I love the descriptions in this. The metaphors create beautiful images that make it clear that you are VERY good at descriptive writing.
I can easily tell the character's feelings and follow him along until the final lines.
A few little errors:
'Content to reflect the ight' I think it should be 'light'.
'Words like whimsy and effervescent' I think you don't need the 'like' as I don't think it makes sense with it in there.
Other than that, a beautiful piece that flows really well.
Thanks for entering my challenge :D Results should be up, at the latest, mid-February.
Sophie

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm so glad you liked it :D I will definitely fix those errors asap.
Also, thank you for the awesome challenge, it really inspired me!
~Gill

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So I really liked the description in this alot! I thought that you did absolutely beautifully and found so many different ways to discribe her without actually describing her features! This was a really sweet oneshot about Rolf and his love of Luna and how marrying her was the best day of his life. My only suggestion for this to make it better would be to seperate this one giant paragraph into smaller ones so its not so daunting and easy to lose your place. I found myself skipping a line here and there because they all seemed to run into each other with having just this one paragraph instead of multiple ones. Other than that though, this was a great oneshot and very enjoyable! Great Job!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review :D
Yeah, I know, the formatting is weird right now, but I will definitely fix it.
Thanks again for stopping by :D
~Gill

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