I liked this chapter better than the re-write because it had more detail, please continue this one!Author's Response: Okay, but you do know that chapter is in the rewrite. Thanks though, and I will be continuing it :D Report Review
Please don't abandon the story! I love it and want to read more..Author's Response: I don't think i will, thankyou for the review and I'm glad you like it :D
I'm pretty sure that Lily would've figured out that Remus was a werewolf by now. After all, she was one of the smartest people in the year.
Anyway, I really enjoyed this and I just want to point out that you've got some grammar errors that you might want to fix and you spelled Ciao wrong. It's now "chow" it is "ciao."
Anyway, this was still awesome and I still love it and I'm excited for the next chapter!Author's Response: Oh My god, I'm such a blunder head. Obviously it isn't chow haha. Need to change that. Thank you for the awesome review though :D and for the Lily tip. Report Review
You've got some punctuational and grammatical errors here and there throughout the story but overall I really liked this. I'm actually excited to see where this story goes and how Lily and James get together if you decide to keep writing it (which I hope you do). I just love James and Lily stories.
Anyway, I'd say it was a fairly interesting chapter (and there was something else I was going to say but I forget for now)Author's Response: Haha thankyou. I'll make sure I check thoroughly next time. I'm British and my word is American, so sometimes things might go wrong when I am trying to avoid American spellings so sorry bout that. But thank you for the review.:D Report Review
As of now, I really love this story. It has made me laugh several times and I like that you don't rush into it. I hope you keep writing it! =]Author's Response: aw thankyou, I will keep writing but it might be a little while before I next update :D Report Review
That was a cute story. There was a touch of
humor and teenage girl attitude that I loved. It
was nice to hear things from Lilly's
perspective. My only complaints are the minor
grammatical errors. People will view your
stories more seriously than they would now.Author's Response: thanks. It isn't finished and there will be more chapters and I will try and fix and errors :) Report Review
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