve found very interesting so far in the story is actually the portrayal of Salazar. He does not seem like the Ďbad guyí that historyís made him out to be. And heís interested in a muggle, and we all know heíll later come to hate muggles and muggle-borns. So Iím really interested to see what will make him change his mind. I wonder if Rowena had something to do with itÖ or maybe itís Maeve.

Anyway, as you can probably tell I liked the chapter. I think Ė like you say Ė itís very necessary to include, because building Hogwarts is what theyíll later be known for. And you answer a lot of questions we readers may have had from reading the books Ė like how they came up with the moving stairs or the name of the school. So yeah, I still very much like the story

- Lotte

Author's Response: Looking back, I think this was one of my favourite chapters to write, coming up with how Hogwarts got all its quirkiness in its construction/name/everything.

So glad you like Helga :D We do have such an awesome house founder! But given what the Sorting Hat said about her, it just seemed like she would be that sort of person. I think I had the most leeway with her character, as the Sorting Hat talks about her the least :P Oh, I love your comparison of her to Molly Weasley! I hadn't considered that, but I totally agree now that you mentioned it.

I felt that the name was something that needed to be included. I mean, it's a weird name. There had to have been a lot of discussion involved :p I'm glad you liked that!

As Hogwarts had just begun, and the news of the school was just spread by word of mouth through their little communities, I didn't think it likely that there would be many people there at all - just people they knew from their villages.

I'm glad you like the friendship between Salazar and Helga! Haha aw, I'm sure Rowena would agree with you that Maeve has got to go! :P More about Maeve and the Rowenazar ship in the next chapter...

Honestly, that was my intention with Salazar. He gets a bad reputation by the time Harry is in school, but I don't think the other three founders would be such close friends with someone who's 'evil'. He does have some demons in his past, and I figured there could be an interesting story with how he became the person history knows him as. I like your theories but my lips are sealed! Muahaha. Well, until next chapter.

I'm thrilled that you liked this chapter and are enjoying the story! I really appreciate your reviews, you are the best! Thank you ♥

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Review #20, by LadyL8 Chapter II

26th March 2015:
Hi again, Kristin.

Wow. I wanted more Godric and I certainly got it. This was amazing. Your talent blows me away.

I love Godric, and heís also very much like I imagine he would be. Heís just this caring, fair guy that wants to whatís right. I donít know if itís because I love GoT, but Godric always reminds me so much of Ned Stark. I imagine theyíd look the same, and theyíre both men of honor. And I love both of them, so yeah...

Anyway, I think Godric/Laudine is very interesting. I love that they have different views on things. Godric wants to fight fair and do whatís honorable, but Laudine just wants to save people and not die doing it. And I think sheís believes that is the honorable thing to do Ė to save as many lives as you can, no matter how you do it. So it all comes down to different views on whatís honorable and right. And I think these differences are what make them such a good couple. They even each other out.

And I love that they defend the muggles, because thatís what they (well, Godric anyway) will be known for later. And I kind of love that you start the story at a time when muggles and wizards co-exist, but then things go awry because of the Vikings (donít they just ruin everything?). And thatís when they end up making a school, so the young wizards and witches can learn magic without being scared of muggles hurting them for it.

Rowenaís intelligence really shines through in this chapter, even more so than in the last. And that is kind of strange, since this chapter is more from Godrics POV. But yeah, I liked seeing how smart she is. And you can already tell why she would end up having the intelligent kids in in her house.

And I love the Rowena/Godric friendship. They too are very different. Godric doesnít really want to give up fighting for muggles and wizards co-existing, even though itís clear theyíre heading in that direction either way. While Rowena sees the bigger picture Ė she sees that at some point wizards and muggles are not going to be able to co-exist with both knowing of the other. And then they kind of even each other out, because neither one of them is completely right or wrong. And itís the combination of their ways of thinking that results in the idea of Hogwarts. And I really like them co-working, it was great to see.

Anyway, I can tell youíve done lots of research for this story. Iím kind of a history geek, and Vikings are really my specialty because of where they originate. And so far I havenít noticed anything off, so youíve clearly done a good job in researching the tenth century England.

And I still love the story by the way. Now that they have gotten the idea of Hogwarts, I wonder what will happen next. And I canít wait to see more Salazar and Helga.

Good job. 10/10

Oh, and please ignore my terrible English. Iím sleepy right now.

Author's Response: Awww ♥ ♥ you are too kind! thank you!!

I'm glad to hear that Godric sounds a lot like how you imagined him. Ooh, and this is great because I finally started watching GoT recently, so now I totally get what you mean comparing Godric to Ned Stark - I can see why you'd think that. :D

That is EXACTLY what I was hoping to convey with Godric/Laudine. I really wanted to show their different philosophies on what is the "right" thing to do and how they both have valid points - and they compromise and listen to each other. I really liked writing the two of them together :)

I really wanted to explore a lot of wizarding history in this story and how/why things ended up the way they were - since it is set over a thousand years ago, I figured that very little would be the same. It was kind of neat to start in such a different frame of mind for wizards - I'm really glad you liked that aspect of wizards and Muggles co-existing and how everything led up to the creation of Hogwarts.

It's great to hear that Rowena's intelligence shines through more in this chapter. I figured Godric would recognize Rowena for her intelligence, and so maybe that's why it comes through, as his perception of her. I'm glad you like their friendship too, and how they each bring different points to the table that combine to create the idea of Hogwarts.

I did do a lot of research - I love history too :D And it's great to hear from a history appreciator who knows a lot about Vikings that nothing seemed off about the time period, thanks!

Helga is next (as you know) and chapter 4 is Salazar! I'm really glad you're excited to keep reading!

Thanks sooo much for yet another incredible review ♥

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Review #21, by LadyL8 Chapter I

26th March 2015:
Hello Kristin. I wasnít around when you guys had the review hot seat. And Iím close to my 4-year anniversary on HPFF, so Iíve decided to leave 4 reviews for each person that participated in the hot seat to show how grateful I am for you guys being around. And now itís your turn to get reviews.

I want to start by saying that this is the first founders story that Iíve read in a long time. And Iíve seen a lot of people praise your founders stories on the forums, so I figured Iíd give it a shot. And Iím really looking forward to reading it.

I like Rowena. I think sheís very much like I imagined she would be, but Iím really interested to see more of her intelligence. You can kind of see it when sheís talking about the Redwalds invisible castle/defense strategy, but I think it will be more visible as the story progresses.

And Iím really interested in seeing more Salazar/Rowena. It is not the first match Iíd think of, but I donít hate it. I definitely think thereís something there. And whatís interesting is that ambition and knowledge are really connected as well, cause you canít really reach your goals without knowledge (in most cases at least). And thatís also why a lot of Claws could just as easily be Slytherins and the other way around. And the fact that those qualities are so close-knitted, could also explain why Rowena and Salazar would fall in love with each other. So yeah, I think I like this pairing.

And I like Helga as well. Sheís also like I imagine she would be Ė a warm, outgoing and friendly woman. And I loved how Rowena explained her friendship with Helga. Because yes, they are polar opposites, but thatís why they are so good friends.

I didnít really see much of Godric in this chapter, so Iím looking forward to learning more about him. But I loved that he and Salazar are best friends, and that he has muggle friends. Thatís very believable considering what heíll later be and believe in.

Anyway, I think you did a good job in bringing out their different personalities, and you can already kind of see how Hogwarts came to be. So Iím really interested to see where this story will be going, and whether Rowena will submit to the pressure of marrying or not (I donít think she will)

And lastly I just have to sayÖ VIKINGS!!! I have to admit the Norwegian in me is very happy to see them in a story, even if I probably shouldnít be too proud of them being from my country (well, Denmark really, but close enough. Norway also had its own vikings, but theyíre not in your story). But seriously, I think it was great that you mentioned them, because I donít think wizards would be oblivious to what was going in the muggle world. And Vikings were really a problem for the British people in tenth century, so Iím glad you mentioned them.

Good job. I loved the story, and I canít wait to read more of it.

- Lotte

Author's Response: Lotte ♥ I'm so sorry it's taken me ages to respond to this - but these reviews you left really made my day!!

First things first, happy 4 years, we are lucky to have you here on HPFF! :D

wow, I didn't know this story was popular on the forums! regardless, I'm so glad that you found it and that you're enjoying it so far!

I'm glad to hear you like Rowena so far! I think in this chapter, her intelligence mainly shines through in her wit and her opinions on Redwald's castle, but you're right, I think it shows more in later chapters.

There are a lot of really compatible characteristics between Ravenclaw and Slytherin (just look at the number of Slytherclaws on the forums! :P ) For some reason I just really liked the dynamic of this pairing, and I'm glad you do too! It's wonderful to hear that you like my portrayal of Helga as well. As for Godric - as you figured out, he is the focus of the next chapter - but I'm glad you liked the short introduction he had here.

It really is wonderful to hear that you liked the way all their different personalities showed - that is what I was hoping to get across here, turning the characteristics that the Sorting Hat focuses on, into real people who encompass those traits. I'm very happy you're interested to keep reading, too!

Yes, Vikings!! All my research pointed towards Danish invaders being the main struggle for the Brits of the time. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed their inclusion in here (despite them not being Norwegian :P ) And yes exactly - before the Statute of Secrecy, when (I imagine) wizard and Muggle people mixed in society, wizards probably had a fairly good idea what was happening in the Muggle world, because they were a lot closer to it back then.

This was a truly wonderful review. Thank you so much! ♡

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Review #22, by Felpata Lupin Chapter VIII

22nd January 2015:
Oh my darling Kristin!
Thanks to you for this lovely story!!!
This ending was just so sad... But it's the way things were supposed to go, so...
I loved your including of Peeves in here :)
And I also think the choice of Helga's POV was perfect for the closing. Her empathy and her friendship give just the right perspective to the loss of Salazar first and Rowena next.
It's consoling to know that Hogwarts will, indeed, overlive them.
Thank you so much once again and all my love!

Author's Response: Hi Chiara! Thank you so much for your kind comments, I'm so glad you enjoyed the story! Gah, I know the end was sad, but that was what I had to work with from canon! Besides the fact that I can't seem to write a fic without killing off at least half of the characters :p

So glad you liked Peeves :D I thought this chapter needed something light and amusing to balance out the bleakness of all the other events that happened here.

Thank you, it means a lot that you liked the choice of POVs and that Helga's perspective worked well for a closing.

That's exactly what I was hoping for with that last line, that in spite of how sadly their story ends, their dream does come true as Hogwarts lasts at least a thousand years past them! :)

Thank you so much for all your support on this story! You are such an incredible reviewer. ♥

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Review #23, by Freda_and_Georgina Chapter VIII

21st January 2015:
Dyaaa! Tears! That is so sad. After all this time Godtic and Helga are the only founders to show for it! The historical notes proves what kind of author you are; one that does research before throwing things down on paper. and the time it took to finish shows the mastery and dedication to this short story. So glad I found it. Touching, realistic, and interesting.

By the way, all these reviews are thanks for not missing a day of our Hot Seat Reviews.

Author's Response: Seriously, five reviews on this from you today was like the best present ever! ♥ Thank you!

Gah, I'm sorry about the sad. I'm kind of incapable of writing happy endings. I am so glad you were touched by this story and found it realistic and interesting, those are such wonderful compliments. And I'm glad you found this story too! It's been a pleasure reading your reviews. Thank you so much ♡

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Review #24, by Freda_and_Georgina Chapter VII

21st January 2015:
That last line: brilliant! Oh perhaps it took you a year and a half to write but from my perspective it was worth it! I love the way you're developing these characters as the years go along and Hogwarts itself is evolving into something more like was we know today (you know, "know")

Beautiful work that speaks for itself.

Author's Response: Ooh, thank you, I'm glad you liked the last line, I was quite proud of that one ;) The year and a half was because I suddenly took a hiatus in the middle of writing the story and then it was difficult to get back into it after so long :-/ but I'm glad it didn't seem like a clunky transition or anything. Thank you so much, I'm thrilled that you like the way the characters and Hogwarts are evolving.

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Review #25, by Freda_and_Georgina Chapter VI

21st January 2015:
I realize this is mostly filler, but although it wasn't exciting, it was interesting. I kind of like how you have Helena, though she does seem to be revealing personal facts about herself quickly. I guess if she was really frustrated she might be more inclined to say things.

I love how much thought you put into this.

Author's Response: You're spoiling me with all these reviews today! Thank you so much! ♥

It was kind of fillery, but I thought it was important to show Hogwarts running smoothly, after years of struggles and before everything all goes downhill.

As for Helena, there was a 17-year gap between the previous chapter and this one, so I was hoping to show that she's close with Godric (and the other founders) so it's not like she's revealing a hugely surprising thing, just putting a voice to things Godric has noticed for a while as her teacher. But you're absolutely right - her frustration would contribute a lot to her sharing those things.

Thank you so much - there really was a lot of planning, and especially research, and so your last comment means a lot to me. :)

Thanks for your wonderful reviews!

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