It's not really in Liv's place to pretend to be all honest and mighty. She hasn't been honest with Victoire and it would be unfair of her to spread the news. But I'm pretty sure she's going to see it that way too :).

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Well, it was disappointing to find out Rose was cheating on Scorpius. But I don't really think that Liv has the right to be all holier than thou to Rose. If she was a good, honest person, then she would demand that Teddy tell Victoire the truth about their history and not let him continue to string Victoire along as he obviously doesn't really care enough about her that he should be marrying her if he has been willing to lie to her about his past with Liv and keeps seeking Liv out. She's selfish and annoying and I don't feel bad for her or Teddy. They created this situation and are being so cruel to Victoire. I can't believe that he is having her be a bridesmaid. Imagine how devastated and stupid Victorie would feel when/if she finds out the truth, and she has done absolutely nothing wrong. I really hope she does find out everything and Teddy and Liv have to face the consequences of their selfish actions; they deserve to end up together and make each other miserable and for Victoire to find someone and friends who actually care enough about her to be honest and have her best interest at heart.

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Another great chapter!!! I can't help but be anti-Teddy though, what a dog act staying engaged to someone when his heart doesn't seem to be in it...so I'm shipping Liv and James haha! But the fact that I'm quite emotionally involved is credit to your writing so keep it up and I look forward to the next update :)

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I just found this story and I'm really enjoying it so far :) I love the characters and the plotlines, they have me hooked. The only criticism I would say is that sometimes your dialogue is a bit unclear, as in I can't tell who said it. You type something in speech marks eg. "Okay I'll give her time if that's what it takes"I nodded - now when I read that it seemed like Liv said it as she was nodding, but I read it again and I know it's Scorpius. Maybe it's just me, but a few well placed hits of the enter key wouldn't go astray :) But overall, fantastic work, and I look forward to the next update :D

Author's Response: I'm glad you're liking it! Aww thank you, that's made me smile. It's always nice to hear. Ah, i had noticed that just before you pointed it out so i've been going through and editing it all so hopefully that should be sorted in the next day or two. But thank you so much, the next chapter should be up within the day, i hope you continue to keep on reading!

Vicki :)

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You have me addicted, congrats. Although now I'm struggling, because I can't decide if I like Liv with Teddy or with James... Oh well, I'll guess I'll just have to wait and see! Great job with this chapter!

Author's Response: I apologise profusely! (Although that's a lie because it means you like the story which makes me a very happy girl indeed!)
Ah, me too! Originally it was all about Teddy but then James Potter II came along and has ruined it! I have the dilemma of choosing between them now.
Thank you for reading and reviewing, it means so much, next chapter should be up very soon.

Vicki :)

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ITS REALLY GOOD! PLEASE WRITE MORE, I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS , LIKE WUT, IS TEDDY AND LIV GETTING BACK TOGETHER AND THE WEDDING SCENE OMFG pls write. pls

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I sense that if the truth should come out, there is going to be trouble...

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I feel bad for Victoire. No matter how whiny she is, she doesn't deserve to have her fiance be in love with someone else. Teddy is stupid and selfish. If he really doesn't want to marry her then he should break up with her and fight for Liv. And Liv's reasons for breaking up with him so he could be with Victorie make no sense. So basically Liv and Teddy both seem to make stupid and selfish decisions and I guess they deserve each other. I really hope they don't do anything where Teddy cheats on Victoire and just breaks things off if he is that unhappy.

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Heya, I'm Char. So your story caught my eye and looked amazing, which the first chapter was. You write beautifully, and I'm not exaggerating, it all flowed so well, I think thats really important in a story, there was nothing disjointed about this, it was great.
Just a tip would be, be careful of clumsy typos like forgetting words or writing words twice (you wrote a part "knocking on the door on the door" just be careful of things like that.
Otherwise well done, your characters are already developing brilliantly and its really well written.
Well done and Happy Writing.
~Char

Author's Response: Hi Char,

Thank you, that really means a lot. I get worried that i write like i think in my head, which is completely disjointed but i'm glad it's not coming across like that!

Ah, i'm awful when it comes to spotting typos, i read over it so much that i just tend to scan over it in the end and miss them all but i will definitely try and catch them all before i publish!

Again, thank you so much. I really appreciate the review and the tips. I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far.

-Vicki.

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This is a brilliant start. You did a great job with introducing your characters and I especially love the way Liv thinks - it should be interesting to have the conflict of wanting to do what is right for herself and what is right for the people she loves in the story.

One bit of criticism I have is that sometimes your characters are very up front a concise about what they are thinking. For example, Teddy's line here - “I love it when you get so passionate about your books and such, it makes you look like a young child again at Christmas time.” - it makes him seem monotone and emotionless, mostly because of that metaphor. I mean, it's great to use metaphors but this one makes him flat in my opinion. Also, the line here - "I have never seen you in that state before, you scared me." - gives the same effect to Rose.

But great start. I'll be looking out for more chapters :)

~Liz

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad you like Liv and the way she thinks, i wanted her to seem normal compared to those she hangs around with (the next gen) and i figured that by having the kind of thoughts and dilemma's she does have and has to think about often, it sets her apart from the others and shows the difference between herself and the Next Gens, even though she has grown up as a part of them.

I actually hadn't noticed that but now you've pointed it out, i can see what you mean so thank you. I think as i've read it in my head, it has sounded better because you can imagine the emotion and tone used but written down doesn't portray that, so i will definitely change that and keep an eye out for it in future chapters.

Thank you again, i really appreciate the fact that you've taken the time out to review this story.

-Vicki

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