Anna I will ask you nicely once
please start writing your arse off
now i will ask you meanly
get your lazy arse up and right.:D

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Aww, this was nice! Quite sweet, and I really enjoyed it! Haha, you probably won't even get this review, but I've been checking out a whole load of old fics on this site, and this was a really nice one-shot! I particularly enjoyed the fact that Lily was quiet and shy, rather than being loud and short-tempered. It was refreshing!

Where constructive criticism is concerned, the only thing I really picked up on was speech - whilst the dialogue was lovely, a lot of the time after they spoke you'd do something like this: "...presence in here." Ending with a full stop, I mean. I find writing always flows easier if you put a comma, and I think some grammar-watsit rules... but I dunno. XD

All in all though, a fantastic read, thank you for sharing and letting us read it!

9/10
--Nick xx

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I like it! Sufficiently fluffy, and a good representation of Jamesie! I feel like you probably could have done a little more variation on the text between the dialogue that was the same...but that's up to you. All in all, bravo! :^D

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i really like it please continue

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oh right.tnx.

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to potter_cris:
potter was not yet headboy because he wasn't seventh year yet...so amos diggory was the headboy in this story..got it?
sorry got carried away..i love this story.

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i thought potter was headboy?? well other than that your story was great .nice..keep it up...( now, i'm being creepy..-crap-)

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So sweet. I love how you portray both Lily and James. They're perfectly shy and innocent. Great job. : )
10/10

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Wonderful! It was brilliant and sweet. I really liked it.
10/10

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awwwwww it was just getting good too!! Please write more!!!

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keep writing!!

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NOOO! YOU KILLED IT! Why did you stop writing!?!? You do know it's been like 2 years for you to come up with an idea?!?! ME NEED UPDATES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! If you ever become interesed to see if you have reviews and you see my one here <-- then please pitty me and update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PWEESE?!?!?!?

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HELLO! pls tell me u r goin 2 contin, if not i might b forced to, wait 4 it, 2.. read sumthin else, that wuld b a terrible shame. bye Raphiel

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i feel the same as hotPotfan! plz update soon.

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everytime i see this at the top of the list i hope for it to be updated. WHY ISN'T IT?!?!?!?!? great story! :)

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I love the story it's soooooo cute. it would be great if u wrote more but i like it like this i think it would be better

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I really like your story you have to keep writeing

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Interesting, to say the least. It was good. Please continue.

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I love it! Keep writing

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Very interesting, writing from both perspectives. I hope you continue.

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I really liked this! Post more soon!

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Hey I luv lily and James fics! They\'re my favorite! I loved how you made it 2 points of views! If you have a chance would you read my story \"Unexpected Darkness?\" Thanks! Loved it! ~Jen

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Oh pleaaaaaaaaaasssssssssssssse keep writing! Don\'t stop writing cause i luv it!

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if u don\'t post the next chap. soon, i\'ll kill myself, and in my will, i\'ll note that u are responsible for it! This is the best chap. i\'ve heard yet! post post post posst post post post post post post post post post post post post!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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ARE YOU EVER GOING TO POST ANOTHER CHAPTER?!?!?! COME ON! PLEASE!!! UR KILLING ME HERE!

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