Okay, first of all, I love this story and I think I'm obsessed, however (I'm sorry to say this) you're spelling is REALLY bad, have you considered getting a beta to edit your spelling, etc
Sorry for the nastiness,
RavenClawGirl11

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I know I suck at spelling. I got a spell checker so hopefully the next chapters are spelled better.

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I liked this chapter quite a bit too, but I think that its lacking some detail towards the end.

Where Albus talks about his family is great, fantastic even, but the whole kissing part seemed a bit rushed if you know what I mean. Take your time and adds tons of detail to important scenes like this. That's the best way to write a great story :)

Off to read the next,

~Lily

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. I agree, I should have slowed things down a bit. I will keep this in mind when I write the upcoming chapters. Thanks again!

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Oooo. I like this story. It's seems fresh and funny.

I really like the way the next gen characters are portrayed in this, like Dom for example. A bit rude at first, but very easy to get along with in the end.I also love Scorp, Rose and Maddie. Also Al but i don't know too much about how he is in your story. I'm just a bit biased since he's my favourite next gen character :P

Also, I loved the ending. "Yeah, if you asked me then, no. No, I didn't have any idea that Albus Potter would change my life."

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked the characters so far. I guess I trying to make Al seem a little mysterious in this chapter. Thanks again :)

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