Reading Reviews for The Spectrum of Joy
  
3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by MissesWeasley123 The Spectrum of Joy

26th October 2013:
GILLY! YOU BEAUTIFUL SOUL!

Seriously, what exactly do I say about this piece? In 500 words, you just created the most beautiful thing I've read in a very long time.

The way you started it was just breathtaking. The use of a butterfly - I don't think there's any other creature that can define Luna so well.

Your use of similes and metaphors were so well done. The descriptions were written so brilliantly, I can't believe at all that this is only 500 words!

You truly did make every word count. This was so breath taking and poetic.

She is a child, a grandmother, an old soul. This one existence, this one attempt at life cannot be her first.

That line was so powerful. You showed that Rolf saw her as so much more, I never would have thought of Luna that way, and that truly was amazing. And then, this:

She floats rather than walks and dances rather than runs.

Like, wow. You put so much beauty and passion into this, I just loved it. It was so well done, I truly mean it.

You also have the best banners lol :P

Author's Response: Nadia! Thank you so much! Oh my goodness, this review makes me feel so warm and fuzzy :)

I'm so glad you liked it and thought it had some substance :) I think this is my first piece that I posted here that I actually edited, so I did put quite a bit of work into it. I'm so happy you appreciated it!

I've always thought of Luna as kind of ethereal, so I just began writing about everything she resembled and it turned into this.

I don't know what else to say except thank you so much!

(I know I'm so lucky with my banner makers :) )

~Gilly


 Report Review

Review #2, by hpsauce The Spectrum of Joy

27th January 2013:
I love the descriptions in this. The metaphors create beautiful images that make it clear that you are VERY good at descriptive writing.
I can easily tell the character's feelings and follow him along until the final lines.
A few little errors:
'Content to reflect the ight' I think it should be 'light'.
'Words like whimsy and effervescent' I think you don't need the 'like' as I don't think it makes sense with it in there.
Other than that, a beautiful piece that flows really well.
Thanks for entering my challenge :D Results should be up, at the latest, mid-February.
Sophie

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm so glad you liked it :D I will definitely fix those errors asap.
Also, thank you for the awesome challenge, it really inspired me!
~Gill


 Report Review

Review #3, by slytherinchica08 The Spectrum of Joy

4th December 2012:
So I really liked the description in this alot! I thought that you did absolutely beautifully and found so many different ways to discribe her without actually describing her features! This was a really sweet oneshot about Rolf and his love of Luna and how marrying her was the best day of his life. My only suggestion for this to make it better would be to seperate this one giant paragraph into smaller ones so its not so daunting and easy to lose your place. I found myself skipping a line here and there because they all seemed to run into each other with having just this one paragraph instead of multiple ones. Other than that though, this was a great oneshot and very enjoyable! Great Job!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review :D
Yeah, I know, the formatting is weird right now, but I will definitely fix it.
Thanks again for stopping by :D
~Gill


 Report Review
If this is your story and you wish to respond to reviews, please login