She isn't sick because of morning sickness its because she's mixed all them foods together- I think

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Hi there, other then spelling I think you have a nice story here. You might want to read up on pregnancy, I mean you just had her sleep with him, most morning sickness is four weeks (One month) after the deed is done. Read the wiki page it was very helpful for me. The other thing is her baby isn't even a fetus yet, I don't think she'd have sudden food cravings, I did like that part though, looks like she got her eating habits from her father.

Over all a good story, just needs some embellishing. (Meat on the bones) I'll keep reading, rate again later.

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I don't know why Scorpius looks confused? I would think it would be Dom that would be confused. Didn't she give Rose the hang-over remedy? lol
Poor Rose

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Aside from the mis-meaning-spelling of some words, which for me is no big dealio, (only bringing it up if you wanted your chapter to be perfect) I loved the chapter. I could see them waking, horrified over their situation. How will they face each other through the day, knowing that when the beer goggles are on, they actually like each other enough to find themselves waking in each others arms. So sweet :)

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Great story I love it. Keep writing

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Pretty good writing, and the way you wove the things together was good, but you had terrible spelling. It had absolutely nothing to do with hp except for the dorm and some names. Overall I give it a 3/10

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The story is nice from what i read but you may want to update it with looking over it. There were alot of typos and it made it hard for me to understand.

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