I'm with Harry! He doesn't deserve to be question, especially by the woman he loves. I do hope Ginny comes around to see the truth before it's too late. And another thing: stupid Ron. I think that about sums it up haha Update soon! :)Author's Response: Thank you for another great review! I appreciate the fact that you always take the time to leave one so much!! :) I'm with Harry too! And yeah, Ron doesn't really see clearly when it comes to Ginny. I won't reveal anything about what happens next but I'll try to update very soon! :) Report Review
Wow love the story line!! i just started reading it today and i couldn't do anything until i was done with it!(even though i wanted to write a review after each chapter) now i am left craving for more! how can they not trust Harry when he almost died for them..hmmph! What a cliffhanger though..looking forward to what happens next!love it!!Author's Response: You read the whole thing today? Wow, that is amazing! I'm so flattered!! It makes me so happy to hear that you like it, and don't worry, I'll try to update as soon as possible! :) I agree with you, they are being way too tough on Harry right now... Report Review
I loved it! You said English wasnt your first language? Wow.. you have a gift to write this much!!! Thanks, Im really enjoying this!Author's Response: That makes me so happy! Nope, it's not! I'm very flattered by your kind comments, thank you so much for reading and reviewing my story! :) Report Review
Suspenseful ending. I'll be waiting to see how this problem is resolved. This is a really good chapter. This is one of the first times I have seen the couple arguing in a fanfiction. Most fanfics show them as a perfect couple who never argue, but that is unrealistic.Author's Response: First of all, thank you for another wonderful review! It makes me so happy that you liked this! And yes, I figured that since I'm writing about 19 years in their lives, it would be quite unrealistic if they never had problems.. I'm glad you agree! Report Review
I like this one and I do not think that it is fluff. It gives a good insider look in the human emotions of the magical beings.Author's Response: It makes me so happy to hear that you liked it! Thank you for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Happy Ron and Hermione are moving in together! And Ginny may have overreacted a bit but it's normal for her to be jealous and worried. It's good that Harry knows who he wants and is able to console her. I wonder who this Ruby person thinks she is!Author's Response: So am I! ;) Yes, things were getting quite intense their for a while. Thank you for your review, I really appreciate it! :) Report Review
Great chapter as always. I can't wait to see what's next.Author's Response: That makes me so happy to hear! Thank you so much!! :) Report Review
I really enjoyed it. And especially Harry,you really portrayed him and his personality brilliantly. I really liked the bit with dennis creevey too! only one little thing I think is that the bit after the war where harry and professor McGonagall do their speeches should have been more about the deaths of allies than re-building Hogwarts because it's a little insensitive. other than that I loved it! going to read the next chapter right now!Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! It makes me so happy to hear that you like this. If I decide to go back and edit their speeches, I'll definitely keep what you said in mind and try to make it focus more on those who died. Thanks for the advice!! I hope you'll continue to enjoy the story :) Report Review
Love reading this!!! Can't wait for the next chapters to this story..Author's Response: That makes me so happy to hear! The next chapter is in the queue, so it should be up soon :) Report Review
You're a really good writer! It takes a lot of dedication to keep writing keeping such an excellent plot! I'm pretty sure I couldn't do it!Author's Response: It makes me so happy to hear that you like this! I'm very flattered :) Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, and I hope you'll stick with the story! Report Review
I really liked the chapter!Author's Response: That makes me happy to hear! Thanks for telling me! :) Report Review
What do you mean you think Ginny overreacted? You wrote it! You are correct in both statements. When you are as tired as Ginny was, it wouldn't take much to bring the tears. You might think she overreacted, but she is aware that just about every single young lady between the ages of 15 and 25, would love to be with Harry. She needs to realize that they don't know him, so they really don't want him for himself. Also Ginny, being the youngest, and always being poor, feels a bit insecure. She also doesn't see that she too is a very beautiful young woman. Soon Harry will convince her that she has his heart. Now for the unspoken question. Who at the Prophet manufactured this? And just who is this Ruby Percell? Why is she lying? Please post soon!
FoMAuthor's Response: Haha, yes, I did write it, but what I meant was that I don't think that's how she would normally react: it was just intensified by her fatigue. And you're right, it's no easy situation, with every young woman wanting to take her place AND she's a bit insecure. That combination is not very good.
Ruby Percell will make an appearance in the next chapter, which will be up very soon! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
OMG amazing, olease tell me your continuing it, it sound so real..Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so happy that you like it! I am definitely continuing - the next chapter will be up soon! :) Report Review
Of course Harry wouldn't do that!!! I really dislike the Daily Prophet! They twist everything and make up stuff. Update soon! :)Author's Response: I know! The Daily Prophet is one think that didn't get better after the war ended.. I'll update really soon, I'm almost finished with the next chapter! :) Report Review
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Ah, a story set in my absolute favorite era to read! Stories that start right after the Battle of Hogwarts are what got me into reading HPFF in the first place, and I always love reading authors' impressions of what happened in those first days after Tom Riddle died.
I love the solemn start that you got off to. The scene at Hogwarts Castle and all of the characters seemed appropriately subdued and sad for events set so soon after so many good people lost their lives. Some of the characters that you inserted and their behavior really helped to round out the scene. Every story set in this moment has Molly Weasley weeping over Fred, but this is the first time I've seen Xeno Lovegood running through the castle in search of Luna and I thought it was a nice touch. The mention of the poor girl whose face had been cursed off brought real gravity to your descriptions of the human cost of the battle. Andromeda showing up with little Teddy to learn the awful truth about Remus and Tonks was heart-breaking.
I'm not sure where you're heading with Harry in the long run, but there were things I liked and things I wasn't so wild about in this chapter. I really liked his inner thoughts: the guilt and sadness and the way that he kept second-guessing himself: "If only I'd been able to end this sooner..." That was Harry Potter to a T. I thought it a bit odd that Kingsley and McGonagall would have put him on the spot like that so soon after the end of the battle. The poor guy was totally wrecked at that point and I have a hard time imagining anyone asking him to give a speech. It isn't a huge thing, but it jumped out at me.
But then you brought Ginny and Harry together, and I was instantly filled with warm, fuzzy, happy feelings. Oh, how I love the two of them together. You cast aside the usual moment where she gets angry at him for leaving her behind when he ran off with Ron and Hermione to hunt horcruxes, but maybe you're just saving that for later.
Poor Hermione sort of got left on the outside looking in. It's kind of understandable, but I still felt badly for her. I hope Ron is able to come around and pick up the romance again soon. Neville's revelations about the way Augusta's attitude toward him changed was a nice touch. Poor guy went through a lot growing up. It's nice to see that she can appreciate him for it.
You're definitely bringing Percy into the fold at an early stage of the game, and I applaud you for that. All too often, Perce gets left out of these stories or glossed over at best. And the idea of Audrey fighting in the battle to the point where she's injured is a very different take on her character. I'm curious to see where you're taking her.
I loved the idea of Ginny being so close with the twins. It really gave George somebody to open up to, which doesn't always happen so early. She was very wise in her counsel to him.
I felt like your writing got off to a bit of a rough start and then you really hit your stride about a third of the way through the chapter. Sometimes it felt a little forced near the beginning, like you were trying to make things more metaphorical and flowery than you were really comfortable with. Then you relaxed and it all flowed a lot better for me. The only other thing I'd point out is that Hagrid's hut was destroyed during the battle, as far as I know.
You're off to a very interesting start here! Keep up the good work!Author's Response: Well, first off, thank you for taking the time to leave such a long and detailed review! I really appreciate it :)
It's nice to hear that you liked this, and that the mood was fitting. Well, I can't imagine Mrs Weasley having any other reaction, so I guess that's why it's in every story. I'm glad you liked the part about Luna's father - I think his love for his daughter was evident in the Deathly Hallows, and I just wanted to show a snippet of that.
Yes, I definitely think that Harry is the kind of person who, even after all he's done, would feel guilty about not having been able to do it better. In my mind, he actually wanted to say something to everyone in there, but I do understand your point!
Actually, I don't think Ginny would be mad at him. She knew that he had to do it and why he didn't take her with him. Sure, it must have been hard for her, but I think she understands it.
Yeah, I felt bad for Hermione when I wrote this! But Ron has other things than romance on his mind right now. I'm glad that you're happy for Neville! So am I!
Percy is such an important character to me! I'm so happy to hear that you liked that :) I think that Fred's death will have a huge impact on him, and that it, combined with Audrey (who's actually quite likable in my story), helps him change to the better.
I'll try to read through the chapter again and see if I can make any changes to make the first part better. I was trying to paint a picture of the first hours after the battle, but I'll definitely take what you said into account and try to improve it.
Thank you so much for this wonderful and helpful review! I can't even tell you how much I appreciate it!! You are just awesome! :) Report Review
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Aw this was such a sweet and touching chapter. I liked your perspective of what happened after the war, the way you slowly showed what Harry, Hermione, Ginny, Ron, Percy, George etc. are feeling. The part about Dennis was really sweet, and Harry's speech was good.
It was all very believably written and I really enjoyed reading this. I think it's a great start to your story and I hope to come back for the next chapter soon.
Great job! Keep writing!
(AditiDraco95)Author's Response: I'm really glad that you liked it, and that you found it believable! I wanted to expand the story by not just writing from Harry's point of view, and I'm glad that you think it worked. Thank you so much for this lovely view! I do hope that you will come back and read more, and that you'll continue to enjoy it :) This review made me very happy! :) Report Review
This is one of the best stories I have ever read on this site. This is so good that it actually seems like harry potter 8. I can't wait to see what happens next. Are you really going to do all 19 years?Author's Response: I don't even know how to respond to that! Thank you SO MUCH, I can't even tell you how flattered I am! Yes, I am planning on doing all 19 years. I have A LOT written already. I'm actually working on year 8 at the moment ;) Thank you so much for reading and for leaving such a lovely review! Report Review
This is one of the best stories I have ever read on this site. This is so good that it actually seems like harry potter 8. I can't wait to see what happens next. Are you really going to do all 19 years?Author's Response: I think you accidentally posted twice :) I responded to the other post! Report Review
Hi! So this is another great chapter. I love how it just hit Harry that Ginny would be going to school without him. I imagine it'd be hard for him, after going for so long without being together and now getting separated. At least, they're wizards with awesome and speedy means of transportation, which must make long distance a lot easier! :P
I love the little details you've put into this, like Ginny's excitement at being made captain. It seems like such a small thing after fighting this war, but it's the little joys that really help people heal and move on. I love Harry's sassiness when talking to McGonagall, like his little quip about visiting students at the end. It was just so in character for Harry, and exactly the type of comment he'd make!
I liked Ginny's line about the book for charming witches! That part was so funny in the HP books, and it fit really well with Ginny's character. She definitely isn't the sappy romantic type, which is what I think Harry loves about her, among other things. Ron's annoyance over Ginny is always hilarious as well! I don't know how you do it, you just know these characters inside and out and write them so well and in character. You also emulate the tone of the books just right, I think JKR would be proud. :)
The paragraph describing Platform 9 and 3/4 was just lovely! "The smell of magic..." It's just so perfect, and reminded me of how wonderful Hogwarts and the magical world still is, even after all the destruction caused by Voldy. The only thing I would change is the use of "you" to address the reader because I thought it disrupted the flow a bit, but that's up to you! :)
Overall, this was just such a wonderful, JKR-esque send-off to Hogwarts that was very well-written and engaging to read. I do have two little things to think about: one, I'm not sure if McGonagall or wizards in general would really think to say "dental clinic" so comfortably, I feel like they would say "those strange places Muggles go to keep their teeth clean" or something along those lines. Although it is McGonagall and she does know everything. :P (And where DO wizards get their teeth cleaned, anyway?! Maybe they have magical toothbrushes with extra cleaning and anti-cavity abilities).
The other thing was just Fleur's accent: it's totally up to you but I always enjoyed associating her with her particular voice in the HP books! :D She could say "Eet is a magnifique dinner, but..." Or what not, it's fun to play around with! :)
Anyway, lovely job with this chapter as usual, and again I'm looking forward to reading and reviewing more!!! :DAuthor's Response: Yay, another review from you! :D
Yes, I feel quite bad for Harry and Ginny for having to separate so soon, but you're right - long distance relationships for Muggles are a lot worse;)
It's so nice to hear that you appreciate those details! I figured, like McGonnagall, that Ginny would the perfect as captain ;) And yes, I love Harry's sarcastic side, and I'm so glad that you think it seemed like something he would say!
I remember laughing a lot when Ron gave that book to Harry, and his not-so-smooth way of using the advice on Hermione! So I thought I'd include it, and I agree that Ginny isn't sappy romantic. That's why I thought she should make a comment like that :) I should know the characters well given how many times I've read the books, but I can't tell you how happy that compliment has made me! JKR would be proud? Even though I'm not sure she would be, those comments made me SO happy! I feel quite silly right now, smiling to myself like an idiot ;) Thank you so, so much for saying something so nice!
That paragraph about 9 and 3/4 was basically and outlet for my love of this magical world, so I'm glad that you liked it! I re-read it and I definitely agree about that "you"-part, and I'll change it as soon as possible!
After your last review, I decided to change Fleur's speech everywhere in the story, so I've actually changed it in this one too, only it hasn't been validated yet. I agree that it adds to the story to write her speech the way JKR did. Thank you so much for pointing it out :)
As for the dental clinic thing, you might be right. But I figured (like you) that this IS McGonnagall, after all. And that they wrote about in the Prophet, and that they explained what a dental clinic it. Had it been Ron, he probably would have referred to it as a "strange place where they clean Muggles' teeth", but I think McGonnagall would know a bit more than him ;) Also, she was in love with a Muggle when she was younger, so she might have learned some things back then.
Thank you so much for this lovely review! Once again, you've been both very helpful and encouraging, and I'm still smiling because I'm so flattered and so happy for those compliments! You are just awesome! :D Report Review
when is there going to be more??!Author's Response: I'll try to get the next one around sometime next week! :) Report Review
harry should be very powerful now the horcrux has been killed so his potions should be better than Ron's and he should be doing none verbal spells without a wandAuthor's Response: Well, I don't think it was the horcrux that held him back in potion-making, I just think that he's not very good at it. He's a talented wizard, yes, but not perfect ;) Thank you for reading and reviewing! Report Review
WOOOWWW!!! Ok, first let me start off by saying that I'm not a HUGE fan of fan fiction because, personally, I think a lot of it sucks. I was jonesing for some (new) Harry Potter & decided to brave the fanfic. I scrolled through pages & pages before I came upon this one. I LOVE IT!!! First, it's original compared to others because most of the others are AU or post-Hogwarts. I read all 13 chapters today & I was completely sucked in. This is te first fanfic that I feel stays true to the tone of the HP books & is BELIEVEABLE!! I think the characters are kept true to their characters in the book. It's a true extension to the HP story & it's great. I just wish the rest of the story was posted because I want to finish it!! Truly amazing.
This is a review of the whole story. I didn't review after every individual chapter.Author's Response: Wow, I wish I could tell you happy this review has made me! It really means a lot to hear that you like this story so much, it's so encouraging and inspiring, and it has literally made my day! I really can't thank you enough :) It's so nice to hear that you think that it stays true to the books and the characters, because that's important to me! And that it's believable. Wow. I don't really know how to explain how happy you have made me, but I guess I'll just thank you again.
Also, I have A LOT written already, but it takes me a little while to translate to English (because I don't write in English to start with) and edit, so it takes a little while between updates, but I try to get it up as soon as possible (because I have so much more to share with you!) I do hope you'll continue to enjoy the story, and thank you again for this wonderful review! Report Review
This was a really intriguing beginnig. I liked how you shared not just Harry's perspective but other character's as well.Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad that you liked it! Report Review
Makes sense for Ginny to be a bit worried, but Harry loves her and she has nothing to worry about (hehe maybe). I love the two of them together. Cute having her sneak out to spend time with him. I liked Harry's reaction to her saying they have forever to spend their lives together. Really liked the chapter :)Author's Response: I think anyone would feel a bit insecure in that situation. I love them too; I think they're my favourite HP couple, and it makes me so happy to hear that you liked this. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I really appreciate it :) Report Review
It is very good! I like the little bit at the end with the team meeting Wood and questioning Ginny about Harry. I hope you continue on it. I also want to see Ron and Hermione so I can't wait for the next one.Author's Response: I'm so glad that you liked it! :) It will continue, and something quite big will happen for Ron and Hermione in the next chapter! I'll update soon :) Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Report Review
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