I really enjoy reading your story. The only thig I would change is the A/N. IMO they make your story seem way more childish than your writing ability.

You are a good story writer. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Aww.but I love my A/Ns.I might tweak a few things. Thanks!
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Great story, but it's actually Helga Hufflepuff, so if you could just change that. Thx!

Author's Response: Oh, oops. I'll get onto that!

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awesome! awesome! awesome!

Author's Response: Thanks! Thanks! Thanks!
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omggg please no more cliffies, i can't take it!

Author's Response: Oops.ha, ha, ha.yeah, there's more. Lots more. Sorry 'bout that.
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=0 write another chapter please!!! so addicted! love your other story as well you're really good!

Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I love that you say addicting. It may seem strange to get addicted to stories, but the best ones are addictive. The next chapter is validating right now, so don't worry about that. It should be validated pretty soon.
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In chapter ten... you wrote that ROSE was snogging a boy but I'm pretty damn sure you meant lily :P I don't think rose was watching rose... other then that, and some gramatical and spelling errors, great story!

Author's Response: Yeah...I've fixed that. Just validating.
Although, I could have done that. Time Turner and everything. It is possible, but in this instance, it was a mistake.
I'll read through it and fix some things. Thanks for the feedback!
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I loved it! But I think for a bit during the story you might have mixed up Lily and Rose, because you were saying the story from Rose's point of view and talking about Rose and James. At least, I assume you meant Lily...

Author's Response: Yep...many people have talked about this. It is a mistake. It is Lily. Not Rose. Sorry about any confusion. It was definitely Lily.
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"Rose is with a boy, and they're...snogging. That's just wrong." Scorpius put an arm around me, smiling softly.

James was lying on the ground, rubbing his forehead, while ROSE put her wand back in her dress pocket. I cheered, then stopped myself, but it was too late. Scorpius gave me a victorious grin.

"Oh, stop it. I'm proud of my baby cousin

...wait. Do you mean Lilly??? This part got me terribly confused, you meant Lilly, right?

But otherwise, I absolutely loved your descriptions on the costumes, and how is Vera not a Slytherin?!? Honestly.

Hope you update soon!
toodles

Author's Response: Oops. I'll fix that. Yeah, I meant Lily. Yep, Lily. Definitely Lily. I'll fix that right away. Like, right now.
Thanks. I love the costumes. I'm tempted to try and get a Venus costume for myself.
I don't know how Vera isn't a Slytherin. I think she gradually got evil, and by then it was too late. Besides, it works with her being in Gryffindor.
I will update very soon, hopefully.
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D

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Oh my Rowling! I loved this chapter! The dream about the
veil and Sirius and Fred just made me burst into tears and I
loved the twist with Lily and the map. Oh and how she
quoted Fred and George. That was brilliant! This chapter
was so heavy I was just like "Bloody hell". Loving your work!
X

Author's Response: Yeah, there was a lot of good stuff in this one. The dream is possibly the saddest bit of the whole thing. I think Lily stole the map from James. Just sayin'. And she quoted Fred and George as well. It got knocked back because I forgot to put in a disclaimer for it :(.
Thanks!
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Dr. Who thinks Fezes are cool! lol
Good party, broke up just as quick too.
I think I would have just high fived Rose and continued the party. Why spoil everyones fun?
Revenge is best served cold. Don't you think she will be expecting it?
see you next chapter.

Author's Response: One of them did, right? I've only seen like two episodes. *cringes in fear of being hurt*
Yep. Parties have a tendency to break up after a screaming match and someone fainting.
Well, Rose passed out. That was kind of the cue to pack up. Y'know, because it was Halloween/Rose's coming back to consciousness party.
That is so close to the next chapter title. It's actually 'Revenge is a Dish Best Served Magically', because it fits better. Vera thinks she's queen of the world, instead of queen of the female dogs (substitute another word there), so maybe not.
I will see you next chapter. I see all. ALL.
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D
P.S. Kidding about seeing all. I can't. But how cool would that be?

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arghh, I'm genuinely stressing over this, I need more! Don't ever stop writing because this is great stuff!!

Author's Response: I'm currently working on three stories at once, so delay is the word of the day. I don't plan on ever stopping writing. When I'm dead, I'll be a Zombie Author. So don't stress about that one, unless I decide your brains look tasty.
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Hmmm I started reading this because of your banner and the picture of Emma Stone. I have a mad crush on her (I'm a guy, don't be freaked out). I like it, it's a nice little dramatic thing going on (I'm also not very good at picking words. Sorry.).

I'm also slightly jealous of Scorpius. I mean, a girl cries TWICE in front of him and he comforts her like a boss. I'd probably run around like a chicken with its head cut off trying to get her to stop.

It's fun to read!

Author's Response: I like drama, as shown by the dreaded cliffie addiction and the events of this story so far.
Yes, Scorpius is good at comforting, but he also suffers from 'male-bigheadedness disease' (don't be offended). That means, if he get one bad sign, he does really stupid things without waiting for an explanation.
I'm glad it's fun to read. It's also fun to write.
I'm a lot funnier in this story than real life.
If only...
Ahem, anyway, thanks!
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D
P.S. I think Emma was perfect for the image of Rose. That picture basically summed up her character.

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I enjoyed the chapter, I was only a little confused at the beginning. glad you strightened it out though. Three weeks is a long time to be out of the world. I will be patient for some payback :)

Author's Response: Yeah, three weeks is a long time, but it was very dramatic. And it works well with the storyline. Gives me material for revenge, and other fun stuff to write.
It's good that you figured it out. Sometimes, even I get a little confused, and I'm the author!
At least, I think I am.
The characters may be in charge.
Now I just sound crazy.
I want payback too. Maybe a spaz attack when they see each other again.
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D

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No! What is wrong with you?! Tell me more!!! Don't just leave it like that!
And I threw a steak... I didn't see anything eating it... :'( .
But, I love Dom.
Can I be Dom?
Dom's my favourite.
I love Dom.
Yay for Dominess!
Wooo hooo!
Anyway, keep up the great work, it's awesome!
Cheers, SW.

Author's Response: I'M SORRY. CLIFFIE ADDICTION STRIKES AGAIN.
IT'S NOT MY FAULT. I BLAME THE NARGLES.
I'm sorry...maybe it got lost? Maybe another person got it instead of you. Sorry :'(
You can be Dom.
I'm glad you like Dom.
I hope that's in a non-weird way.
YAY FOR DOMINESS!
I shall keep it up! I shall! Mark my words, this be my solemn vow upon my grave that I shall keep writing!
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D

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Thanks for updating so fast im absorbed =D

Author's Response: No problem. I'm glad to hear you enjoy it.
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MORE!!! And the cliffs make it more interesting. Good job!!

Author's Response: I'll be writing more soon! My latest chapter validated yesterday, so yay! More!
I have an addiction to cliffies. Maybe it's because they make people keep reading.
I don't know.
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D

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Things might work out for the couple. Going to Brazil, look me up if your going to be nice lol

Author's Response: Wow, Brazil! I really want to go there someday.
I hope things work out for the couple. All of them. All my of my precious little couples.
*strokes possessively*
Um...let's just forget that happened.
Thanks for reviewing!
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D

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Very interested to see what happens next!

Author's Response: First of all, thanks for reading and reviewing. Second of all, LOVE THE NAME. I'm also a Ravenclaw, and proud of it!
Sometimes, I don't even know what will happen next. I had a slight setback, where it got too weird and I deleted a whole chapter and started again, but it's back on track now. Next chapter will be up soon, but it's taking a while to validate and I had to redo it to put in a disclaimer note. Oops.
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D

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Go write more now you're not allowed to sleep until I have 10 more chapters. Seriously I love this and as a guy I love dem lesbos

Author's Response: Hello, Jimmy. Always nice to have new reviewers/readers. If I don't sleep, parts of my brain will fizzle and die, and I won't be able to write anymore.
Well, I might. I could be a Zombie Author.
Thanks for reviewing!
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D

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Gee, double BAM at the start, both Vera AND Georgia attacking them?
Ugh.
I hope they run themselves off a cliff.
Oh, and I'm starting to like Scorpius.
Poor guy! Why did he have to go and kiss Georgia?! If he hadn't, she wouldn't have caused him to be in the hospital wing!
Hmm... Deslinn! Now it gets more interesting!
Keep writing, LOVE IT!
Cheers, SW.

Author's Response: DOUBLE WHAMMY.
Both the evil ones attacking the main characters.
I could make them do that, but revenge will be served eventually. In a different way.
A more cunning way.
Yay! I'm glad you like Scorp now. He works so hard for approval.
He was suffering from classic 'male-bigheaded syndrome', in which a man does something to get a girl jealous which ends disastrously.
I agree. It was stupid. But she might have done it anyway. She was obsessed, man. Like, crazy obsessed.
Deslinn...the relationship even I didn't see coming. Who'da thunk it, eh?
I have no plans of stopping writing. Currently, I am severely paralyzed, and yet I am still writing.
I'm kidding. But seriously, I'M NEVER GONNA STOP WRITING.
I love it too! And you, for reviewing!
In a non weird way!
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D

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Hehe.. I like Aislinn... drench the hungover in water I say! Drench them!
I like Japhne, but you're going to have to do a LOT of convincing to make me like ScoRose.
Love Lopsy, and I'm happy for Rosie Posie, even though I still do not like Scorpius.
And darn... another cliffhanger... WHY?! WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME WHY?!
Vera... Hmm, I could think of several things I would like to say to her, to be honest. None of them without swearing.
Cheers, SW.

Author's Response: Drenching was to wake them. Potion was to cure them. I liked the idea of drenching them.
Why do I need to convince you? They're a cute couple! And I love love love Japhne!
I LOVE LOPSY. I NEED A T-SHIRT OR SOMETHING FOR THE LOPSY FAN CLUB.
Rosie Posie will not be happy you called her that. She hates it. Trust me.
Why don't you like Scorpius? He's a little...too boyish, but I think he's cute.
I HAVE A SICK ADDICTION. I NEED HELP.
Vera needs a stern talking to. But she'd have to be restrained. I can't tell you what I'd say, because my answer would be reported, and I don't want that to happen. It would have a lot of asterixes.
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Hmmm... I must try throwing a party next time I punch one of my friends...
I'm joking. They'll just punch me back and then we'll be cool.
But I think I'd throw the party anyway. Because I like parties.
I still don't think I like Scorpius. Siriusly, the guy went out with Georgia - GEORGIA - while he liked Rose! Geez, what the heck is wrong with him?!
I agree with the waterslide thing, though.
Nice chapter, good that they're all cool again (sorry, I'm liking the word 'cool' at the minute), and etc.
Keep writing, enjoyed it - as always!
Cheers, SW.

Author's Response: I like parties too. You'll see evidence in later chapters.
Scorpius. Didn't. Go. Out. With. Georgia.
He used her to make Rose jealous.
It worked, too.
It's classic male tactics.
I want waterslides to replace stairs worldwide. Even regular slides would be great.
S'all cool now, sis. S'all cool.
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I don't like this chapter.
End of review.
Kidding. I'm still going to review, but I'm upset now :'( .
I like Lulu. I want Lulu. Lulu is now mine.
Lulu... that's a funny name, isn't it?
When you say it out loud it doesn't even sound like a name. More like gibberish.
I. Hate. Vera.
She's a cow. I can't say worse than that in a review.
Though, to be honest, if I were James, I'd suspend Rose too.
She needs to make it up with them.
And Scorpius.
With... cookies? Cookies always make things better.
COOKIE MONSTER.
Anyway, I'm rambling on too much, so I'm going to stop now. But siriusly, fix this.
Cheers, SW.

Author's Response: I don't like this chapter either.
End of reply.
Also kidding. And I am also upset.
No, Lulu is mine. Mine only. I own her. Get your own Pygmy Puff.
Lulu is not a funny name. It's a cute name. It's short for Lucinda. But this Lulu is not short for anything. It's just Lulu.
I. Hate. Vera. More.
I would say worse, but people would be angry, and I don't like people being angry. So I shall say this...she is a big cow with air for brains!
I do agree with James. She does need to be punished. But praised also. For punching Vera.
She will make it up to them! By Chapter Six, using a mix of alcohol, manipulation and snogging, she will make it up to everyone.
Snogging is only for one person though.
COOKIES ARE GREAT COMFORT FOOD.
Trust me. One can never have enough cookies.
I love the Cookie Monster. He was my favourite character on Sesame Street.
Maybe because I loved cookies as much as him.
I'm also rambling now. I will fix this, don't worry!
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D

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Congrats! and welcome back.
I did like the chapter, and was surprised with another Cliffe. lol I can't wait to hear what Vera has to say.

Author's Response: Oh, Vera will have lots to say, and none of it appropriate for anyone under the ages of fifteen. She is not a happy chappy.
Did I just say that? Ehh...
I know, I'm just throwing cliffies out like there's no tomorrow. The next chapter has one as well, and the one after. Sorry.
Thank you for reviewing!
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D

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Shock horror! Lily is a Seer!
Joking. I'm talking about Rose snapping. Ob...viously.
Because of a dream? Siriusly? Why Rose, why?!
Please don't regret making her punch Vera though. I liked that bit.
I loved the reappearance of the dreaded rock cake. If you don't mind, I might steal that, seeing as you stole my idea with the whole 'he will stab you with a fork if you go near his food' in the last chapter.
Ok, so you used James for that, and I used Fred, but still.
I want my rock cakes.
DOES GEORGIA LIKE SCORPIUS?!?!?!?!
It cannot be!
I won't hurt you for making Rose a horrible person in this chapter, but only because I liked the part about Vera getting bashed.
Cheers, SW.

Author's Response: No, Lily is not a Seer, but at least one of our esteemed bunch of lovable characters is... dun, dun, dun! *dramatic music*.
I HATED making Rosie do this. She was already tense from all the weird emotions, and besides, she's fifteen. Hello, hormones? I enjoyed punching Vera. She had it coming.
I have a love of rock cakes. Not to eat, though. Although I did find a site with a recipe for them...ehh. Sorry if I have unintentionally stolen anything from anyone without you or me knowing. Trust me, I try to be original, but sometimes, my 'ideas' are really me remembering something on a subconscious level that I read, heard, saw, etc. So sorry if I accidentally copied you, or anyone for that matter.
Georgia, Georgia, Georgia...what can be said that hasn't been said? Psychotic, insane, in desperately love with Scorpius...and yes, that is true. But it's partly the whole 'wanting what she can't have' thing.
Thank you for not hurting me, I like being safe. Very very much. Almost as much as I like Belgian Chocolate, hot chocolate, Freddo Frogs...this list has a lot of chocolate on it. I'm such a pig. Aanyway, thanks thanks thanks a trillion for reviewing, and also for reading my strange impulses that I somehow convert into readable stories!
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D
P.S. You can have your rock cakes. Don't eat them, however tempted you might be. It will hurt you, possibly for quite a few years.

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