JennyJennyJenny. Why Jenny must you write such captivation stories that hook readers? Now, why not write something less absolutely amazing, huh? That would be nice, really, it would. No. I lie. But, point is, I loved reading this. I really did. From the very first line to the last. Honestly, I specifically loved the first and last line. The first was such a good opening. It's nice to think that after the War everything would be just like how the Wizarding street ought to be. With it's ice cream shops and it's robes shops and it's hotels. I never really thought about it, but I suppose that, yes, Wizarding Worlds must have hotels. And one up to this standard managed by the lovely Mrs. Malfoy - well, I expect nothing but drama.
The summary really got me. I really can't wait to see our main character, Jo, in this hotel for the rich with the Potters reserving an entire floor, her ex-boyfriend back, and hopefully a good bit of drama. I love drama, I really do. In stories, at least. I loved Jo. She was so nice, friendly, and she just seemed altogether good. Helping out her co-worker and being a pretty decent worker herself, she was realistic. Literally, I wouldn't be shocked if she just walked out of the chapter. No, actually, I would - but hopefully you see what I'm struggling and failing to say. Your characterization is amazing. There.
The management was hilarious. I love how real each fo your characters are. Mrs. Malfoy expecting nothing but the best. Even the slight dialogue with David and Toby had be grinning as widely as a cat. Pretty please update :3 Report Review
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Okay I really loved this. Its a great start with loads of characters that you have obviously developed so awesome job!
Jo seems so genuinely sweet and Louis cheated?? I could see that with his Veelaness and all of that :p
ahahah!! when she goes to look for his name! that was really good LOL.
I would love to see a bit more on Louis though and just explain a little more about their relationship but I bet you have that planned for later chps so its all good.
All in all I really liked this start and I hope you continue soon!
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"Pull another stunt like that, and you'll be sacked."
Ahahahaha, that last line cracked me up.
Erm yeah, so.. Jo seems like a genuinely nice character, not too snarky or too quiet, just nice. And I quite like Michael and the rest of the 'management'.
You've built up quite a steady set of characters and it's only the first chapter so points to you for a well written chapter.
Also, bonus points for not having to add an authors note. I think everything was quite self explanatory.
10/10 :D Report Review
Ooh! Louis! I was intrigued about this, it sounds really different and interesting and something I've never reed before. But now I see Louis? I love it so much already... You can probably tell. :P
Cheating? Oh no... He's still one of my favorite characters ever. Is that bad? :D
Great start, Jenny. I hope Michael is able to get past feeling inferior. I already think he's awesome. As is Jo, I can't wait to read more of her. :D
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