That cracks me up that Hermione gets her own house elf. The sorting hat song was very well done. Overall, I love the feel of the Hogwarts you are creating.Author's Response: I know, I think she's be cringing at the idea! Thank you so much for the lovely reviews, I do hope you enjoy the rest of the story x Report Review
That cracks me up that Hermione gets her own house elf. The sorting hat song was very well done. Overall, I love the feel of the Hogwarts you are creating. Report Review
Luna was wonderful. I think you captured her quirky voice well. The aura thing was perfect, as was Hermione's reaction to it. I again loved the ending of the chapter.Author's Response: Thank you :) characterisation is something I try very hard to write well so it's lovely to hear you thought that about Luna Report Review
Great dramatic ending to the chapter. I like how carefully you've dealt with Harry and Ron. The scene with Mrs. Weasley really touched me too.Author's Response: Thank you very much, I'm really glad you liked the first chapter :) Report Review
I thought this was a great story. I was a little sad when I saw I was at the last chapter, but you pulled it together nicely!Author's Response: Awh, thank you very much :) I'm really glad you liked the story x Report Review
This was by far my favourite chapter! Oh Harry and Ron Author's Response: Haha thank you, it was one of my favourite to write :) Report Review
I have really enjoyed your story so far! It's very... realistic, and I like that! I've been looking for an author like you for the past couple of weeks but had been fruitless until now. Thank you for writing! I can't wait to read on!Author's Response: Thank you so much, that's such a lovely thing to say! I hope you enjoy the rest of the story, please let me know what you think xx Report Review
Well, you know how i feel about this story, as i've told you personally, BUT, this is one amazing story, and like i've told you, you should write more Dramione fanfics, 'cause you're an extremely talented writer, you should defiantly sell it on Amazon! xAuthor's Response: I absolutely intend to write more dramiones, as you know ;) I'll sell mine if you sell yours! x Report Review
This story was amazing! thank you so much for writing it and also making an epilogue!Author's Response: You're very welcome! I'm glad you enjoyed it :) thanks for the lovely reviews! Report Review
It seems very un-Hermione to faint at Draco's betrayal. I mean, she's is a strong, powerful woman who continued fighting even after being cruciated for long periods of time - I doubt some betrayal from a guy would make her faint? Report Review
I love it! I haven't had a chance to read fanfiction in quite awhile, but I stumbled on this one, and I'm going to make my way through it. Great job!Author's Response: Thank you very much :) I hope it doesn't disappoint! Report Review
You wrote a really good story! I really enjoy reading this! Keep up the good work! :)Author's Response: Thank you very much :) I'm glad you enjoyed the story! Report Review
This was one of my favorite chapters. It's so easy for sex scenes to come across cheesy or vulgar. The whole topic was dealt with in a very classy way and in my opinion describes the first experience pretty much every woman wishes she would have had. Thank you for creating such a beautiful fantasy.Author's Response: Thank you :) this chapter was a particularly difficult one for me to write. I wanted it to be realistic but still romantic so I'm glad you liked it :) Report Review
This was one of the most well thought out and written stories I have read on this site thus far. Thank you for sharing this enjoyable story. I am a hopeless romantic, so this was right up my alley. I hope you continue to write more stories because you clearly have talent.Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much, that's a huge compliment :) I'm so glad you enjoyed the story :) Report Review
Aw This is so cute, I didn't stop smiling while reading this. Great story (I feel like I never mentioned this)Author's Response: Thank you :D Report Review
Aw. This is so cute, I didn't stop smiling while reading this. Great story Report Review
OMG!! It's done! :'( It was fun at the same time annoying reading your story (with the whole Draco and Hermiome not being together chapters *glares*)Author's Response: Hahah I'm sorry! Please don't glare :( Report Review
OMG THE FEELS WHY MUST YOU PLAY WITH MY FEELS!?!? A really great ending to a fantastic story, though, seriously!! It's sad to see our babies grow up and mature but all good things must come to an end. :) Such cute names too for the kids!! I'm glad you decided to add an epilogue, because the closure it so much better! I guess that's why JK wrote one too. ;) Once again, wonderful job with this story, I really liked it! :) xxAuthor's Response: Please apologise to your feels from me haha!
I'm glad I decided to add an epilogue too, it does feel like I have proper closure for Draco and Hermione now. I admit it took me FOREVER to think of their names, I used Shakespearean characters because they were unusual like Hermione's but different enough for magical children :)
Thank you so much for your kind reviews, I'm looking forward to reading how LMM ends! xx Report Review
Perfect. That's all I can say. How very satisfying! xxAuthor's Response: Thank you :D xxx Report Review
This is such a cute way to end this story :3 I'm so glad you done an epilogue because I thought it should of had one! I'm really sad to see this story finish but I will read your other ones because you are a brilliant author, one of my favourties! Thankyou Author's Response: Ahh, that's really lovely, thank you! I'm glad I did one too, though I'm really sad it's over now :(
I've started a next generation fic centred around Victoire Weasley, first chapter should be up soon :) Report Review
Awesome story. I loved it.Author's Response: Thank you very much :) Report Review
Oh this was such a good end to this story! I don't know how I'm going to be able to finish mine! D: You didn't have too much mushy mushy stuff in there at all! I think it was just the right amount. All of the stories I usually read are finishing up it makes me so sad :( But you wrote this so well! :) If you wanted to I'm sure you could do a companion story, nothing majorly long like this, maybe just a short story to snapshot their future lives together and whatnot. :) Great job with this story, it really was wonderful! xxAuthor's Response: Thank you! Honestly, I don't know how I finished it, it's been my baby for months! I only planned to write about 15 or so chapters but just couldn't let it go haha. Between you and me (and anyone else that reads this!) I've submitted an epilogue, it should be up either tomorrow or Friday ;)
You'll be absolutely fine ending yours, it came surprisingly naturally to me, I think you'll know when and how to write it when the time comes. I can't wait for the next chapter of LMM! x Report Review
Hey, it's Whiskey from the forums!
The first chapter was so short, I thought I might read on :)
I must admit this is my very first Dramione ever. I know, I know - impossible in the world of hp fanfic, but I've just avoided the ship like the plague, so I remained untainted until now, haha. But I'm glad I gave this one a chance!
I enjoyed that you didn't ignore the effects of the war and that a general sadness underlay Hermione's retrn to Hogwarts. Her breaking up with Ron didn't seem forced at all. Grief can both bring people together and let them drift appart, depending on the personality.
Introducing Malfoy's change with Luna's "auras" was a great touch! It's just very...Harry Pottery, you know? These little magical details that define the characters and scenery...Made me smile! (Although you did spell "aura" as "Auror" at some point :p)
I do wonder who in their right mind would make an ex-Death Eater and murderer of the most beloved wizard of all time Head Boy, though. But I suppose you will explain that in due time.
If I could offer you some CC, then it would be to maybe do more "showing" instead of "telling". The story does begin with a bit of an info-dump. Although what you tell is helpful, it doesn't exactly convey emotions that would draw in the reader. Besides, some of these things could be revealed gradually, thus creating suspence and curiosity. Just a thought!
Thanks for the swap!Author's Response: Thanks for the swap, I really enjoyed your one shot!
I'm glad you gave Dramione a chance, I think they're very well suited. I do love Ronmione too though, hence the amicable break up, I really don't like fics that make him a cheater or violent as he's just so loveable! This was the first bit of fanfiction I ever wrote so reading it back is a little cringey and I can totally accept your CC and completely agree! I do plan on revisiting this story very soon and doing some heavy editing for the earlier chapters so thank you for the feedback.
As for Draco being Head Boy, although it doesn't say so in the story (again, I'll probably change that in editing) I'd like to think that Draco would have written to or visited McGonagall before term started to ask if they would have him back and that Dumbledore's portrait would have convinced McGonagall to give him a chance to prove himself and also give him a bit of a confidence boost in returning to a school full of people who thought very little of him.
Thanks again for the swap! Report Review
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