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Review #1, by The Misfit Near and Far

20th March 2013:
I'm so sorry that this review has taken so long; this is actually my second time typing it - I was typing too fast on the first one and managed to delete the whole review. Whoops. However, I will attempt to duplicate everything I said in my last review - and I apologize in advance for the fangirling. :3

SARAH, THIS STORY IS BEYOND FABULOUS. ♥ I'm still catching up on Sneth, but I couldn't resist reading this and ohmygod. It's perfect. It's so so so canon, fitting in beautifully in both JKR-verse and Rachel-verse. Your description of eleven-year-old Beth was so perfect, and the way you picked up on the tiny things that Rachel wrote and expanded them here just made it even better than perfection. The way you wrote about her hugging her book and dreaming of Severus, and being utterly convinced that in just five or six years he would be her boyfriend - you made me simulataneously want to be eleven again so that I'd have a good excuse to fangirl right there with her about Severus' dreaminess (which I may or may not have done in the process of reading that first section :P) and to jump into your story and hug her because she's just so small and so innocent and so sweet and ahhh. And the way she pays attention to what Severus does and how his behaviour changes and the reasons why - it just gives me a major case of Sneth feels. ♥

I loved the second-year memory! You characterized them all beautifully - Sirius being like a dog with a bone when it comes to Severus; Severus' inability to not retort; Remus' hesistance to not get involved; Peter's ability to come up with subject-changing one-liners - they're all done beautifully and I'm seeing echoes from In The Black here because reading this, you can really believe that they are younger versions of Rachel's Marauders and that just screams how talented you are. ♥

The third-year memory was amazing; you managed to make even the smallest detail important - James and Peter's interaction was just two or three sentences, but it spoke volumes with regard to Peter's betrayal years later. I did notice a small typo though; “Get a room, why don’t you,” Lily could resist saying. - this should be "Lily couldn't resist saying" (although I might be wrong). Also, a sentence later, you say James pushed Sirius off of him, but it was James who leant over to speak to Sirius. :3 OH OH OH OH AND YOU INCLUDED MUFFLIATO. SARAH YOU ARE PERFECT. ♥

“No.” Her voice was cutting. “You do worse than that with words.” - I really loved this line - for me, it was just so poignant and it really explains Lily's severe dislike of the Marauders so well; in fact, this memory could actually fit into Severus' memories in OotP when Harry looks into the Pensieve and slide in between the home flashback and the fifth year flashback seamlessly. ♥

I love love love Severus' POV in fourth year! You did an absolutely wonderful job of showing the cracks that started to develop in his and Lily's relationship, as well as planting Sneth seeds here - I love how you included the falcon! And I was squealing throughout fifth year! I love how Beth surprised Severus with her nice-ness and how he actually smiled when she told him to fetch the bat spleens himself. I was literally on the edge of my seat reading this, hating that I knew nothing major would happen because this is before ITB and yet all those tiny details were brilliant. ♥

HAAA BETH STALKS SEVERUS. I like this - we've all followed our crush once in a while out of curiosity, right? (I hope so, anyway.) And I love, again, how you make her pick up on so many details and included Bethchel's fixation with Severus' hands. :P The pictures were a fantastic detail to include, again creating a premonition of the future. Oh, how things would've been different if James, Beth and Sirius had hung around Peter more in school... Your description of the boys' dormitory was also excellent - you really brought a lot of details to life there. ♥ AND EEEP EEEP EEEP THE END OF SIXTH YEAR. Severus' reaction is so incredibly believable, and I love what Beth made the first-year tell him! Even though there's no direct Sneth interaction here, it's still an incredibly sweet memory. :3

AND THE ENDING. YOU KILLED ME WITH THAT ENDING. It's just a beautiful ending, and a spark of hope amongst the sadder aspects of this story - but it's also heartbreaking, because Sneth is doomed and my feels are all over the place right now.

This is truly one of the best one-shots I've ever read; you're a fantastic author, Sarah. Everything here is absolutely sheer perfection. ♥ ♥ ♥

-Katie

Author's Response: I am not sure how I let this slide by for so long without responding.

When I fangirl something, I can't do it halfway. I rarely read sequels of anything on HPFF and in this case I'm reading a /trilogy/, and I truly invest in all the characters Rachel writes. It's exciting to guess what will happen with them. Naturally I've started to imagine what Beth might have been like back in the day when she was a young, wibbly first year with a crush on Snape and hadn't met the marauders yet. Her crush on Severus actually predates her friendships with James, Sirius, Remus, and Peter, and is so strong a fancy that it withstood their near-constant bad-mouthing of him. It followed her throughout all her years at Hogwarts. It was insanely fun to kind of chronicle those missing moments because there are TONS of moments we haven't seen. I hope Rachel returns to her Sneth-universe someday after Breaking Even is completed and indulges us with a few of these.

Thank you so much for reading and for this awesome review, Katie! ♥ It means the world to me that you found it engaging and believable since it can be dangerous territory to dip into another writer's realm and try to see the characters the way they do. I really loved doing it, though.

- Sarah


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Review #2, by tragicYETmagic Near and Far

3rd March 2013:
This was wonderful.
I really enjoyed it, particularly the last memory.
"She sees me, too" is by the far the most perfect thing I ever read. I had to stop myself from squealing in happiness.

Well done,
Magic.

Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you so much for reading. :)

Eee, Beth certainly does see him! It took Severus /sooo/ long to see her, and by the time he opens his eyes to his perfect half hiding in plain sight, she of course knows just about everything about him. Perks of staring from afar for many many moons. They just belong together. ^ ^


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Review #3, by ValWitch21 Near and Far

18th February 2013:
You and Rachel are mean, mean people, and yes I'm aware that I sound like a five-year old but it's relevant to how I feel right now.

YOU'RE HORRIBLE. WHY DO YOU BOTH TORTURE ME WITH SNETH FEELS? WHY?!

This made me want to cry. Even if you made the ending sweet, even though I loved every bit of this, YOU ARE NOT ALLOWED. I mean, come on, I only just got over yesterday's chapter of Breaking Even, and now you plonk this in my face as if I was capable of surviving it. (Of course, the fact that I read this of my free will is completely irrelevant to the discussion).

Ugh. You and your writing, I swear. &hearts

Author's Response: Rachel's the evil one, honestly. Here I was trying to write some fluffy Sneth and all I could think about was "his memories are gone, agghhh, their future is doomed!" So it's all her fault. But the feels are so good even when they're so bad, amirite? In short, she is a genius. And she writes angsty romance like nobody's business.

Heehee, I tried to end this on a happier note (EVEN THOUGH IT'S DOOMED. DOOMED, I TELL YOU.) because all the other sections were so depressing. It was the most intimidating thing I've ever written. I put it off for /months/ and didn't start until her actual birthday. I ship her characters so hard that I always seize upon the opportunity to write them for myself and force them to have lurve moments, but even then I feel like I've got her sitting behind my shoulder with her Sneth-canon goggles on, so I have to try to behave (meaning no Beth and Severus snogging with reckless abandon in the dungeons).

Thank you for reading and reviewing this! Sneth is so underrated. I love talking about it with other people who also follow Beth's story.



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Review #4, by TenthWeasley Near and Far

18th February 2013:
-I am currently running pell-mell straight in your direction down a very large hill, and then I am tackling you with all the love and affection paltry words can express- ♥ ♥ ♥ YOU WROTE ME SNETH FOR MY BIRTHDAY. SUCH BRILLIANT SNETH. THERE ARE TEARS IN MY EYES AND THEY ARE GOING TO SPILL OVER SOON.

Everybody was so perfectly, perfectly, perfectly written. ♥ I have said this time and time again, but you understand Beth like none of my other readers understand her, and I daresay sometimes even better than I understand her. The fact that you've taken a character who I created out of nothing and have given her such life and accuracy in this story, and knowing so much about her and STILL thinking this -- you have to know how incredible that is. I cannot even think right now, my brain is just one jumbled mess. You got her tone right, her voice, her characteristics. I am beyond thrilled. There aren't even words for this! You wrote BETH, not your impression of Beth, and that is talent at a whole new level.

And Severus! Your Severus is so masterful, and it always is. ♥ He is so stupidly in canon here I can't even begin to tell you, and you've made his relationship with Lily so believable, even while balancing it with his relationship with Beth. I adore how he sees her, how he associates her with the Marauders. And I LOVE how she sees him, too -- this is canon. It is officially what happened. I could never, in a million years, come up with such perfect explanations as this. STILL CANNOT BELIEVE YOU DID THIS FOR ME, OH MY GOODNESS.

All the boys were fantastic. Exactly hands-down as I see them when I write them! I love the moments when they're teasing Severus, especially the one in second year, because even though it's infuriating, they were nasty to him. And he was nasty right back, and it's just so canon, and my heart is actually beating more quickly than normal because of how excited and pleased and honored I am by this story.

Peter. ♥ How sad that his wall of pictures is mostly him and Remus, and yet THAT IS STILL HOW I SEE IT IN MY MIND. And it'll become even more apparent than it already is in ITB and ITR, but you got the divisions exactly right: Beth is closer to James and Sirius than she is to Remus and Peter, and by necessity they stick together. Oh, painful foreshadowing. If they'd hung around him a bit more in school...

Lulz so much at Beth stalking Sev. SHE WOULD, THOUGH. I AM PRETTY SURE THAT IS WHAT HAPPENED IN THE UNWRITTEN PAST. ♥ And then we get a complete turnaround in part seven, because he's the one stalking her!

SHE SEES HIM WHEN HE'S NOT THERE. HE'S WATCHING HER WHEN SHE'S NOT LOOKING. I DON'T THINK IT'S LEGAL TO SHIP YOUR OWN PAIRING THIS MUCH, BUT IF THAT'S TRUE YOU'RE JUST GOING TO HAVE TO LOCK ME UP. This makes me want to sit down and write Sneth and not look up until BE is finished. No -- it makes me never want to finish. Because I know now like I didn't really know before that I don't want to stop writing them, and I don't know what I'm going to do when the time comes to stop. Your reviews and now this brilliant, brilliant piece of writing have kept me going and kept me writing that story and made me love it with a sort of intensity that I don't think I would have otherwise.

I cannot tell you how much this means to me. This story, of course, which is probably my new favorite one-shot of yours, but also for your Cedchel one-shot, and the Romione you wrote me, and for your reviews and your support and for word racing with me and asking for snippets and giving snippets in return and being the best, best writing friend I could ever have asked for. ♥ ♥ ♥ I am an overload of feels and I think I am short-circuiting, but this was absolutely, positively, incredibly perfect, Sarah. I could not have written it better if I'd tried. And I MEAN that.

Thank you so, so, so, so, so much for writing this for me!!!



Author's Response: ♥ ♥ ♥

I could write Sneth forever. When I'm reading fan fiction, I treat the characters like real people. That's how I think of them. And it's so, so easy to do that when I'm reading Sneth. On top of this, I get easily attached to my favorite characters. So imagine how much this attachment has been growing now that we're on the third Sneth book and I've been watching the evolution of Beth and Severus for so long. I love imagining all of the behind-the-scenes moments that could have happened, stuff so minor that it didn't make it to the forefront. That's how I regard my favorite stories and characters - they're still playing themselves out even while we're not watching. So it was exciting to be able to imagine what sort of moments might be lurking in their past.

I tried really hard to stay true to their characters, which I will have you know is difficult in the earlier days before In The Black - especially when Beth is super young and hasn't met the marauders yet. I was rereading In The Black for research reasons and when I read that she hadn't befriended them until her second year I was like OMG SHE WAS ALL ALONE AS A WEE FIRST YEAR. And that made me sad. So that got me thinking that in the absence of friends, her crush on Severus developed in an accelerated way so as to occupy her thoughts and make her perhaps feel a little less lonely. She had someone to think about, as it were, even if she was still mostly alone. But of course I could be totally wrong about that and maybe she had tons of other friends in her first year. YOU HOLD ALL THE ANSWERS. ~

I'm so happy that this wasn't a total fail and you liked it. I love, love, love dipping into your universes - I'm sure this won't be the last time I get my hands on your characters - and you are so nice for indulging me and letting me do that. It feels like going wild in someone else's playground. XD

FEELS FEELS FEELS. ♥ You are the best. Thank you for sharing Severus and Beth with the world, and happy birthday once again!


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