Hello there! Iím here with your second of three reviews :D
I love how we all interpret fan fiction in different ways. I have a one-shot about when Bill and Fleur got together and itís quite different to this one, and it always amazes how you never really come across the same thing.
I really liked how they first met, and how Fleur noticed so much about him. It just showed how they ended up later on. I thought it was really cute the way Bill waited for Fleur after her interview, as it kind of showed how he knew that Fleur was something special. Then the cute thoughts about her afterwards were lovely.
Aw and the way Bill asked her out on the date, and the way she was mentally planning to arrive late. I thought it was so cute the way she got there and couldnít see him at first, and the disappointment when she realised he wasnít there. Of course Bill would never let her down, and it you could sense how pleased she was.
I loved the remaining flashbacks too, it was really nice to show snippets of their life together. I think my favourite one of it was the one when Fleur realised that she was pregnant, as you started with something innocuous Ė beans on toast Ė so I think the reader was surprised as Bill was.
I would perhaps suggest re-reading this as there were a few spacing issues at times, and I noticed an I which wasnít capitalised :)
I really enjoyed this one-shot, and the ending was lovely!
-Kiana :DAuthor's Response: Awh thank you so much for such an awesome review!! It's so generous of you to review back so quickly :D
I will definitely check out your one-shot - it sounds awesome! I really just wanted to sum-up all the best (in my opinion) bits in their lives, and the pregnancy thing surprised me too! I was just planning on writing about their cute married relationship, and then it just occurred to me how I could tie in children. I wanted the ending to be quite satisfying, so I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)
Thank you for the constructive critiscm, too, I do struggle with spacing and the format of my stories. I will go back through it and check!
Thank you so much for a lovely long second review! :D Report Review
Beautiful. I loved every second of it.Author's Response: That's so sweet of you thank you - I'm very glad you think so - this review made my day :)
Thank you so much for your review! It's so lovely of you! :D Report Review
I like it, especially how you made the quote fit in with the story and it wasn't glaringly obviously too, especially how you changed some of it to french.
I like the story, how it goes over Fleur and Bill's life, it's sweet. I especially like the part where they met and the waiter thinks she's been stood up, it's cute, especially how he can see that they are in love before they do.
A really great story and thanks for entering! :)Author's Response: Thank you so much that's so sweet of you!! I just wanted an excuse to use a bit of french ;) Ah this review is so lovely I've read it like three times, thank you.:) Report Review
I absolouty love this! Bill and his manly macho way of making beans and toast made me laugh. This is excellently done, and I've never really liked Fleur/Bill but I really like it now :)!Author's Response: Aww thank you so much!! I happen to love Bill/Fleur, I think they're such a sweet couple :) I'm thrilled you like it, thank you :D Report Review
You are awesome. I LOVE FLEUR. And you wrote her so well, I loved this. And just for me? *squeals and faints*
I particularly liked the scene with the children at the end. Thank you for this. You are wonderful.
And I &hearts you.Author's Response: My pleasure Val, you awesome person!!! You're just too fambubblybumshus! :) Report Review
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