I like the progression of the story and found that the short segments patched together work really well together. The little nuggets of detail you gave in each little part of the piece leave us wondering what will happen next and the lack of detail works well.
The piece flows really well and I didn't think that it seemed staggered at all as each section led smoothly into the next.
Thanks for entering my challenge :D and sorry that I didn't review when I said I would
hpsauceAuthor's Response: Thank you! It's okay, I understand that you had a lot of other entries to review and/or real life can get in the way. :)
Thanks for the review, glad you liked the story! :) Report Review
*tackles in massive hug* OH MY GOODNESS this is amazing!! I just want to sit here squealing like an idiot, you are so freaking awesome Kayla! :P
I adored how Draco was written, it really lined up with how I imagine him to be after the war. You want to hate Draco and Astoria because what they're doing is so morally wrong, but at the same time it's not just a phsyical thing, they actually have feelings for each other. You've really written it in an amazing way! 10/10!
The little moments of their lives are brilliant! You really managed to put alot of impact into a short piece, and I think it all just flows wonderfully.
Definitely one of my favourite presents ever! Thanks so much, it's clear you put alot of effort into the story and I adore it! Thank you! Merry Christmas and Happy New Year!
- Faith Author's Response: Oh my gosh, I'm so glad you like it! I was SO worried! :D
hdfcbkjsdbvdkj THANK YOU! :D
I'm SO glad you like it! :D I tried making a forums set for you but failed miserably, so I decided to do this instead. :p
I hope your Christmas was great and happy new year to you too! :D Report Review
I loved this! It was very...what's the word? Err...seductive? Sexy? I have no clue, but I loved it anyway!
So the woman Draco married...Was that Daphne? Considering that Astoria was his secret all along? (Rhetorical question, don't answer that...it MUST'VE been Daphnes, unless Astoria has any other sisters...) *face palm*
I liked how you took tiny snippets throughout their relationship. It shows how dedicated they were towards one another, and justifies your last couple of lines:
"She's been the constant throughout his life, he knows that it was wrong but he didn't care.
After all this time, Astoria was still his dirty little secret."
I really liked this one-shot. It was beautiful. And Happy holidays to you too! I forgot to add this in my last review, but I can't believe you finished you fic with bullied Clara in it! But then again, I'm glad it ended the way it did. It couldn't have ended in a better note, it was perfect as it was. :)
Anyway, HAPPY HOLIDAYS TO YOU MY DEAREST FRIEND, AND HOPE YOU HAVE A MERRY NEW YEAR'S AS WELL! :DAuthor's Response: It was a real challenge for me to write, it was for a Secret Santa and one of their OTP's is Draco/Astoria, so I decided to give it a go. I'm glad you liked it though! :D
Yes, the woman he married was Daphne. :D
I'm really glad you liked it, it was actually really fun to write! :D
Thanks for the review! ♥
MERRY CHRISTMAS AND HAPPY NEW YEAR! :D Report Review
I really like this story! I like how it flashes through all the years, keeping their relationship as the constant throughout. Nicely written, apart from the one thing that you can't quite decide which tense you're in. I'd suggest making it all present tense - the parts with present tense fit a bit better with the story structure than the bits you wrote in the past tense.
Well done - a really good job!
-unknownhorcruxAuthor's Response: Aww thank you! :D
ohh, I must have kept changing, sorry about that! I rushed to get this out before the queue closure! I would edit it, but I can't currently. :/
I was aiming it to be in present tense, so I'm glad that you've said that. :)
Thanks for the review! :D Report Review
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