I like what you've written so far! I want to know who Rosalie sent her patronus to and what happens to Nicola. I'm assuming she'll be okay and the main character of the story? Hopefully? I don't want the little girl to die! Also where do the marauders come in? I have so many questions! Please update this story soon, I really love the beginning! The only critique I have is a little thing, the verb tense changes from past to present a bit. Just something you might want to look at, nothing too major. I only noticed it because I was looking for something helpful to say. ;) I just had a scary thought that the wolf might be Remus... I really hope not. It's just so hard to know anything because the ending is kind of open ended and a cliffhanger. So I'll just have to try to be patient and wait for more. Great story! I love it so far! :) Report Review
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